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    How do you avoid powergaming in roleplay?: For you to know something will happen but your in game character will not know about it.
    How does metagaming disrupt fair roleplay?: Making a character be over powered or unrealistic in a certain situation.
    Status: Accepted

 He looks the man up and down observing his fine clothes “Hello, I have come to this lovely city in seek of adventure and companions. How are you on this fine day good sir.”  He asked forcing a slight smile ’]


Character Name: Mavin Lunes
Character Race: SNOW_ELF
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 38
Physical Description: Pale skin, silver hair, grey eyes. He wears a black cloak. He is slim and 5'6.
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Hi there! As you can see, your app is almost ready! Just a few changes you need to make, but don’t worry - you are doing great!

- Your Characters last name is Moonbrook; an already established family name, I’m afraid,, If you could edit this, would be greatly appreciated!! ❤️

- Your characters eyes cannot turn red when they are mad or protective – your character cannot have any sort of magical ability, colour-changing eyes included, as all magic-related things must be learnt from teachers in game. Please change this. ❤️

- While your character /can/ have two different eye colours – it is not always recommended, however this is just a personal point – up to you. White isn’t generally an eye colour used, though – perhaps you’d mean grey? Adding to this; I don’t think your characters skin would be a ‘pale blue’, more likely just having a blue tint to it.

- Your bio is quite short, and doesn’t seem to include any lore references – please extend this to at least 10 sentences long, with at least 1 lore reference! Here is a link to the wiki, you may find it useful in looking for lore references ❤️

WIKI

https://wikia.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Snow_Elves

- You also might wish to remember that LotC is set in a medieval-fantasy sort of era – so while rainbow shirts and flowercrowns would be possible, not quite in the same way you’d see today. Just letting you know with this one, up to you if you wish to change it ❤️

- Your skin doesn’t really match up with your description of your character. The skin has blue-grey hair and eyes, with a regular peachy skin tone, while your description states ‘pale blue skin, white and silver hair with pale blue tips’. It also states he wears a flower crown and rainbow shirt – however the skin doesn’t seem to display this. Here is a link to the skin archive, where you can find skins that are free to use, reference from, or edit to fit your character. Please do change either the skin to fit description, or vice versa ❤️

https://sites.google.com/view/skinarchive/home

- Your roleplay scenario is alright, however if you could format it more like the example (speech marks around speech (”) and actions afterwards) that would be amazing! ❤️

You’ll be given 24 hours to correct the changes above. Once you are done correcting, please contact me!

Whenever you are done, or have any questions, feel free to message me via the forums, or in-game with /message puffables! If I’m not around there, you can add me on discord at duckybreb#4385.

If you still need help, make sure to check the wiki! WIKI

 

If you need to contact me, or need help,  you can join the new player discord here : https://discord.gg/Zr4EpNa

❤️

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Hi there! As you can see, your app is almost ready! Just a few changes you need to make, but don’t worry - you are doing great!

- Your bio doesn’t seem to include any lore references – please do make sure to have at least 1 lore reference! Here is a link to the wiki, you may find it useful in looking for lore references ❤️

WIKI

https://wikia.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Snow_Elves

 

- Your bio also seems to include mention of a wizard who talked to him about ‘many spells like magic missile’ etc. I’m afraid that firstly, that is not quite how magic on LotC works, and secondly, your character cannot know or have learnt any magic. All magic related things must be learnt from teacher in game. Just another reminder; LotC isn’t quite like DnD or anything similar, this might be something to keep in mind while writing bits of your application ❤️

 

- This is just to inform you, but elves are generally considered adults at 50 – meaning a 19 year old elf may be considered a child by some. It is up to you whether you think this fitting, or would wish to edit your characters age. ❤️

 

- [Repeated] Your roleplay scenario is alright, however if you could format it more like the example (speech marks around speech (”) and actions also included [as a second example, ‘The man looked the stranger up and down, inspecting him, before giving a nod of approval “So – where did you say you were going?” he asked, tilting his head to the right.’] ) that would be amazing! ❤️

 

You’ll be given 24 hours to correct the changes above. Once you are done correcting, please contact me!

Whenever you are done, or have any questions, feel free to message me via the forums, or in-game with /message puffables! If I’m not around there, you can add me on discord at duckybreb#4385.

If you still need help, make sure to check the wiki! WIKI

 

If you need to contact me, or need help,  you can join the new player discord here : https://discord.gg/Zr4EpNa

❤️

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Hi there, as you can see, you have been accepted onto the server! Well done on your application, you’re doing great! So now, I welcome you to the wonderful community of LotC!

 

Need help? Feel free to contact me via the forums or my discord [duckybreb#4385]. I’m often online too, so you can message me with /message puffables to find me in game. If I’m not around you can also use the new player discord which is right here! : https://discord.gg/Zr4EpNa

You can also use /creq ingame and me or my fellow CT members can help you that way!

Lastly, here is the new player guide, I recommend you look over it!

https://wikia.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=New_Player_Guide

Have a great time roleplaying, and I look forwards to seeing you around in future!

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