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  1. [!] Next to some of the posted bounties, a bit of parchment has been offered in turn, presenting a response! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Good day, Lizard-folk! Here we are again, eh? Another missive, another response. For this one, I suppose I'll have to be direct. It seems like you didn't take heed of my extremely valuable feedback from last time, and it's difficult to ignore the utter sewage seeping from your message. However, considering that you have mentioned me by name, I shall keep it brief, and focus on the areas that I take particular issue with. - Firstly, I am in no way related to Anethryn, nor do I consider him my son, or anything in that field. While it can be easy to pass this off as a lack of interest in the simple verification of information, I believe there is a more malicious purpose for this! - Simply put, I think you wish to associate my identity with a potential bounty. By including my name in conjunction with poor Anethryn, you wish to draw the ire of the bounty hunters towards me as well! For shame, Lizard Lads! For shame! - While such a thing is certainly slanderous, I take more offence of the fact that this acts as your response to my genuine feedback on your missive! We could have had beautiful bit of cooperation; perhaps we may have swapped prospective literary contributions over tea! Alas, it was not meant to be! I appreciate the time you spent creating and spreading the bounty message, but perhaps you could engage in more valuable exercises in future? I find knitting to be a good distraction, especially if you've got nothing else to contribute to the realm. Much love, A polite Kharajyr
  2. [!] A wooden pole has been set up nearby the missive, and on the pole, a letter has been attached by way of a single nail! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Good day, Lizardfolk! I am writing this response to your very, very scary edict, not out of ideological concerns (though I do believe you are speaking utter dribble on the matter), but rather out of a desire to rectify the missive itself! I believe you could get your message across much clearer if you took on some of my suggestions! Hope you find them useful! First, let’s start with a bit of art critique, shall we? While I can’t claim to come from a background of the visually artistic (I’ve always been dreadful with drawing, you see), I think some changes could be made to your emblem! Though I think the idea of the eye in the middle has some promise, it reminds me of a piece of pineapple held between two buns. Is this an Azdromoth sandwich, perhaps? In terms of the drawing of the ‘A’ at the top, it reminds me of an ‘Aheral scholar’s hand; all flowery and ultimately weightless. Maybe you could stylise it with some spikes coming out of the ‘A’, and surround it with some flames? Could get the point of Azdromoth across a bit better! First paragraph, first sentence, I believe you can remove, ‘brethren who we call friend, who you call foe.’ Following that statement about ‘kith’, it just seems a little redundant in my opinion. You’ve already established the relationship in the initial part of the sentence, so there’s really no need to go on and on about it! Syntax is key! The repetition of ‘for too long’ in the initial paragraph holds very little weight here. It is reminiscent of a child attempting to add a certain flare and ‘drama’ to their first story. Perhaps you could just use it once to establish your argument, and then let your message speak organically for itself from there? Second paragraph. ‘Stop what will bring your end. Your end…’ Once again, the repetition! No need to say ‘end’ once again, especially after it just ended your sentence. ‘Demise’, maybe? ‘Desolation?’ I’m sure Azdromoth can invest in a thesaurus! ‘We will bring to you the fires of New Beginnings, for we will cinder your grand trees to ash and ember, to regrow without the squalor of man and beast in their tandem dance.’ - Consider breaking this sentence up! It may flow better if it was broken up into multiple sentences, rather than a single one. ‘We know of your destructive acts across the world -- destruction of arcane sources of power, repetitive, annoying.’ - Once again, REPETITION!!!! You used ‘destruction’ and ‘destructive’ too close to one another! Snore! Third paragraph - ‘Heed our call or suffer in blazing dragons flame, unless you seek the meek end of baleful ash and brimstone same as Amaethea.’ - By the Aspects, this sentence made me wish that I forgot how to read. ‘Blazing dragons flame’. Really? ‘Blazing?’ How dull. ‘Meek end of baleful ash and brimstone?’ I take back what I said about the thesaurus before. Now it just seems you’re vomiting adjectives onto the page. Yawn! Overall, a decent piece, but I believe some improvements could really make it shine and intimidate! Please take the time to rectify your mistakes before posting another missive. I hope this was useful to you! Much love, Shark Druid Za’Kabar
  3. Anyone else unable to connect to the server? Apparently it’s full, when it’s nowhere near actual capacity.

    1. Shezept

      Shezept

      I do too hold this problem so you’re not alone

    2. Jygg

      Jygg

      Yeah, apparently some people are stuck in the lobby as well. Pretty sure the server broke.

    3. Myleres

      Myleres

      Supposed to react to a message in the LOTC discord server if youre having the issue. Llir is trying to fix it right now.

  4. whoever you are I love you because you like dank souls. <3

  5. Writing is superb, the concept itself is good, but I feel as if Druidism is fairly over-saturated as it is at the current moment. This doesn't really seem like it's needed within Druidism.
  6. Interesting concept, but ultimately not needed at all. -1
  7. hey LT maybe don't skim over this lore because it is alchemy or not a major magic maybe give it a proper read because it is good lore and it deserves the proper attention okay thank you very much
  8. omae wa mou shindeiru

  9. A Kharajyr Druid grips the poster tightly in both hands, his facial expression contorting into a scowl, his brow furrowing as his gaze drifts over the poster. "Ha'ow fawking stupid. Leaving da mothawr circle to start yawr own circle becawrse yew don't like someone? Boo hoo. Grow up. Babies, dawt's wawt yew all awre. Something mawst be done about this fawking garbage." He crumbles the poster into a ball, tossing it onto his desk before he moving to wander out of his home.
  10. A Kharajyr Druid breathes heavily as all the new circles start to pop up. "Dis cawlls fawr a Druidic Inquisition."
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