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    • Rules: Yes
    Referral: Snapchat
    Discord: BigBang_#8056
    How do you avoid powergaming in roleplay?: knowing information your character couldnt know.
    How does metagaming disrupt fair roleplay?: giving yourself abilities, etc that are too powerful, like a mega bazooka
    Status: Denied

Read the scenario below this box and type out inside of this box how your character might respond. You must show an understanding of quoted dialogue and exposition throughout the scenario.

 

i look in the eyes of this man but dont respond him. nothing is as important as my religion and he dont seem like a believer

Character Name: ted dy rerial
Character Race: Highlander
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 35
Physical Description: tall white guy without muscles
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Your application has unfortunately been DENIED at this time due to reasons listed below, please make sure to fix all addressed problems before reapplying:

 

Important: Please take the time to double-check your work, and fix any grammatical/spelling errors.

 

Backstory: Your character's backstory is far too limited in detail. Please take the time to properly fill this out, including significant events such as your character's childhood, adolescence and their current life. Feel free to include any events that may have significantly impacted them, an example being the loss of a loved one. Try and aim for at least 6 sentences long.

 

 

Character Skin/Description: In your character's description, you mentioned he has green eyes whereas the skin has pale/silver eyes. Please make sure your description is well written, and matches your skin. Make sure your application is at least 6 sentences long as well - some ideas to help expand on a backstory is to include significant events, which can include traumatic experiences that help shape your character into the person they are. Perhaps a significant other was killed, as you included in your current backstory - how did this affect him? What challenges does he face, and how does he plan on overcoming them?

 

Roleplay Scenario: Your roleplay scenario needs serious work as well. Treat it like a normal roleplay interaction, and keep it simple if you find it difficult. It's just a way for us to determine your roleplay quality, and make sure it meets our server's standards. In your next roleplay scenario, please include the following:

 

- Have your roleplay scenario be AT LEAST four sentences long.

- Include at least one dialogue surrounded by quotes.

- At least one action, where your character is doing something physical.

- Make sure your roleplay scenario doesn't have any metagaming, or powergaming in it.

- Do not include any personal thoughts into your emote. Emotes should be physical, and something that other people would be able to see/feel/hear.

- Make sure you write it out in third person.

 

 

Feel free to re-apply at any time after this denial, just make sure you make the changes with the aforementioned things. Don't be disheartened, and don't give up - if things are too hard, feel free to reach out to me either the Forums via a PM, or contact me directly on my Discord: D A N N Y#2022.

 

Best of luck, I hope to see you on the server soon.

 

 

 

 

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