Ah! The gunpowder reference was replaced with a coal fueled haze. Although... the reference to dwarf wasn’t the second mention! The last bit, where it mentions ‘behind our borders’ was a reference to the Anthem of the Confederation (of Hammers), written by Norkai. In it, the anthem ends praising the doomed Confederation’s plentiful resources held by such borders. Which, of course, ended up being destroyed. For someone who wanted to rebuild the glories of the dwarves, it seemed apt.
As a courtesy though, I added mention of a Brathmorakin sire. Will that suffice?
