OrangeSmoothie05

Hi there! As you can see, your app is almost ready! Just a few changes you need to make, but don’t worry - you are doing great!

I highly recommend shooting me a DM on Discord so we can go over the application seeing as you are putting in the effort but aren't quite there yet!
Twandhi#6986

 

• Your Metagaming and Powergaming Definitions are on the right track, though they’re not quite there. Take another look at our Wiki’s definitions for help, and I recommend including examples so I can tell you fully understand!
  • Metagaming & Powergaming - Lord of the Craft
     
• Your Character Biography is missing a lore reference! Please remember to include at least one! This can be a nation, major event, war, religion, etc. Here are some links that may help you find some!

             Almaris - Lord of the Craft
             Races - Lord of the Craft 
          Nations & Major Charters - Lord of the Craft 
 

• Your Character Biography mentions that both of your parents die, and that this spurs your character on to become a merciless killer. This is very cliche, and is not a good narrative to drive for roleplay. When making a biography, please try to be unique, and think of a good story-telling backstory. For example, you could say that your parents were mugged instead of killed, and this made you have a fear of mercenaries, or ruffians.
   
• Please make sure that all dialogue in your Roleplay Scenario Response is surrounded by quotation marks. 
   
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response is a bit off. Make sure to include one piece of dialogue surrounded by quotation marks and one action.
   
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response should include at least one action. Please make sure to add one!
   

• Please fix all grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors in your application to the best of your ability. I recommend using a free grammar checker such as Grammarly. 

• Grammarly

You’ll be given 24 hours to correct the changes above. Once you are done correcting, please contact me!

Have you finished editing your application or you still need help? Feel free to send me a message over the forums, or if I’m online, you can message me with /message Twandhi. 

For a faster reply, add me on discord @Twandhi#6986

If you want some extra assistance, I recommend you review the wiki and join the LotC Discord.

As you can see your application has unfortunately been denied, but fear not, below I’ve noted why!

Unfortunately, your 24hr editing period has expired. However, don’t fret; you are free to reapply immediately, just remember to edit and change all that is listed below.

 

• Your Metagaming and Powergaming Definitions are on the right track, though they’re not quite there. Take another look at our Wiki’s definitions for help, and I recommend including examples so I can tell you fully understand!
• Metagaming & Powergaming - Lord of the Craft

• Your Character Biography is missing a lore reference! Please remember to include at least one! This can be a nation, major event, war, religion, etc.

• Your Character Biography mentions that both of your parents die, and that this spurs your character on to become a merciless killer. This is very cliche, and is not a good narrative to drive for roleplay. When making a biography, please try to be unique, and think of a good story-telling backstory. For example, you could say that your parents were mugged instead of killed, and this made you have a fear of mercenaries, or ruffians.

• Please make sure that all dialogue in your Roleplay Scenario Response is surrounded by quotation marks. 
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response is a bit off. Make sure to include one piece of dialogue surrounded by quotation marks and one action.
• Your Roleplay Scenario Response should include at least one action. Please make sure to add one!

• Please fix all grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors in your application to the best of your ability. I recommend using a free grammar checker such as Grammarly. 

Don’t worry though! You can submit a new application and try again right after, just make sure you correct the things listed!

Do you still need help? Feel free to send me a message over the forums, or if I’m online, you can message me with /message Twandhi. 

For a faster reply, add me on discord @Twandhi#6986

If you want some extra assistance, I recommend you review the wiki and join the LotC Discord.