LordCommander 163 Author Share Posted September 18, 2017 Reworks Completed: -Revamped Backstory after @Sporadic's Comments (Thank you @The Fire Mind for helping) -Alignment Changed from True Neutral to Lawful Evil -Titles Changed "The Eternal Soldier" to "The Forgotten General" -Portfolio changed "Strength" to "Physical Prowess." -Minor Changes to the Goregoat -Went through and tried to fix most of the grammer mistakes. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sporadic 2799 Share Posted September 18, 2017 Good stuff, bud. Thank you for the edits. 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted September 20, 2017 Thank you for submitting your piece! This is now under review and you can expect a verdict in roughly a week. 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted September 21, 2017 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordCommander 163 Author Share Posted September 21, 2017 5 minutes ago, Dunstan said: 0 Upvote Not my type of Metal, but the Iron-Clad would be pleased with this. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted September 28, 2017 This lore is pending, you will be contacted regarding the issues raised by the lore team so you may fix it. You have 2 weeks to make the changes, beginning from when you are contacted. Once you have edited your piece, send me a forum PM and your piece will be reviewed to ensure the changes have been made. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordCommander 163 Author Share Posted October 3, 2017 After speaking with the LT, I have made some rewriting. -Made it more clear that the Tenerabras and Goregoats are Manifestations of Vendicta instead of patrons. -Removed Vengeance, Physical Prowess, and Rage, and replaced with Conquest and Wrath. -Overlaps with existing deities are now removed. -Added in the Adjective for a Cultist/Follower of Argos Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted October 12, 2017 This lore is being reviewed again 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted October 19, 2017 Once more, pending Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FreeHongKong 934 Share Posted November 4, 2017 Self Denied at request of OP. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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