Farryn

Hello there, xx_kithaskat_xx,

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. I have listed them below so that you can make the required changes. Be aware that you have 24 hours to make these application, otherwise your application will be denied.

Edits required:

• Definitions: You need to explain powergaming and metagaming in a bit more detail than just one sentence. I suggest including an example of powergaming and metagaming through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly, along with an explanation of how it doesn't benefit RP. A sentence alone does not fully explain.
• Race: A halfling is not a half human, half elf. he halflings are in fact a race of very small people who focus on a very laidback and peaceful life and focus more on farming and having fun. Think of the Halflings from Lord of the Rings. I believe the proper term you are looking for is Half Elf, not halfling. Therefore either change your character's race to Half Elf, or perhaps make them into a halfling.
• Biography: You need to expand more on your character's biography, such as where she was born, what certain events happened to him, etc. This is where you flesh out your character and explain how they became the person they are the moment you start playing them on the server. I also suggest explaining where her parents are, what her goals are, and what skills he acquired - such as if he's most skilled in one area or weak in another. Be aware you will need to include one or more piece of LotC lore within your biography, such as city names, etc, and a few sentences will not work so do try and write at least a paragraph about your character's backstory.
• Skin: Just curious but why does your character wear a green monster hat? I advise explaining the reason why in the backstory, since it is a very unique trait and would certainly be a tale worth explaining to other characters if your application is accepted.

Aside from that, you got the basics of the application down. Remember, you have 24 hours to make the requested changes on your application. When you are done with the edits, simply post a comment on your application and tag me through @farryn or by PMs - that way, I will know you have made the edits and want the application reviewed again.

While you did make the edits to an extent, they weren't long enough to give a clear backstory of your character and your definitions of metagaming and powergaming are still hard to read.

You can reapply within three hours.

16 hours ago, Omehr said:

I'm done

 

You still need to expand more on your definitions and biography a bit, such as explaining what skills he has, along with any strengths and weaknesses he has. And once again, can you please use full stops, commas, and fix some spelling errors as reading your application is really hard.

You have an additional 24 hours to correct this application.

You have not made all of the necessary changes - please read the edits and make the changes.

Hello there,

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. Due to your application being made and submitted before you made a forum account, I have to automatically deny your application. However, I have listed down the edits that you need to make on your application below so that you can make the required changes for your next application.

Edits required:

• Definitions: You need to explain powergaming and metagaming. I suggest  using an example of powergaming and metagaming  with the explaination also through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly, along with an explanation of how it doesn't benefit RP.
• Character Name: Your username is not a vaild name for your character, please choose a more suitable name for your character which fits their race. There are many online name generators that you can use to get a unique name. I highly, highly doubt Jade would call your character an extremely weird name that includes a number in it.
• Biography:
  • I highly recommend you do not use the 'village was attacked by orcs' scenario, as many applications in the past have used this scenario and it has become extremely cliche on the server, therefore think of a different scenario for your character.
  • Your character cannot have or be influenced by any form of magic - meaning you cannot have your character starting off with using magic, radiating a magical aura, or being majorly influenced by magic. Furthermore, there is no form of runes that can change your character's race, meaning your character must stick to the race that they were born as.
  • There are many plotholes with your character's biography - there is no explaination as to what happened to his family, how he lost his memories, where he was born, how he aquired his combat skills, and so forth.  Furthermore, why is his birthday marked on his body? That to me just seems to be written in just so the character knows his birthday. Please fix the biography so that it makes sense and goes in depth regarding how your character grew up, what they learnt in terms of skills, and what happened to them which made them the person they are now.
  • You must include one or more piece of LotC lore within your biography. This can include names of cities, cultures, etc.
• Facts
  • Your character cannot radiate a demonic aura - it is not allowed.
  • Please avoid making your character an assassin - there is no indication in his biography which explains why he's an assassin, how he is trained to be an assassin, and so forth. It has become very cliche for new players to apply for an assassin based character, therefore please avoid in making your character such.
  • Once again - your character cannot be a human who is turned into a halfling.

You can reapply within three hours.

Under Review

Congratulations! Your application has been accepted! Please bear with me as you will be whitelisted on the server.

Once you are on the server, don't hesitate to contact a member of the AT or any other staff member should you have any questions or you are stuck on something.

Good luck!

I am sorry but your application has been denied due to you plagiarizing the definitions of Powergaming and Metagaming (Meaning you copy and pasted the definitions instead of writing them out in your own words)

Additionally, I suggest improving your next application by doing the following:

• Character name - Warlord is not an ideal name for a human. Instead, go for a common name that suits the setting, such as John, Alexander, etc.
• Skin - I suggest you do not make your skin resemble a Harbringer or Darkstalker, but instead resemble that of human.
• Biography - You need to expand more on your character biography by explaining how your character became the person they are now and what major events happened to them. Be aware you will need to include one or more piece of LotC lore.

You can make another application in 6 hours.

Under review

Congratulations! Your application has been accepted! Please bear with me as you will be whitelisted on the server.

Once you are on the server, don't heistate to contact a member of the AT or any other staff member should you have any questions or you are stuck on something.

Good luck!

Hello there, Lil Wurm,

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. I have listed them below so that you can make the required changes. Be aware that you have 24 hours to make these application, otherwise your application will be denied.

Edits required:

• Definitions: You need to explain why powergaming and metagaming are bad for roleplay in more depth instead of simply using speech to imply such. I suggest  using an example of powergaming and metagaming through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly, along with an explanation of how it doesn't benefit RP.

Aside from that, you got the basics of the application down. Remember, you have 24 hours to make the requested changes on your application. When you are done with the edits, simply post a comment on your application and tag me through @farryn or by PMs - that way, I will know you have made the edits and want the application reviewed again.

Congratulations! Your application has been accepted! Please bear with me as you will be whitelisted on the server.

Once you are on the server, don't heistate to contact a member of the AT or any other staff member should you have any questions or you are stuck on something.

Good luck!

I am sorry but your application has been denied due to the following changes not being made. Do not worry though, you can reapply within three hours. Additionally, you can use the feedback I gave you to improve on your next application.

Good luck!

Hello there, EthangamerOP!

I am afraid that there are some edits that you need to make on your application. I have listed them below so that you can make the required changes. Be aware that you have 24 hours to make these application, otherwise your application will be denied.

Edits required:

• Definitions: You need to add a clear explanation as to what roleplay is, as well as explain powergaming and metagaming in more depth. Furthermore, include an example of powergaming and metagaming through the use of a roleplay scenario so that I know you understand these definitions clearly.
• Backstory: You need to include one or more LotC lore within your backstory - this can range from the names of cities, to the names of particular plants, animals, etc. Also, do  go more in depth regarding your character, such as how he was raised, what particular events occurred within his life, and what skills he gained. A noteworthy piece of talk about is the death of his parents.
• Skin: The minecraft skin for your character does not match up to his race - Dark elves have grey and dark skin tones, and cannot bear brown hair or eyes. Also - while not a compulsory change you need to make, I do advise changing the outfit of your character into something more unique, as the outfit you are using is a very commonly used skin. 

Aside from that, you got the basics of the application down. Remember, you have 24 hours to make the requested changes on your application. When you are done with the edits, simply post a comment on your application and tag me through @farryn or by PMs - that way, I will know you have made the edits and want the application reviewed again.

Farryn's Guides and Tips:

• Here's a guide that will help you with making the edits, as well as help you understand more about the race you are playing. https://www.lordofthecraft.net/forums/topic/143584-how-to-make-your-elf-right/
• There are users on the website who will be happy to create a skin for your character. Or you can choose an outfit to use on the forum's skin archive where you can use and edit the following skins: https://www.lordofthecraft.net/forums/topic/161821-the-lotc-skin-archive/. However, if you are struggling to gain a new outfit for your character's skin due to being unable to make one or none on the skin archive fit your character, I am happy to make an outfit for your character for free. Be aware you must at least make the changes to the skin and appearance by yourself, I will only make the outfit. Simply send me a PM should you want an outfit made.