captain_shark

i just read over some other applications that were denied or put into pending and i don't think i did very well...

Hello, friend! After some consideration, I have set your application to:

Thank you for your interest in our server, we look forward to having you as a player!

I enjoyed reading your application, however there were a few details I'd like you to improve on before you're implemented into our server


- Please read over the definitions of Powergaming and Metagaming - You can find the definitions of these in our Wiki. After you've read them, please correct and expand on your definitions of these.

- Please expand on your backstory! While I love the specific details of your character, make a playable backstory. How was your characters childhood? Why does he put himself in danger? Revenge? Fun? Have fun with writing this. Make your character's story more specific and realistic. I recommend you make your character's height more realistic - Read Heartlander lore on the Wiki and choose a more realistic height. 

- Please expand your character description section. I want to know what he looks like - Expand on your character! Make him playable. What color are his eyes? Hair? How long is his hair? Is he handsome, fair, dark-skinned? Is he fat? Skinny? Does he have big feet? Add a detailed description so we can imagine him from reading it.

- Please include a weakness in your character's interesting facts. I am asking you this because with a weakness, more depth is seen in your character and in the end, having a weakness makes it more enjoyable and fair to everyone.


You can make these changes by using the Edit button on this application -- Do not make a new one.

I wish you good luck! If you need any help with any of these changes, contact me on discord. My tag is sadboy #9413.

Also, the Application Team and several representatives from the playerbase are waiting to help you in the New Player Discord! Do not be afraid to seek out help - We are here, and more than happy to help you.

 

i have added changes so do let me know if theres any other problems but not to be rude i would like you to be a bit more specific since i didn't know what you meant for some of the changes you asked me  to make, but i did my best on making it better.

Hello, unfortunately I still am keeping your Application set as

Thank you for reading and applying my suggestions - However there are still a few things I'd like you to change:

-Again, please expand on your Metagaming and Powergaming definitions. I can not accept you until you thoroughly read our rules and make a descriptive definition of those terms.

-Please explain what your character looks like in the Description. A tall man is not a detailed description and we cannot picture your character from reading that. Try to include details such as hair color, eye color, skintone, skin appearance, what he wears, how he talks.

-On your three interesting facts -- Change one of them so they are a weakness. You must include at least one weakness.

I am sorry to say your Application has been Denied due to failure to Edit the changes within 24 hours - And failure to contact me.

Please create a new Application with the changes listed above.

Good luck!