Alys

Denied

Was delighted to see you've waited 48 hours this time. However, your definition of roleplaying is taken straight from Wikipedia and your metagaming/powergaming is courtesy of this app. I say you've plenty of time to fix this. Poking around your post history reveals that you may be a banned player trying to get back in. Seems too fishy to me. I don't think you'll be applying again.

Accepted

Welcome to Aegis! Please wait patiently for a GM to implement you.

Your character's facial hair makes me and Lenson smile.

Denied

For not waiting 48 hours.

Next time it would help to:

- Copy and paste the format and then fill in your questions. Makes your application easier to read and follow. You also forgot to include the definition of roleplaying.

- Do more research on powergaming.

- Perhaps a less cliche, and also, more detailed biography. Note that enchanted items in Aegis are next to impossible to obtain.

Accepted

Lack of effort makes me red,

Incompleteness makes me blue,

But your app has neither,

So a welcome to you~

Denied

For these reasons:

- Incomplete definitions of Roleplaying and Powergaming. There's a bit more to them than that.

- Not enough information in your biography about the character. Remember a biography is: history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.

- "Flaming fists of death" and "orc beserkers" do not, and really should not, exist.

- Response too short for scenario questions. Don't just say what, tell how.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Applications

Denied

You clearly know the in and out's of roleplaying, which is nice to see. However I cannot accept your application because of these issues with the bottom portion.

- The biggest problem being that any "evil" character needs to have an approved villain application.

- The brief history.. was too brief. We not only look for where your character comes from, but also what made him the way he is. In the words of Trouvo: "There is no such thing as an answer that is too detailed, too long, or too much." You did well in terms of personality and appearance.

- Go more in depth with your scenario questions. This is your first chance to show us your RPing abilities.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Applications

Denied

- It's very messy and hard to read. Please format better next time, with bolding and spacing.

- Work on all your answers. Provide a more descriptive biography of your character and go more in depth on the scenario questions.

- Provide a screenshot.

- Fix grammar and spelling best you can.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Applications

Denied

Work on:

- Definitions for roleplaying, metagaming, and powergaming. You didn't show a clear understanding of these concepts.

- Adjust your biography. At the moment, it contradicts lore. Correct me if I'm wrong, but there's no such title as "High Dark Elf." You'll also need to provide a more descriptive explanation of your character.

- Try to make the "What does your character do?" questions reflect your RP ability as best you can.

- Fix up grammar/punctuation.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Applications

Denied

*prods with stick* Given you two days to make a revision.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Application Section

Denied

What you should adjust:

- Overall, try to improve the grammar. The running sentences without punctuation are difficult to follow.

- Expand on the definitions of roleplaying, metagaming, and powergaming. They are close, but not quite there yet.

- Provide a more detailed description of who your character is, why he is the way he is, and what he wants to be/do. Remember the bio is the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.

- Lastly, don't just answer the "What does your character do" questions with a short phrase. Demonstrate your roleplaying abilities with the character you've created.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Application Section

Accepted

Could have been a tad better, but everything is up to par.

Welcome to Aegis! Please wait patiently for a GM to implement you.

Denied

There are several issues with your application. Here's what you need to work on.

- Answer all questions completely. If you do not know the answer to something, such as the definitions to roleplaying, metagaming, and powergaming, then feel free to look it up (Google!). However, do not copy and paste.

- Use correct formatting and grammar. They demonstrate effort and will increase your chances of being accepted.

- Everything in the In Character half could expanded on. Think more about who your character is, what motivates him, and who he wants to be. Also, ambitions are what your character aims to achieve, not what he is skilled at.

- I would suggest looking over applications in the Implemented Application section for further help.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Application Section