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Liarel Bluesea was born on a small farm with an older sister and 2 loving parents they grew up living a pretty normal life aside from when they where 14 when there sister was kidnaped and killed after there parents could not pay the ransome. after that there parents started pusshing them to work harder on the farm and be better and be more like there sister. there education was minamle they know how to wright and speack in common but still make spelling mistakes. at 19 there parents got them on a boat and diched them on Harlond to fend for themselfs leaving them saying that you will never be able to replace your sister