[✗] [Rewrite] Ferals: The Hounds of Morea

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Ferals: The Hounds of Morea

 

 

The creation of the first ferals is an old story passed down from generation to generation.  Details lost to time, and others exaggerated to the point of seeming completely made up and unrealistic. The story begins in a very distant land, far off in a very dense and deep jungle.  Four hunters known to hunt only the most dangerous and exotic game stalked these trees, searching for a new and glorious prize to take home. Drawn to the forest by the rumors of a massive great white wolf, the idea of this elusive prize drawing them deeper and deeper into the unexplored wilderness.

 

The four hunters traveled for weeks, leaving behind them a wake of death and destruction, disturbing the natural balance and pristine beauty of the unexplored jungles.  These hunters were experts in their trade, knowing how to track, hunt, and kill their prey with relative ease and making their journey an easy one. They were however cruel and unusual to the things they killed. Commonly leaving traps filled with animals and watching them starve as they moved on, letting the creatures remain trapped and laughing while they continued on their hunt.  Eventually after a weeks worth of travel the hunters found themselves lost in what they assumed to be the very heart of the jungle they had entered.

 

The dense forest opened up into a pristine clearing giving way to a small pond and quiet sounds, almost deafening compared to the lively songs of the forest.  As the hunters moved forward quietly and remaining low to the ground, they found themselves back exactly where they started, not seeming to have moved an inch.  They tried again going another way, and another, only to be met with the same end results. They began to panic then push forward fruitlessly before a loud, ear piercing howl resonated throughout the clearing, though no animal in sight to create such a noise.  As they picked up their pace running now blindly through the forest, time would passed, slowly fading from day to dusk with the light slowly leaving them. With the sun finally set over the horizon, darkness overcame the forest. For the first time the hunters felt fear in their bodies as they slowed their pace, exhausted from trying to break free of the trap they seemed to have walked into.  As they finally stopped looking around, the moon had risen in the air above them, seeing it was not a normal white moon, but instead replaced with a full crimson blood moon.

 

Panicked would consume the hunters once more as they started looking around. A hint of a cave set off to one side of the pond, something that hadn’t been there before, or perhaps they had just overlooked. They rushed forward now to seek shelter in the cave from whatever hunted them in the clearing.  As they entered the cave, suddenly another ear piercing howl rang out, causing them to stumble and falter until the hunters dropped to their knees.The cave now engulf in darkness where they fell, turning back to notice that the entrance had now vanished. As they looked up from their positions on the ground, a massive white wolf emerged from deep within the cave. Its eyes illuminating a golden hue as the creature locks on the four hunters. With a parting of its maw, it let forth another howl this time, causing a sudden shift of images to appear. The wolves that the hunters had slaughtered for sport and fun along the way slowly crept forward into view, snarling viciously and baring their fangs as they moved closer and closer.  The hunters froze in place on the ground from the sight, unable to move and only watch as these wolves made their way over. Yet strangely the wolves did not lunge or attack the hunters. Instead, they moved forward going to allow the blood running from their open wounds to drip and flow into the hunters mouths. Once they had finished their task the wolves vanished as the white wolf lifted its head to let forth a bellowing howl that shook the very walls within the cavern and down to their very souls.

 

This howl itself stirred something within the hunters, cracking and twisting them as they doubled over to scream out in pain. Bones begin to snap and extend, fur sprouts from all over their bodies, long snouts and sharp canine teeth push from their faces, and the whites of their eyes change and swirl with a deep golden hue that similar to the white wolf.  With the transformation now complete, the white wolf revealed itself to be The Mani Spirit Morea, Demigod of the Wild and Prince of the Wolves and Hounds.

 

He stated how he was displeased with their actions, the way they defiled nature, and the purity of the hunt. Thus he had cursed and forced them to be protectors of the things they had destroyed.  They would now also become the hunted, seen as monsters to men, their own ambitions turned against them, and making them the ultimate prize for any hunter. With this the Mani cast them from the cave, still deep in the dead of night as a hunger, one like they had never felt before, consumed and forced them to feel the urge to hunt and sate it. Their new found senses and forms similar to wolves in their Lupine state, giving them new found knowledge and skills for their hunt.

Once morning broke, the four found themselves now at the edge of the forest they once entered long ago, men no more, covered in the blood of the hunt from the night before with their clothings ripped and torn to shreds around them. The hunters realized then that they could not see, hear, or feel as well as they could before, their eyes all giving off a slight golden glow in the sunlight. With this new curse now upon them, they quickly fled to hide in the wilds of the lands, forever feeling a deep sense to protect the balance, and the creatures that lived in it.

 

The four Alphas, after spreading out, sought after those just like them, hunters and poachers with no respect for the balance or the purity of the hunt.   They would find them and turn the hunters into the hunted, waiting for night before attacking them in their shifted forms. With a bite into their own flesh and pouring their blood into the mouths of these hunters, the Alphas let out a howl to begin twisting the souls and cursing them to protect the thing they loved to hunt and destroy. These once normal descendants now turned feral with the same burning hunger, and sense to protect the balance that they had helped to destroy.  With this, the Alphas spread out forming their packs, taking places in nature to protect as their own, forcing others they deemed a problem to help their cause.

 

~ The Feral ~

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The lycans in the realm known as Ferals are born of a curse given to them by an Alpha Feral. Those that know the signs of a feral can tell any descendant to be one by their weakness against silver. Ferals won’t even be able to touch the material of silver without being burned heavily. Due to this, they will avoid it at all costs. Things such as high pitched noises, fire, and bright flashes are weaknesses against ferals only within their beastial form. Holy magics will be ineffective when it comes to healing a Feral in either of their forms yet its smiting properties can only harm them when they’re in their feral form. The smell and sight of blood can send a feral into a frenzy as well. This however is all dependent on how much blood the Feral smells. A small amount of blood, such as a nose bleed or a sliced hand, will make a Feral recoil. Large amounts of blood from a large bleeding wound or something more serious will cause a Feral to lose control in their Descendant state. They will then force shift into their Feral form and go on a rampage. Voidal magic is also something that will affect a Feral greatly. If someone that possesses a voidal magic becomes a Feral they will be much weaker due to their connection to the void poisoning their physique. As such it is unnatural for there to be an Alpha Feral that is also a void mage. They will be weaker than normal Ferals that have no had any connection to the void whatsoever.

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A feral grows considerably in size after their transformation. About one foot taller than when in their descendant form. Their strength is enhanced to that of a large wolf yet their speed is compared to that of a deer. Agile and quick, able to traverse most landscapes with ease whether it be snow or soil, the feral’s paws act as large pads that propel them forwards in assistance with their long legs. Their claws are very sharp but are at risk of breaking when striking numerous times against armor that is metal. A common misconception is that the Feral are always primal and animalistic. When a Feral has fed or is not on the hunt for a meal, they’re known to be quite docile creatures if not threatened. A feral will tend to look very much like they do when not transformed. The individual feral chooses their fur color (natural tones such as white, black, brown). Scars and blemishes carry over so a small cut when in feral form will appear as a large gash in descendant form. Ferals also are not the most intelligent beings, they can be easily tricked by scent misdirection or misdirection in general if the scent of the assailant is masked.

 

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The Purpose of the Feral

The purpose of the Feral is to serve the Mani Morea and protect the natural balance and cycle in a more combative way. The Druii are meant to keep the balance as instructed by the Aspects, yet the Ferals were given the task to protect the balance and natural cycle in a vicious and 'feral' manner unwavering in their duties to the balance. They are tasked to destroy and slaughter any that seek to ruin the balance for personal or detrimental gain. They are meant to be guardians of the Mani and the creatures of the woodlands whilst upholding the principles of Cernunnos as beasts of the hunt. It is rumored that Nemiisae is jealous of the creatures but that is myth among those that follow the Aspects.

 

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How to make a Feral

https://www.lordofthecraft.net/forums/topic/169723-%E2%9C%93-addition-ritual-of-the-three-moons/

 

Transformation – During a transformation into or out of their lupine bodies, a Feral enters a state of immobility and is unable to defend itself while its body grows and features become more canine. This leaves the creature vulnerable to any strike during their (4 full emote) transformation. Females that shift while pregnant will KILL their unborn baby, and as such females go to great lengths while pregnant to avoid shifting or accidental shifting.

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Removal of the Curse:

 

Should a feral wish to remove the curse, a newly made feral has one year (one irl week) to seek a cleric, paladin, or Ascended to have it removed. When removed, the process is a rather painfilled one, and either causes them to suffer long-term negative effects, or permanent negative effects. Ranging from, but not limited to, short-sightedness, lack of smell, deafness, slow reflexes, and low pain tolerance. Older ferals that decide to leave, their senses will remained dulled permanently as their bodies have had a longer time to adjust to the changes that being feral brings.

 

If a feral proves to be too problematic, the existing alphas, minimum two, at most four meet. If they decide to remove it, they gather around the feral, slice a part of their body and drain their blood. When sufficiently drained, all present Alphas howl, stripping the descendant of their curse permanently. Those removed this way will NEVER be allowed to become a feral again on that persona. This is not a pk (unless the player chooses to), the monks will find the body and bring the person back, losing all memories that lead up to the death.

 

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Challenging:

 A challenge is when a feral disagrees with an alpha, they will challenge them for whatever reason, like the alpha being considered weak, or they made a choice that put the pack into a dangerous situation. If they win in combat, the alpha spirit will be transferred to them, if the challenger loses, then they’re put in their place.

 

Rules of Challenging:

 

1. Before a challenge is issued, the challengers can both make a single request should one or the other lose. The Alpha can make the second term, and must be agreed upon by both parties. If one disagrees, the challenge is forfeit.

 

2. In a Challenge, the Ferals (only if there are two Ferals challenging one another) must fight the Challenge in Feral Form and not in human form until the Challenge ends. This rule ensures a fair fight and also allows the Feral fighters to fight in full potential.
 

3. Only those that have been a feral for four years (one ooc month) are allowed to Challenge the Alpha. An outsider can challenge the Alpha for the title, however, it must have at least two of the pack members back the outsider up in the challenge.

 

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Descendant Form

Physical Appearance: Despite gaining feralism, the Descendant does not lose their previous form. Instead they keep it, and with it most of their humanity. However, it is in this form that Ferals are the safest. Ferals in Descendant Form are just what they appear. This form has no elongated sharp canine teeth or golden sclera.

 

Physical Attributes:  In their Descendant forms however they will not have any boons whatsoever unlike their feral counterparts. Instead the opposite effect will happen and the Feral will have worse senses than that of normal descendants. Due to this a Feral in their Descendant form their eyesight will be either near sighted or far sighted. Their sense of smell will be as though their nose is clogged even though it isn’t. It will be a lot harder for them to smell even the strongest of smells. The weaknesses of a normal Feral will still affect them while they are in their Descendant form.

 

Magical Abilities and Weapons: All aside from holy magic. Ferals can use weapons and magic in Descendant Form. See list of magics below.

 

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Feral Form

Strength : The Feral exhibits the strength of a large wolf, muscle structure and tendons become elongated and strengthened to allow clawing and brutal thrashing to occur. Their tensile jaw strength is able to snap a bone should they latch onto an unpadded or unarmored piece of flesh. However, their teeth are unable to bite through any sort of metal but can create dents to latch onto the material. Their claws are able to cause deep cuts but are unable to break through metal or plate.

 

Agility : Very akin to their canine companions, the speed of a Feral is often compared to a deer or hound. Their padded feet allow for them to easily traverse over any sort of landscape. Their hind legs become digitigrade which allows their movement to be similar to a horse when on all fours.

 

Smell : A feral can smell blood or scents from a great distance away. (20 Blocks). Due to their large snouts, a Feral is able to assimilate a scent with a substance or creature which allows their hunting capabilities to be keen and mind ready for whatever prey they’re seeking to hunt. The feral has one elven hour to track the scent before it fully dissipates from the air. If the scent is fresh, they’ll have an easier time tracking it. The scents can be masked by hiding in a group of other descendants, perfumes, taking a bath, etc

 

Vision : Due to the ocular growth of the Feral, their pupils grow much larger, allowing them to take in more light and perceive the world in a more clear way. They’re able to see minute movements and sometimes even heartbeats if it is rapid enough.

 

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How the Different Magic Groups affect being Feral

 

Voidal Magics: Like in their descendant form, a feral that uses voidal magics will physically be weaker then those who don’t use them. This also carries over into one’s feral form as well making the enhanced boons given in this form weaker than a normal feral making them as strong as a normal descendant. This effecting one from becoming an Alpha.

 

Dark Magics: Shades/Frost Witches/Undead/Necros/Mystics/Striga/Naz’Therak/Strength of the Abyss/Thallassos/Izkuthi cannot become ferals. Morea will reject the offered person because they are both a perversion of nature and a threat to the balance. Thulean/Blood Mage ferals will be more akin towards monsters, enraging more often, going on killing sprees more often.

 

Deity Magics: As their souls are protected via their various patrons, most holy magic wielders cannot become ferals. This includes Paladins, Ascended, Clerics, Azdrazi,  Their connection to their patron cleanses it before it could even take root, aside from druids as they dont have the same soul cleansing as other holy magic users. The only Deific magic that will be able to become ferals are Druids.

 

_(OOC: If your soul is already altered in any way shape or form, the curse will have no affect on your soul)

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Weaknesses:

 

Fire: Flame is also anyone’s worst enemy, yet even more so for a Feral. Within the Feral state, their increased sense of keen eyesight allows flame to blind the Feral temporarily when put close to the ocular area of the Ferals. The contrast of light on the golden sclera of the eyeball allows the reflection to cause the eyelids to glaze over with a thick coat of slime from the eyelids in order to protect the creature from losing its sight, thus temporarily blinding the creature. Also the dry and matted hair of the Feral is easily set alight by the tiniest lick of flame due to the dry properties of its coat.In descendant form, they will actively avoid going near open flames, due to the increased fear of fire, however fire will affect them like any other Descendant.

 

Silver: A material that maims both the soul and the physical body of the Feral. It appears as an extremely bright glowing object to a Feral and causes them not to wish for anything to do with it. It also causes the tainted blood of the Feral to sizzle and boil when it makes contact with the corrupt substance. Just a simple touch is enough to form a third degree burn, prolonged contact will cut through the ferals body, like a 1000 degree knife through butter.

 

High Pitched Sounds: A feral within their beast like state has a very high sense of hearing, much like their canine counterparts. However, should a high pitched sound be emitted then it could potentially sedate or cause the creature to pass out from the auditory stress of the volume that would cause immense pressure on the Feral’s head causing it to become distraught or even unconscious. In Descendant form, the Feral can handle high pitched sounds as much as any other Descendant.

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Bright Flashes:  At night, the sudden burst of an electrical evolutionist's magic could cause the Feral in their beast like state to become blinded for a few minutes (3 emotes). This is due to the fact that the Feral must adjust to the dark setting it is in and it’s eyes are meant for slow changes in light, not sudden flashes thus their weakness to the brightness of flame and silver. Within Descendant form, it is normal like how a Descendant can handle bright flashes.

 

Can not use Weapons: A Feral in their beast state is unable to wield any type of weapon due to the sheer size of its hands and its inability to use its muscles like a descendant can when using a sword or axe. Their paws are simply too large and claws too long for the creature to successfully use any type of weapon effectively. In Descendant Form, any Feral can use weapons like any other Descendant.

 

Inability to wield Magic: While in their transformed state, a Feral is unable to use magic due to their brain being reversed to a more primitive level. The Creature is not able to tap into their mana pool or concentrate enough to wield magic.

 

Weak to Holy Magics: The affliction of the Ferals make their soul in their beast like state is inherently corrupt by nature, in turn Deific magics such as the Ascended Arts, Clerical Arts, and Xannic Arts can cause the same effect on the feral as it would to a ghoul or other creature with a corrupt soul. In Descendant Form, Holy Magics will NOT affect the Feral in any way except how it would normally affect a Descendant.The only difference is that within both forms, Holy Magics cannot heal them.

 

Transformation: During a transformation into or out of their lupine bodies, a Feral enters a state of immobility and is unable to defend itself while its body grows and features become more canine. This leaves the creature vulnerable to any strike during their (4 full emote) transformation. Females that shift while pregnant will KILL their unborn baby, and as such females go to great lengths while pregnant to avoid shifting or accidental shifting.

 

Exhaustion: After their form is reverted, the feral in question will become extremely fatigued and weakened. They become unable to transform for the rest of that day.  Due to a feral’s connection with the night, a feral will find themselves sluggish and tired during the die making their actions and movements slowed. At night however a feral would find themselves with renewed energy and a bit hyper, this however gives no extra benefits apart from their mind being a bit sporadic.

 

Senses: When in Descendant form, their senses will be dulled. Sight will be reduced, either taking the form of near sightedness or far sightedness. Hearing will be slightly dulled, things will sound slightly muffled to them, almost as if they have water or cotton stuffed in their ears.  Their sense of smell would also be weakened like having a cold, this also transfers over to one's sense of taste giving things a more bland taste, but not taking away from taste all together.. When in Feral form, their senses are heightened, this increase in one's senses is the cause of the dilution of their senses in descendant form..

 

Full Moon: Once an elven week, the feral will forcefully shift into their lycan state, and be stuck that way for a full elven day. The downside is that the Feral are less in control of their descendant sides so the Feral, in short terms, are more wild, always on the hunt for more food.

 

New Moon: Once an elven week, the feral will be stuck in their descendant form, unable to shift for a full elven day.  The feral’s weakness will still be in full affect, and due to the inability to shift their moods would be a bit worse, and more prone to temper outbursts.

 

Feeding: A feral must eat raw, bloody meat every elven day (Every IRL day). They need to consume enough meat to equal the weight of a sheep. (150 pounds spread out over the course of the IRL day)

 

Redlines:

 

• A Feral can not attack or defend itself during a transformation.

• The ritual of consuming the blood of a Feral must be performed by a Feral willing to transfer the blessing with approval of the Alpha Feral.

• Ferals can not hold or use weapons when transformed.

• A Feral is only a trace of the person they are when not in a Feral state.

• Ferals are unable to connect to the void or any deity and cast magic while in their Feral form.

• It will take 4 full emotes that detail the transformation in order for a Feral to switch into their lycan form.

• General weaknesses of Ferals: Silver, Holy Magic, loud noises, bright flashes of light, fire.

• If in Feral form a feral cannot use weapons (swords, maces, etc.) or wear armor of any kind, or deity/voidal magic.

• Small amounts of blood such as a nosebleed or cut hand will make a feral recoil. Large amounts of blood on the other hand will make a feral lose their sense in their Descendant form and frenzy

• If a feral has their affliction taken away they will suffer from different weaknesses due to it being taken away. Their senses will be considerably worse than that of a regular descendant. They will be weaker and feel sluggish.

• Ferals must consume 150 pounds of meat every IRL day. This can be spread out throughout the day and does not have to be all at once.

• Once an elven week (IRL Week) a Feral will be trapped in their Feral form unable to shift back into their Descendant form for an entire day. This must be roleplayed.

• Once an elven week (IRL Week) A Feral will be trapped in their Descendant forms. They will be unable to shift and become a Feral for the duration of that day.

• If a woman were to get pregnant and shifted into their Feral form the fetus wouldn’t be able to cope with the changes going on and would be killed as soon as the shifting was complete.

• Ferals will have weaker senses in their Descendant form than compared to a normal Descendant.

• Ferals will be unable to use their boons in their Descendant form.

• If a Feral were to know Voidal magic their bodies would be weaker even in their Feral forms.

• If a Feral proves troublesome then two alphas may be able to deferal them permanently. This leads to the player that is being deferal’d never being able to gain the feral affliction again on that specific persona.

• New ferals have one week to have the curse cleansed by a paladin, ascended, or a cleric. After the week period, they are stuck with the curse, unless they talk to an alpha.

 

Credits

Original Lore - Sug_ | Delmodan

Mani Spirit Lore - Leowarrior

Feral Amendment - Ridethesky

Ritual lore - TorkoalTom

Rewrite - EagleEyeKK | DarkSoundwave | TorkoalTom | Wytchlings | Total_Xanarchy | WhiteKnight_19

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It's funny because I didn't think it was possible for you to make this piece of lore even more convoluted and bad. Take my upvote, you've earned it.

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Just now, Aerial said:

It's funny because I didn't think it was possible for you to make this piece of lore even more convoluted and bad. Take my upvote, you've earned it.

Dear god please tell me you're not serious. . .

[Skylez 865]

Prefer Starfelts and Zarsies' rewrite in all honesty.

 

What exactly is changed/added from Sug's piece?

[ChonGojDragonski 317]

The things I could say...

 

Literally a worse version of the rewrite that Starfelt put forth in every way. -1.

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Just now, Skylez1 said:

Prefer Starfelts and Zarsies' rewrite in all honesty.

 

What exactly is changed/added from Sug's piece?

What the LT asked to be changed.

Just now, ChonGojDragonski said:

The things I could say...

 

Literally a worse version of the rewrite that Starfelt put forth in every way. -1.

Thanks for the feedback. Though we would really appreciate for you to say what's wrong with it instead of just -1 it. Its only been up for seven minutes and something tells me that you barely skimmed over it.

[dard 726]

I'm having a hard time trying to grasp the differences in this one and the one that was submitted earlier.  The only real difference I'm gathering is that there are no triggers to force a transformation (blood, trauma, pain, ect.) and limits on which magic users can become it, which seems to only really be druids or blood mages.

 

12 minutes ago, DarkSoundwave said:

Feeding: A feral must eat raw, bloody meat every elven day (Every IRL day). They need to consume enough meat to equal the weight of a sheep. (150 pounds spread out over the course of the IRL day)

 

That's a lot of meat in one day.  150 steaks just about.  Even spooks don't need to kill a person every day, I feel like this could be reduced to make it practical.  

 

Also, what are the consequences for failing to feed?

[Sky 0]

Huh- Two feral rewrites, one with majority of the ""feral community"" taking part in the write, interesting. Everyone in this rewrite knew of the other rewrite, and vice versa. Which simply goes to show you that neither ""side"" enjoys the others. Perhaps the clear distruction from within, the implosion of dissent, should be enough to warrant the lore being hard shelved. Perhaps.

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11 minutes ago, Skylez1 said:

Prefer Starfelts and Zarsies' rewrite in all honesty.

 

What exactly is changed/added from Sug's piece?

This looks like an almost copy and paste from my old one with just some not needed changes and the addition slapped in the middle of it. I will however not bash the effort placed into this, but I as well prefer the Seth and Eric rewrite. However in my opinion the lore should at this point be shelved but we shall see what my old team does with it.

 

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Edited June 4, 2018 by The Redneck

[ChonGojDragonski 317]

5 minutes ago, Total_Xanarchy said:

What the LT asked to be changed.

Thanks for the feedback. Though we would really appreciate for you to say what's wrong with it instead of just -1 it. Its only been up for seven minutes and something tells me that you barely skimmed over it.

I genuinely read every single line, skipping the initial lore paragraph. What's wrong? It's incredibly vague, some of the writing intelligible, does nothing to address the previous complaints brought up against the Feral lore which caused them to be put up for a rework, and several other things. This rewrite also stinks of the current Feral crowd disagreeing with Star's work, and creating this so they could continue to roleplay the way they do.

 

EDIT: Wouldn't be against a soft shelf however, as Sky's comment is on the money.

Edited June 4, 2018 by ChonGojDragonski

[ScreamingDingo 16792]

 

5 minutes ago, Sky said:

Huh- Two feral rewrites, one with majority of the ""feral community"" taking part in the write, interesting. Everyone in this rewrite knew of the other rewrite, and vice versa. Which simply goes to show you that neither ""side"" enjoys the others. Perhaps the clear distruction from within, the implosion of dissent, should be enough to warrant the lore being hard shelved. Perhaps.

 

lmao just destroy the lore then, if people within the community cannot even OOC'ly work together. I haven't seen such a controversial creature before in regards to the amount of whining and bitching and bans related to it, seems like there is only one true course of action. I'd be happy with lycanthropes that starfelt wrote be implemented as event creatures maybe, but take it away from the players.

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Just now, Total_Xanarchy said:

Dear god please tell me you're not serious. . .

 

1.) The post is not nearly concise enough to warrant being posted. It looks like a hurried mess with abundantly poor wording and grammar mistakes. Simplify the language like you're writing a Guide of sorts, imagine if this was passed what people would have to know. Not all this poorly written fluff that phases nobody. Example: "Clerical Arts" can be replaced with Clericalism, which also encompasses Paladin magic. Broaden your statements to encompass multiple things while also remaining specific. 

 

2.) For a curse, it really doesn't seem treated like a curse. Most of the debuffs aren't viable to a roleplay setting and will not be taken into account properly due to how selective they are. You also need to thin out the wording and make it easier to understand. 

 

3.) As for "Alpha Ferals": "In nature, however, the wolf pack is not such an assemblage. Rather, it is usually a family (Murie 1944; Young and Goldman 1944; Mech 1970, 1988; Clark 1971; Haber 1977) including a breeding pair and their offspring of the previous 1-3 years, or sometimes two or three such families (Murie 1944; Haber 1977; Mech et al. 1998). Occasionally an unrelated wolf is adopted into a pack (Van Ballenberghe 1983; Lehman et al. 1992; Mech et al. 1998), or a relative of one of the breeders is included (Mech and Nelson 1990), or a dead parent is replaced by an outside wolf (Rothman and Mech 1979; Fritts and Mech 1981) and an offspring of opposite sex from the newcomer may then replace its parent and breed with the stepparent (Fritts and Mech 1981; Mech and Hertel 1983). Nevertheless, these variations are exceptions, and the pack, even in these situations, consists of a pair of breeders and their young offspring (Mech 1970; Rothman and Mech 1979; Fritts and Mech 1981; Mech and Hertel 1983; Peterson et al. 1984). The pack functions as a unit year-round (Mech 1970, 1988, 1995b). As offspring begin to mature, they disperse from the pack as young as 9 months of age (Fritts and Mech 1981; Messier 1985; Mech 1987; Fuller 1989; Gese and Mech 1991). Most disperse when 1-2 years old, and few remain beyond 3 years (Mech et al. 1998). Thus, young members constitute a temporary portion of most packs, and the only longterm members are the breeding pair. In contrast, captive packs often include members forced to remain together for many years (Rabb et al. 1967; Zimen 1982; Fentress et al. 1987)." Wolves

For something that is so centrally wolf-themed, it seems that the whole idea of a pack has been made a stereotype that holds no ground. What happens in the captive environment of a wolf is your source material, whereas it should be the opposite. The whole concept of an Alpha Feral is groundless and honestly you guys should find an alternative approach to your brood leaders that is more unique and not a trope straight out of cartoons and animated movies. Alpha and Omega, 2010

 

4.) The traditional idea of Lycanthropy has no place on the server itself. Yet this poorly done rendition effectively makes Ferals a misnomer. Ferals are anything but feral. 

 

feral

adjective

(especially of an animal) in a wild state, especially after escape from captivity or domestication.

"a feral cat"

synonyms: wild, untamed, untamable, undomesticated, untrained.

"feral dogs"

resembling a wild animal.

"a feral snarl"

 

Ferals live in cities, they take on the pack mentality of captive wolves with Alphas, and it seems that both in this lore and in current practice Ferals control their own transformations. The most wild thing about them is being domesticated Furries. You guys make no attempt to do a rewrite that curbs that approach and that's honestly disheartening. 

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10 minutes ago, Dardonas said:

That's a lot of meat in one day.  150 steaks just about.  Even spooks don't need to kill a person every day, I feel like this could be reduced to make it practical.  

 

Also, what are the consequences for failing to feed?

Failing to feed will result in the Feral's shifting become more sporadic and will happen whether the Feral wants it to or not. Its also not just Descendant meat that can be eaten to keep this from happening, but all meat.

7 minutes ago, The Redneck said:

This looks like an almost copy and paste from my old one with just some not needed changes and the addition slapped in the middle of it. I will however not bash the effort placed into this, but I as well prefer the Seth and Eric rewrite. However in my opinion the lore should at this point be shelved but we shall see what my old team does with it.

We didn't go out with a full on rewrite because that's not what we wanted, and its not what was necessary. We changed everything that the LT had wished to be changed in the original lore and that's what we stuck with. We had LTs checking on the google doc and writing comments about their problems were as we wrote it.

6 minutes ago, ChonGojDragonski said:

I genuinely read every single line, skipping the initial lore paragraph. What's wrong? It's incredibly vague, some of the writing intelligible, does nothing to address the previous complaints brought up against the Feral lore which caused them to be put up for a rework, and several other things. This rewrite also stinks of the current Feral crowd disagreeing with Star's work, and creating this so they could continue to roleplay the way they do.

 

EDIT: Wouldn't be against a soft shelf however, as Sky's comment is on the money.

Saying it does nothing to fix the original problems in the feral lore is completely false. We took the original lore and reworked it to make sure that no ferals could just add abilities that aren't in the lore at all. We do disagree with Starfelt's work, however why is that a bad thing? If the feral community doesn't like the current rewrite being brought together by someone then they have the right to make a submission that goes against it to be submitted to the LT. We were told we could do so and that's what we did.

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1 minute ago, Total_Xanarchy said:

We didn't go out with a full on rewrite because that's not what we wanted, and its not what was necessary. We changed everything that the LT had wished to be changed in the original lore and that's what we stuck with. We had LTs checking on the google doc and writing comments about their problems were as we wrote it.

The whole lore needed fixing and as the creator of the OG Wolves I even understand that. Patchwork is not good when resubmitting lore, there is tons wrong with my rewrite after rp occurred on the server. Ferals needed an overhaul not a band-aid. Best of luck though, it's in the hands of the green-men now. Ferals>Fluffers.

[The Templar 195]

I'm sorry, Dark, but this lore is even worse than Starfelt's. It addresses none of the problems, whereas atleast the other rewrite half-heartedly slapped a band-aid on a couple issues. -1