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Ø  Please improve the grammar across your application before submitting any changes. This includes breaking up your character’s biography into sensibly sized sentences and using capital letters/full stops.

Ø  Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are incorrect, vague and lacking in detail. Please add more to these (Maybe examples too), and refer to our LOTC Metagaming & Powergaming wiki pages for the most correct and relevant info (Just keep in mind not to plagiarize)

Ø  Your character’s biography is too short. Please extend this to at least two decent sized paragraphs. You could include things such as your character’s place of birth, family, profession and any important events that have happened to them.

Ø  Try to refrain from using overused clichés in your character’s biography. The story of a character’s parents dying causing them to be taken in by warriors is a little bland and won’t distinguish your character from others. It is not necessary to change this, however I would recommend changing it up a little before you submit any changes.

Ø You must include at least one server lore reference in your character biography (other than your character’s race or family, or one of the server’s maps). This lore reference could be something like the name of the city your character was born in or an event such as a war that your character has lived through. Please fix this using the wikia and forums for examples to use.

Ø You must include at least one clear flaw in your character's interesting facts/traits.  A flaw should generally be something to do with the character’s personality/behaviour. These facts/traits must be at least five-word sentences.

Ø  While this is not necessary to change, I wanted to make sure that you are aware your character’s age means that they will be considered something like a child or adolescent in most elven cultures. Generally speaking, elves aren’t considered adults until they are at least 50 years old.
 

You’re nearly there however there are a few changes that you must make to your application before you can be whitelisted. You have 24 hours to make the changes above. Once you’ve finished editing your application, shoot me a message here on the forums or through discord and I’ll take another look.

You can always check out the server wiki page for an extensive collection of server lore information, as well as the metagaming and powergaming definitions. Feel free to also join our New Player Discord! Here you can ask questions to our Communication Team, meet other players and view up to date roleplay opportunities.

If you ever have any questions or need help, please feel free to contact me here on the forums, through my discord (Aqua#5363) or by /msg Aquaquean in-game. You can also /atreq on the server to place a ticket if you require assistance from any of us Communication Team members.

You did not make the required changes in the 24 hour timeframe.

Please make the changes below in your next application:

Ø  Please improve the grammar across your application before submitting any changes. This includes breaking up your character’s biography into sensibly sized sentences and using capital letters/full stops.

Ø  Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are incorrect, vague and lacking in detail. Please add more to these (Maybe examples too), and refer to our LOTC Metagaming & Powergaming wiki pages for the most correct and relevant info (Just keep in mind not to plagiarize)

Ø  Your character’s biography is too short. Please extend this to at least two decent sized paragraphs. You could include things such as your character’s place of birth, family, profession and any important events that have happened to them.

Ø  Try to refrain from using overused clichés in your character’s biography. The story of a character’s parents dying causing them to be taken in by warriors is a little bland and won’t distinguish your character from others. It is not necessary to change this, however I would recommend changing it up a little before you submit any changes.

Ø You must include at least one server lore reference in your character biography (other than your character’s race or family, or one of the server’s maps). This lore reference could be something like the name of the city your character was born in or an event such as a war that your character has lived through. Please fix this using the wikia and forums for examples to use.

Ø You must include at least one clear flaw in your character's interesting facts/traits.  A flaw should generally be something to do with the character’s personality/behaviour. These facts/traits must be at least five-word sentences.

Ø  While this is not necessary to change, I wanted to make sure that you are aware your character’s age means that they will be considered something like a child or adolescent in most elven cultures. Generally speaking, elves aren’t considered adults until they are at least 50 years old.

You can always check out the server wiki page for an extensive collection of server lore information, as well as the metagaming and powergaming definitions. Feel free to also join our New Player Discord! Here you can ask questions to our Communication Team, meet other players and view up to date roleplay opportunities.

If you ever have any questions or need help, please feel free to contact me here on the forums, through my discord (Aqua#5363) or by /msg Aquaquean in-game. You can also /creq on the server to place a ticket if you require assistance from any of us Communication Team members.