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By Omehr

    • Rules: Yes
    Referral: Through a Friend
    How do you avoid powergaming in roleplay?: ``Hey Marco.`` "How do you know my name?."``Oh i can read people's Minds. `` The definition of Metagaming is You knowing everything about someone Before they tell you This i not needed cause The villian of your rp Could know everything about you Without
    How does metagaming disrupt fair roleplay?: *Aria would Stab Frank In the head Killing him* Basically Powergaing is When Someone Just KIlls or Hurts your ocs without thier permission this is not needed In rp Cause then if it was allowed then everyone would be Killing everyone in the middle of thie
    Status: Denied
Character Name: Apollo
Character Race: Human
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 20
Physical Description: Apollo has brown skin, and grey eyes. Some say he is short, but he is actually inbetween short and tall, 5'9.
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Farryn

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Hello there, Omehr,

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. I have listed them below so that you can make the required changes. Be aware that you have 24 hours to make these application, otherwise your application will be denied.

 

Edits required:

  • Definitions: You need to explain powergaming and metagaming in a bit more detail than just one sentence. I suggest including an example of powergaming and metagaming through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly, along with an explanation of how it doesn't benefit RP.
  • Biography: You need to expand more on your character's biography, such as where he was born, what certain events happened to him, etc. This is where you flesh out your character and explain how they became the person they are the moment you start playing them on the server. I also suggest explaining how his parents died  (why was his father sentenced to death?), what his goals are, and what skills he acquired. Be aware you will need to include one or more piece of LotC lore within your biography, such as city names, etc.
  • Punctuation and Grammar: Please work on your punctuation and grammar within your application so that it is more easier for me to read up the changes.

 

Aside from that, you got the basics of the application down. Remember, you have 24 hours to make the requested changes on your application. When you are done with the edits, simply post a comment on your application and tag me through @farryn or by PMs - that way, I will know you have made the edits and want the application reviewed again.

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Omehr

Um I finished it sir

 

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56 minutes ago, Farryn said:

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Um Yeah I edited it Like you sad 

 

 

 

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Farryn
16 hours ago, Omehr said:

I'm done

 

 

You still need to expand more on your definitions and biography a bit, such as explaining what skills he has, along with any strengths and weaknesses he has. And once again, can you please use full stops, commas, and fix some spelling errors as reading your application is really hard.

 

You have an additional 24 hours to correct this application.

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Farryn

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While you did make the edits to an extent, they weren't long enough to give a clear backstory of your character and your definitions of metagaming and powergaming are still hard to read.

You can reapply within three hours.

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