M0n1e

~ADVICE~ I have read your application and there are a few errors: Your application seems a bit confusing. When your re-write it please look for your errors. Your biography is too short and it has many spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes. You also keep writing 'i' when it is a upper capital letter when it's on its own; instead of 'i' it should be 'I'. Also just because you have a button for an exclamation mark doesn't mean you need to use it; I grew up in a small village in the dense forest karuga! My parents died and i had nowhere to go so i ran away and brought my bow and arrows! While i was running away some orcs found me and captured me! All i remember now is that someone saved me and i dont know who! I woke up in a strange temple with no bow or arrows! Now i have to start my journey to find who saved me and end the orc race!. You have many un-necessary exclamation marks were full stops should be. There is a total of 5 exclamation marks in it. You could change then for full stops and it would look better. Please to elaborate on your biography. I seems really dull and short. Please also re-read your information in both your out-of-character and in-character information as it is also unclear, and unspecified. Use more safisticated adjectives. I hope you take this as creative critism. Please re-type. Otherwise, keep trying.

~ADVICE~ I read your application and it seems alright but there are a few errors: You seem to have extensive knowledge about role playing which is great, and your out-of-character information is actually quite good. I like the fact your very honest and answer your questions clearly, but your biography seems really boring, and doesn’t seem interesting enough to accepted. Please put more information into your bio. Could you also please check your spelling, grammar and punctuation again. I Don’t like the fact your referring to your character as “A worrior” it seems very cliché. Put more effort into it and take your time. You need your screenshot, as it is required. Please take this as creative critism. I hope you keep in mind this advise and re-write this. Otherwise, keep trying as your application is good.

Your right.. 18 is too young for an elf... If you had made him 100 or over, it would have made more sense... I would recommend changing his age. Also within your Biography I would make more paragraphs in it.. Just looking at it as one huge piece is unpleasing, it tends to make it look boring and uninteresting as if you elaborated to much and it just goes on. Please put spaces/paragraphs in it. Otherwise your application looks good. If you could, I would add more sophisticated descriptive adjectives. I would re-type this. But keep trying.

BTW. Just letting you know... I have read your application and it seems a bit dull... Throughout your application you have some spelling mistakes and missing punctuation marks. Your character seems confusing in a way, but he keeps a clear intention. Your Bio seems a bit dodgy; some of the information should go in the "other information" section, yet half of it is part of the actual bio. You also need to pick the right tense to speak in; he ate an apple/he is eating an apple. You also need to elaborate more in your bio. Besides from some of these mistakes, your application is good. I would recommend typing it up again. Fix up: 1. Punctuation 2. Spelling 3. Bio 4. Grammar Keep trying.

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Almostnermal -How old are you?: 14 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Australian Eastern Time -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, I believe I have good grammar and language skills. -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a great fan of Minecraft. I enjoy playing it every chance I get. At first I didn't think it was interesting but my friends convinced me to try it and it is honestly the best game I have ever played. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 12 hours a week. I only get to play it every Saturdays and Sundays. -How long have you played minecraft?: Approximately 1-2 months. -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Yes. I know the basic skills in adapting to situations whilst roleplaying. I have been roleplaying for 5-6 months. -What do you expect this server will be like?: An exciting sever experience with other roleplaying socialization. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Only a friends server were we built for fun and did survival. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: I understand and agree to the rules. -Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf. -How did you hear about us?: Through my friends. -Did you vote?: Yes. -What was your favourite Law?: You must keep in character. I thought this is the best rule and I will do anything to enforce this rule. -What was your least favourite Law?:I don't have one. They all seem reasonable. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? m0n1e In-Character: -Character Name: Renee -What is your Race?: Elf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: m0n1e -Biography: Born in the woods in the village of Catawoods, and brought up in a tree 15 ft tall, Renee has lived a worthy life. Her mother and aunty were the ones who raised her. They were the towns protectors, a master in archery. They tought Renee at a young age to use these skills for survival and practical defense. When Renee was 3 her village caught fire, killing her father and burning herself, her mother and aunty. After her village was destroyed, they had no choice but to move to another town. This wasn't easy for the family considering that the village was under constant attacks from enemies. One night, the night of the full moon, the town was attacked again with a rampage of Orcs. Her mother and aunty, stood fast and fought. Renee hid. She always regretted hiding. She started crying after hearing scream, after scream after scream. Then silence. It stopped. She crawled out from were she was hiding, seeing slashed throats and pools of blood everywhere. Tear streamed down her face as she stared into the eyes of her dying mother and aunty. She cried as sobbed her head among their chests. Their last heart beats grew thinner and thinner. Gasps of air escaping her mouth. Then words. Her mother was talking "Stay strong young one, remain alert, stay safe. I love you and I always will. I will look at you, and support you through your lives journey. I will be forever with you, in your heart. Never forget how much we care" Then her heart stops. Pulse gone. Ice cold. She remained with her now dead mother and aunty until a hand on her shoulder startled her. She turned behind to find herself staring into the eyes of the towns elder. Alive with no blood split. Alive as can be. "Come young Renee, we must move on". He pried her away from her mother and aunty and carried her on to their new lives. The sight of murder on the ground traumatizes her. "Elder one, what name shall I call you?" she asked as she cradled her face in his chest, still sobbing. "Call me Uncle young one" he replies. She falls asleep. When she woke up, she woke up to a room full of faces all staring at her. She couldn't hear what they are saying. All she could hear were the screams from the night before. Recalling memories of what my mother and aunty said. "Young one" uncle says. "What do they call you" he continues. "Renee, My name is Renee" she said politely trying to hold back the tears from my eyes. "Come along Renee". She followed uncle until they reached their new house. Living in a tree, just like home. After years of living with uncle, it was time she set off to a new destiny. One alone. Now aged 50 she walked along the long, winding lonely road, looking for civilization. Renee reached the town of Maratone. A small, friendly, gentile community, excepting of new citizens. She told them of her experience in archery and defense. It pleased them. So they elected her town defense minister. She worked for years protecting others. Now approaching the age of 100, she feels her destiny has just begun. -Character Age: Nearing the age of 100. -Character Appearance: Long brunette hair, purple eyes and lips, a blue with green shirt, blue pants and light grey shoes. -Character Personality:Captivated to never complain (Keeping in mind there are more unfortunate then herself) and commendably courteous, friendly and kind. -Your ambitions: To be able to defend citizens if the need arises. -Can your character read or write?: Yes, my character is really good at reading and writing. -Can your character mine?: Yes, she loves mining. -Are you a capable builder? Yes, she is a capable builder and very enthusiastic about it. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes, as she was brought up to wield any sorts of weaponry. -Enjoy Farming?: Yes, she loves harvesting the new, fresh crops. -Does your character have any special skills?:] Yes. She can talk to animals. -A screenshot of your skin: http://i51.tinypic.com/jkhh6e.jpg -Other Information: I hope this attempt is enough for me to be accepted, as I have tried my hardest.

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Almostnermal -How old are you?: 14 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Australian Eastern Time -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, my English grammar and language skills are good. -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a great fan of Minecraft. I enjoy playing it every chance I get. At first I didn't think it was interesting but my friends convinced me to try it and it is honestly the best game I have ever played. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 12 hours a week. I only get to play it every Saturdays and Sundays. -How long have you played minecraft?: Approximately 1-2 months. -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Yes. I have been roleplaying for 5-6 months. -What do you expect this server will be like?: An exciting sever experience with other roleplaying socialization. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Only a friends server were we built for fun and did survival. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Yes. -Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf. -How did you hear about us?: Through my friends. -Did you vote?: Yes. -What was your favourite Law?: No non-roleplay killing. -What was your least favourite Law?: I'm good with the rules. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? m0n1e In-Character: -Character Name: Renee -What is your Race?: Elf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: m0n1e -Biography: Born in the woods in the village of Catawoods, and brought up in a tree 15 ft tall, Renee has lived a worthy life. She was brought up by her mother and aunty. Her father died when she was 1 year old. She started to speak proper words at the age of 6 and learnt to write at the age of 4. She was raised to become a farmer, to help fight the starvation in the world. She believe that being explicitly nice to people, and memorable things will happen to you. She also believes that re-incarnation does not exist. She is nearing her 100th birthday and enjoying life as much as she can. She wants calm serenity to fill the earth, flourishing healthy environments and wants to meet fascinating people who will have an impact on her life forever. Although it was tough to hunt to survive as a child, she believes it is wrong to murder innocent animals un-necessarily, only in drastic situations, such as starvation, but no other reason. She moved to a more populated area at the age of 14, and met new friends. In an unfortunate house fire, all her friends were innocently deprived of their lives. Renee only just survived, but was scarred with the burns of fire. Renee mourns the loss of her friends each day. Her mother and aunty try to comfort her, but it never worked. After 2 years of mourning, she decides it's time to move on. But no matter how many friends she make they can never reestablish a friendship like before, with her true, first friends. Renee has made peace with her soul and with her heart and excepts that sometimes, even though things don't always work out, you have to keep your head held high. She despises the undead, who traumatize her life. Her mother and aunty died when the undead attacked the village of Catawood. Since then, Renee walks a lone on her lonely, winding path. Facing villains and evil people. -Character Age: 100 years old. -Character Appearance: Brunette, Green Eyes, Long hair,White and black shoes, shirt and pants. -Character Personality:Captivated to never complain (Keeping in mind there are more unfortunate then herself) and commendably courteous, friendly and kind. -Your ambitions: To be able to open her own shop for many people to enjoy. -Can your character read or write?: Yes, my character is really good at reading and writing. -Can your character mine?: Yes, she loves mining. -Are you a capable builder? Yes, she is a capable builder and very enthusiastic about it. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes, but chooses not to, most of the time. -Enjoy Farming?: Yes, she loves harvesting the new, fresh crops. -Does your character have any special skills?:] Yes. She can talk to animals. -A screenshot of your skin: http://i56.tinypic.com/309skti.jpg -Other Information:

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Almostnermal -How old are you?: 14 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Australian Eastern Time -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, my English grammar and language skills are good. -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a great fan of Minecraft. I enjoy playing it every chance I get. At first I didn't think it was interesting but my friends convinced me to try it and it is honestly the best game I have ever played. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 12 hours a week. I only get to play it every Saturdays and Sundays. -How long have you played minecraft?: Approximately 1-2 months. -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Yes. I have been roleplaying for 5-6 months. -What do you expect this server will be like?: An exciting sever experience with other roleplaying socialization. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Only a friends server were we built for fun and did survival. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Yes. -Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf. -How did you hear about us?: Through my friends. -Did you vote?: Yes. -What was your favourite Law?: No non-roleplay killing. -What was your least favourite Law?: I'm good with the rules. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? m0n1e In-Character: -Character Name: Renee -What is your Race?: Elf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: m0n1e -Biography: Born in the woods, and brought up in a tree. She was brought up by her mother and aunty. Her father died when she was 1 year old. She started to speak proper words at the age of 6 and learnt to write at the age of 4. She was raised to become a farmer, to help fight the starvation in the world. She believe that being nice to people means good things will happen to you. She also believes that re-incarnation does not exist. She is nearing her 100th birthday and enjoying life as much as she can. She wants world peace, healthy environments and wants to meet amazing people who will have an impact on her life forever. Although it was tough to hunt to survive as a child, she believes it is wrong to kill animals un-necessarily, only in drastic situations, such as starvation, but no other reason. She moved to a more populated area at the age of 14, and met new friends. In an unfortunate house fire, all her friends were killed. Renee only just survived, but was scarred with the burns of fire. Renee mourns the loss of her friends each day. Her mother and aunty try to comfort her, but it never worked. After 2 years of mourning, she decides it's time to move on. But no matter how many friends she make they can never replace her first, true friends. -Character Age: 100 -Character Appearance: Brunette, Green Eyes, Long hair,White and black shoes, shirt and pants. -Character Personality: Bubbly and nice, friendly and kind. -Your ambitions: To become a farmer, harvesting crops. -Can your character read or write?: Yes, my character is really good at reading and writing. -Can your character mine?: Yes. -Are you a capable builder? Yes. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes. -Enjoy Farming?: Yes. -Does your character have any special skills?:] Yes. She can talk to animals. -A screenshot of your skin: http://i56.tinypic.com/309skti.jpg -Other Information:

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Almostnermal -How old are you?: 14 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: South Australia -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a great fan of Minecraft. I enjoy playing it every chance I get. At first I didn't think it was interesting but my friends convinced me to try it and it is honestly the best game I have ever played. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 12 hours a week. I only get to play it every Saturdays and Sundays. -How long have you played minecraft?: Approximately 1-2 months. -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Yes. I have been roleplaying for 5-6 months. -What do you expect this server will be like?: An exciting sever experience with other roleplaying socialization. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Only a friends server were we built for fun and did survival. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Yes. -Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf. -How did you hear about us?: Through my friends. -Did you vote?: Yes. -What was your favourite Law?: No non-roleplay killing. -What was your least favourite Law?: I'm good with the rules. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? m0n1e In-Character: -Character Name: Renee -What is your Race?: Elf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: m0n1e -Biography: Born in the woods, and brought up in a tree. She was brought up by her mother and aunty. Her father died when she was 1 year old. She started to speak proper words at the age of 6 and learnt to write at the age of 4. She was raised to become a farmer, to help fight the starvation in the world. She believe that being nice to people means good things will happen to you. She also believes that re-incarnation does not exist. She is nearing her 100th birthday and enjoying life as much as she can. She wants world peace, healthy environments and wants to meet amazing people who will have an impact on her life forever. Although I was tough to hunt to survive as a child, I believe it is wrong to kill animals un-necessarily, only in drastic situations, such as starvation, but no other reason. -Character Age: 16 -Character Appearance: Brunette, Green Eyes, Long hair, brown clothes, brown shoes. -Character Personality: Bubbly and nice, friendly and kind. -Your ambitions: To become a farmer, harvesting crops. -Can your character read or write?: Yes. -Can your character mine?: Yes. -Are you a capable builder? Yes. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes. -Enjoy Farming?: Yes. -Does your character have any special skills?:] Yes. She can talk to animals. -A screenshot of your skin: http://tinypic.com/r/nxqudz/7 -Other Information:

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Almostnermal -How old are you?: 14 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: South Australia -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a great fan of Minecraft. I enjoy playing it every chance I get. At first I didn't think it was interesting but my friends convinced me to try it and it is honestly the best game I have ever played. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 12 hours a week. I only get to play it every Saturdays and Sundays. -How long have you played minecraft?: Approximately 1-2 months. -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Yes. I have been roleplaying for 5-6 months. -What do you expect this server will be like?: An exciting sever experience with other roleplaying socialization. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Only a friends server were we built for fun and did survival. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Yes. -Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf. -How did you hear about us?: Through my friends. -Did you vote?: Yes. -What was your favourite Law?: No non-roleplay killing. -What was your least favourite Law?: I'm good with the rules. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? m0n1e In-Character: -Character Name: Renee -What is your Race?: Elf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: m0n1e -Biography: Born in the woods, and brought up in a tree. She was brought up by her mother and aunty. Her father died when she was 1 year old. She started to speak proper words at the age of 6 and learnt to write at the age of 4. -Character Age: 16 -Character Appearance: Brunette, Green Eyes, Long hair, brown clothes, brown shoes. -Character Personality: Bubbly and nice, friendly and kind. -Your ambitions: To become a farmer, harvesting crops. -Can your character read or write?: Yes. -Can your character mine?: Yes. -Are you a capable builder? Yes. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes. -Enjoy Farming?: Yes. -Does your character have any special skills?:] -A screenshot of your skin: http://tinypic.com/r/nxqudz/7 -Other Information: