AligatorMordka1

Hi there! As you can see, your app is almost ready! Just a few changes you need to make, but don’t worry - you are doing great!

• Your Metagaming Definition is on the right track, but needs more detail. Take another look at our Wiki’s definitions for help, and I recommend including an example so I can tell you fully understand!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Metagaming_%26_Powergaming

• Powergaming is something that you shouldn't be allowed to do. Like "The halfling grew things & started to fly." Or "Even though Bob was missing his right arm he was able punch someone with his right arm" Well, bob doesn't have a right arm, and the halfing can't grow things to fly. When emoting, you want to do something like "Bill moved to hold Dawn's hand if she allowed him to" Not "Bill took Dawn's hand" because then Bill didn't have Dawn a real chance to respond. If you want me to go into more detail please let me know!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Metagaming_%26_Powergaming

• Your Character Biography is missing some lore references! Please remember to include at least one! These can be major events, wars, religion, etc. Here are some links that may help you find some!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Main_Page
2. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Almaris
3. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Nations_and_Major_Charters

• Your Character Biography is a bit short. Please include at least 6 sentences. If you don’t know what to add, I recommend thinking more about your character’s backstory. Where are they from, what were their parents like, why are they how they are…?
• Your Personality Traits/Quirks are a bit lacking. If you’re lost on what more to say, think of their fears, how they act around new people, etc.
• Your Character's Aspirations Response is too short and must be at least two sentences long. It should also tie into your Character Biography.
• Your Character Fear Response is too short and should be at least two sentences long. It should also explain why your character developed this fear.
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response is too short. It must be at least four sentences long and include at least one piece of dialogue and one action, your action must be in the 3rd person.
• Please fix all grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors in your application to the best of your ability. I recommend using a free grammar checker such as Grammarly. 

1. https://app.grammarly.com/

You’ll be given 24 hours to correct the changes above. Once you are done correcting, please contact me!

My discord is Anime_Wolf#0080!

If you still need help, make sure to check the wiki! WIKI

If you need to contact me, or need help,  you can join the LotC Discord here :Discord

Also here is a link to the new player hub! : New Player Hub

Hi there, as you can see your application has unfortunately been denied, check below for the detailed reasons why.

Unfortunately, your 24hr editing period has expired.. However, don’t fret; you are free to reapply immediately, just remember to edit and change all that is listed below <3

• Your Metagaming Definition is on the right track, but needs more detail. Take another look at our Wiki’s definitions for help, and I recommend including an example so I can tell you fully understand!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Metagaming_%26_Powergaming

• Powergaming is something that you shouldn't be allowed to do. Like "The halfling grew things & started to fly." Or "Even though Bob was missing his right arm he was able punch someone with his right arm" Well, bob doesn't have a right arm, and the halfing can't grow things to fly. When emoting, you want to do something like "Bill moved to hold Dawn's hand if she allowed him to" Not "Bill took Dawn's hand" because then Bill didn't have Dawn a real chance to respond. If you want me to go into more detail please let me know!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Metagaming_%26_Powergaming

• Your Character Biography is missing some lore references! Please remember to include at least one! These can be major events, wars, religion, etc. Here are some links that may help you find some!

1. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Main_Page
2. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Almaris
3. https://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Nations_and_Major_Charters

• Your Character Biography is a bit short. Please include at least 6 sentences. If you don’t know what to add, I recommend thinking more about your character’s backstory. Where are they from, what were their parents like, why are they how they are…?
• Your Personality Traits/Quirks are a bit lacking. If you’re lost on what more to say, think of their fears, how they act around new people, etc.
• Your Character's Aspirations Response is too short and must be at least two sentences long. It should also tie into your Character Biography.
• Your Character Fear Response is too short and should be at least two sentences long. It should also explain why your character developed this fear.
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response is too short. It must be at least four sentences long and include at least one piece of dialogue and one action, your action must be in the 3rd person.
• Please fix all grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors in your application to the best of your ability. I recommend using a free grammar checker such as Grammarly. 

1. https://app.grammarly.com/

Don’t worry though! You can submit a new application and try again right after, just make sure you correct the things listed!

My discord is Anime_Wolf#0080! If you have any questions i’m happy to help!

If you still need help, make sure to check the wiki! WIKI

If you need to contact me, or need help, you can join the LotC Discord and the New player hub!, here are the links! 

Discord

New Player Hub