ToxicChaff64

Your application has unfortunately been DENIED at this time due to reasons listed below. Please read through them, and make the appropriate changes before applying again.

IMPORTANT: If you are intending to play a member of the 'Tianrui' household, which is a noble clan/family in the Jade State of Yong Ping, please get permission from the player that roleplays their patriarch - otherwise, please choose something else.

Definitions: Your definitions are both too limited in detail. Please go more in-depth with them. If unsure, search up online for some examples and definitions, but make sure to re-write them with your own words. Your definition for 'powergaming' is also incorrect, please try again and include an example.

Backstory: Your character's backstory needs a complete rework. It's good that you managed to incorporate an existing nation (Yong Ping) into your character's backstory, but you have a lot of other problems which has dragged it down. Your character's backstory should be written in a third-person perspective, as it is meant for your character - not you as a player. Please choose an origin for your character that is more appropriate for our server - roleplaying someone with a foot fetish isn't suitable for our standards , nor the playerbase on LoTC, as it's PG-rated. Additionally, please double-check for both grammatical and spelling errors, as this is a text-based roleplay server, and you should try your best, even if this is just an application to get whitelisted.

Physical Description: You've failed to answer this field - please try again with a more serious answer.

Personality Traits/Quirks: Like with your physical description, you have failed to answer this field properly. Some advice on how to handle this section is to make sure your character's personality traits/quirks somehow line up to their past. Maybe a traumatic experience in their past has left them with PTSD, and makes their hand twitch every once and a while? Make sure to also give your character some flaws.

What does your character want to achieve? What drives them?: No foot fetishes. For your next attempt, tie this in with your character's backstory. If he was a survivor of a bandit attack which had both his parents killed, perhaps he would want to become a warrior to help fight bandits, so no one ever has to go through such a traumatic experience again? Be creative, but please try.

What is your character's biggest fear? What caused them to develop this fear?: Once again, tie it in with your backstory - make everything work with each other. Fears don't have to be over the top, and can be something simple like in real life - perhaps they're scared of insects, perhaps they're scared of the dark? Just make sure it makes sense for your character - bonus points if it works in with the backstory.

Roleplay Scenario: Your roleplay scenario needs to be worked around - if he's a mute and can't talk, perhaps you could express him in another way with physical actions. Do not include any 'internal thoughts' of your character - treat this like a real roleplay scenario, where players can only see/hear/feel physical things. Don't include anything that they wouldn't.

- Have your roleplay scenario be AT LEAST four sentences long.

- Include at least one dialogue surrounded by quotes.

- At least one action, where your character is doing something physical.

- Make sure your roleplay scenario doesn't have any metagaming, or powergaming in it.

- Do not include any personal thoughts into your emote. Emotes should be physical, and something that other people would be able to see/feel/hear.

- Make sure you write it out in third person.

Feel free to re-apply at any time after this denial, just make sure you make the changes with the aforementioned things. Don't be disheartened, and don't give up - if things are too hard, feel free to reach out to me either the Forums via a PM, or contact me directly on my Discord: D A N N Y#2021.

Best of luck, I hope to see you on the server soon.