Gumeloverde

• Both of your definitions need work. Please, research these terms, and fix up your descriptions.
  • I also suggest looking up power emoting.
• I’m a little bit confused with the picture in your biography. The guidelines ask you to write a backstory, with two references to server lore, yet you have posted a picture which does not even look like the skin you post further down.
• Your character description should be a physical one. Height, build, hair, eyes and so on.
• Your interesting facts should be trait based.
  • Things like not being a great fighter, is fine, or not wanting to be married, but ensure there are a positive, neutral, and a negative.

Please, make your changes in your own time! Any questions, feel free to PM me on the forums or on discord, Laurelin#0797

And, feel free to join us on the new player discord too: https://discord.gg/eySYjqw

• Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are still not quite there.
• You’ve made an effort to find lore- grand! Unfortunatlly, I have a few issues.
  • You can not be the child of a lord.
  • Your overall biography reads as though he was born to elves- moots and gladewyn are elven related. It was unusual, in Gladewyn times, that humans resided in the city.
  • Mechanical sewing machines do not exist.
  • You can not be the greatest anything – that is something you have to work for in roleplay.
  • Your house can not be revered and, if you were born in an elven settlement, your technically wouldn’t have a house at all. You would simply be another family- a house is a human term.
• Spiders , as animals, can not be domesticated. Perhaps simply saying he as an interest in spiders, is good enough.

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One day George went to Renatus and traded a silk box for a sewing machine.

I ask you carefully read my feedback, as you seemed to have mixed something.

Clothing is made by hand with needle and thread, not a machine.

You need to be aware of the technological limits of this roleplay world.

• Your powergaming definition has, somehow, entirely strayed. Please- take some time to read up on it.
• As a little note, your description says brown eyes, but the skin has blue eyes.

Once again, we’re not getting this definition.

• I also suggest looking up power emoting.

Please, take a minute to look this up, Give it a google, and see what you come up with. It is quite literally, the key rule in lotc.

You’ve been quick to edit up your app with the changes, and it’s now at a pretty good point to start on.

• As a side note, remember that you can’t force anyone to do anything for you. You can be persuasive, but your character can not actually convince anyone to do anything.

• You are welcome to join the [New Player Discord] if you have not already. It gives you access to the CT members, and nation stewards, as well as other new players, and even event posts from time to time.

• Make sure you read the [New Player Guide] - it should answer most of your initial burning questions.

• The forums and the [Wiki] are your best friend when it comes to lore, but do not be afraid to ask for help if you need something clarified.

  • Anyone with a bright pink [CT] tag is ready to help.

  • You can join the help channel by using #h

• Finally, feel free to PM me on Discord at Laurelin#0797

• Remember the rules!

And importantly, have fun.

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