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1 hour ago, stickycrud said:

Revisions made.

just an fyi haense was in the deep south of atlas because the continent sat on the southern hemisphere, also the church of canon believes in a single god.

not gonna talk about the fact that he “slaughtered 5 orcs within 5 minutes?” Doesnt that seem a bit power gamey?

arent khas locked behind a creature app.

Just giving you some nice lore tidbit corrections so that you dont come in confused, the imperial capital is called Carolstadt, Renatus is a kingdom in the heartlands of the empire. 

Hanseti doesnt exist anymore, it has not for centuries

I know this is an AT’s job but i’d like to maybe just stir your app towards a good direction before you are put on pending..

You cannot be related to any nobles or famous persons without their express approval of it, you can however say you worked as a servant or guard for example.

The next part is also somewhat required to some degree, historical accuracy, it’s fine when its just small inaccuracies  or minor mistakes but, courland does not exist in Atlas. It appeared extremely briefly before being put down by a coalition. The proper long lasting courland however, was in Axios which was the previous map. And so for her to be a princess of the proper courland who is still alive, she would be in her late 70s.

18 hours ago, Demigryph said:

Changed Status to Under Review

the man has been waiting for 18 hours for you to reply to his comment.

4 minutes ago, Lmno_ said:

Okay so i've consisted it around my character being given away to the dwarven blacksmith as a child so that the parents could go defend Norland. hopefully i got that right.

If your parents came from kaz ulrah then they would have fought norland, since kaz ulrah was in the Coalition against Norland

1 minute ago, Lmno_ said:

 

Thank you, i tried reading into recent wars, i couldn't find anything so i tried to make something, hope i didn't do it too badly!

Yeah it's a real shame in the previous map the wiki team would add a list of dates with historical events next to them, they have not done this for Atlas idk why.

Kaz Ulrah have not gone to war against Krugmar in decades. In this server's lore orcs aren't creature of chaos, they  come from the same entities as humans elves and dwarves. 
There has not been a siege on an orcish city or fort in a very very long time. If you absolutely want to make your backstory revolve around your parents dying in a war then you could always say that they died whilst fighting in the siege of Norland's capital. But then it would not be when he reached 18 years old.

He's also not allowed to start with any magic item or magic abilities.

He's 255 but he was born in holm? Holm was not a thing 255 years ago lol

Just a tip before an AT sees the app, you can't start as someone of noble blood or be related to one in anyway.

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