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  • Rules: Yes
    Referral: Through a Friend
    How do you avoid powergaming in roleplay?: Using out-of-character knowledge
    How does metagaming disrupt fair roleplay?: Demanding of somethng from another roleplayer
    Status: Denied

Character Name: Azalea
Character Race: Halfling
Character Gender: Female
Character Age: 18
Physical Description: She has short dirty blonde hair covered with a monster hat. She has black and white clothes. Her eyes are light blue. Her skin is pale.
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Hello there, xx_kithaskat_xx,

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. I have listed them below so that you can make the required changes. Be aware that you have 24 hours to make these application, otherwise your application will be denied.

 

Edits required:

  • Definitions: You need to explain powergaming and metagaming in a bit more detail than just one sentence. I suggest including an example of powergaming and metagaming through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly, along with an explanation of how it doesn't benefit RP. A sentence alone does not fully explain.
  • Race: A halfling is not a half human, half elf. he halflings are in fact a race of very small people who focus on a very laidback and peaceful life and focus more on farming and having fun. Think of the Halflings from Lord of the Rings. I believe the proper term you are looking for is Half Elf, not halfling. Therefore either change your character's race to Half Elf, or perhaps make them into a halfling.
  • Biography: You need to expand more on your character's biography, such as where she was born, what certain events happened to him, etc. This is where you flesh out your character and explain how they became the person they are the moment you start playing them on the server. I also suggest explaining where her parents are, what her goals are, and what skills he acquired - such as if he's most skilled in one area or weak in another. Be aware you will need to include one or more piece of LotC lore within your biography, such as city names, etc, and a few sentences will not work so do try and write at least a paragraph about your character's backstory.
  • Skin: Just curious but why does your character wear a green monster hat? I advise explaining the reason why in the backstory, since it is a very unique trait and would certainly be a tale worth explaining to other characters if your application is accepted.

Aside from that, you got the basics of the application down. Remember, you have 24 hours to make the requested changes on your application. When you are done with the edits, simply post a comment on your application and tag me through @farryn or by PMs - that way, I will know you have made the edits and want the application reviewed again.

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