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Argos the Iron-Clad; Daemon of War, Wrath and Conquest


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Reworks Completed:

-Revamped Backstory after @Sporadic's Comments (Thank you @The Fire Mind for helping)

-Alignment Changed from True Neutral to Lawful Evil

-Titles Changed "The Eternal Soldier" to "The Forgotten General"

-Portfolio changed "Strength" to "Physical Prowess."

-Minor Changes to the Goregoat

-Went through and tried to fix most of the grammer mistakes. 

 

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Good stuff, bud. Thank you for the edits.

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Thank you for submitting your piece! This is now under review and you can expect a verdict in roughly a week.

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5 minutes ago, Dunstan said:

 

 

Not my type of Metal, but the Iron-Clad would be pleased with this.

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This lore is pending, you will be contacted regarding the issues raised by the lore team so you may fix it. You have 2 weeks to make the changes, beginning from when you are contacted. Once you have edited your piece, send me a forum PM and your piece will be reviewed to ensure the changes have been made.

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After speaking with the LT, I have made some rewriting.

-Made it more clear that the Tenerabras and Goregoats are Manifestations of Vendicta instead of patrons.

-Removed Vengeance, Physical Prowess, and Rage, and replaced with Conquest and Wrath.

-Overlaps with existing deities are now removed. 

-Added in the Adjective for a Cultist/Follower of Argos

 

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