DoubleDeetz (Fomsil)

Your Biography could be much more detailed and list more things about your life.

Your age isn't acceptable for a Dwarf.

No picture came up on your skin link for me so you will have to sort that problem out.

Please expand and your Role-playing situations.

Please PM when you have read this so I can remove this post to the appropriate section.

Your using the Old template please use the new.

Please PM when you have read this so I can move to the appropriate section.

I didn't put there name? Nobody is going to go searching for that Application.

Role-playing situations.

Many people do not put enough detail into there Role-playing situations.

Yes a short 1 sentence could answer the question but it doesn't show much effort here is some ideas;

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do?

He runs towards the bandits, knocks them down, quickly drops his sword onto one of them, then on to the other one, killing them.

He sprint's towards the dark clothed bandits, dogging the various pit holes that filled the area. With swift reactions and mighty leaps I quickly got within range of the bandits. Avoiding the various sticks and branches that scattered the ground I aimed with great precise to avoid such things making me swift but with stealth. I leaped through the air, as I collided into the back of the bandits I thrusted my arms into both of them knocking them down into surprise. The elf saw me coming and was ready for my approach. Whilst they fell to the ground I tossed a sword that was lightly tied onto my back and into the elve's arms and within moments we had the upper hand on the bandits. In great timing, we both plowed our swords into the bandits dealing them an instant death. We then moved the body's behind a tree and accepted a thank you of the elve and went our separate ways.

Your character walks up to a shop in the middle of Al'Khazar. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer?

"Hello, sir! I'd like to buy some *what I'm looking for*, if you have any.". If the shop owner does have some, I give him the amount of the items I want of that kind, and hand him some money, then leave.

Myself: Greetings there sir/madam, what a mighty fine shop you have here.

ShopKeeper: Why hello there, thank you for such a compliment, I created this myself.

Myself: You definitely have a good eye for designing interior.

ShopKeeper: Oh you are a nice fellow, what may I do for you today friend?

Myself: I was just passing through and I was curious if you are currently selling Red Mushrooms.

ShopKeeper: Ah yes, I had a fresh batch this morning, locally grown to.

Myself: Great! How many do you currently have?

Shopkeeper: I have 4 left, I would be quick these Red Mushrooms make some rather nice soup.

Myself: Sounds tasty, I could take 3 of your hands please. How much does this total?

Shopkeeper: That would come to 250 minas for the 3 Red Mushrooms.

Myself: 250 minas, how about 300 Minas for the 4.

ShopKeeper: You got yourself a deal there, Please come back soon.

Then examples are of an Application I just read. Write down your idea first but then pick things out and expand then repeat till you have got a lengthy, detailed answer. I just did this of the top of my head so I am sure you can do much better ones.

Your What is Role-playing answer doesn't answer the question asked.

Please expand much more on your Biography, such as family, what happened to them, past homes ect.

Please pick a realistic age for a dwarf.

Please expand on your Role-playing situations.

Please put a skin that is on your character.

Please put a picture of your skin on your character.

Also improve on your Role-play situations.

I do not wish you decline you as it's not worthy of a decline but nor up to the standard of accept. Please make these 2 changes I have requested.

Please expand on your What is Role-play answer, no way near detailed enough.

Please put much more detail into your Biography.

Your ambitions are not ambitions.

Please put more effort and detail into your Role-play situations.

Moved to Accepted Forum

Please expand on your What is Role-play answer.

Please Research and learn what Meta-gaming and Power-gaming are.

Please answer ALL questions.

Please put much more detail into Biography.

Please make ambition more ambitious.

Please make your Role-playing situations much more detailed.

Please answer the Meta-gaming and Power-gaming questions fully.

Your biography needs to me much more detailed.

Your ambition needs to be more ambitious.

Your Role-playing situations answers need to me more detailed.

*You could format this a lot better. Such as questions bold, answers normal.

*Space between questions

*Space between question and answers

Moved to Denied Forum

Please expand on your What is Role-play answer.

Please include an explanation for what Meta-gaming is.

Please expand on your Ambition and the Role-play situations.

Moved to Denied Forum

Please expand on your what is Role-playing answer.

Please make your Biography much more detailed.

Please make your character ambition more...ambitious.

Please put an overall more effort into every question on here.

Moved to Accepted Forum

MC Name: Leathllee95

RP Name: Fomsil

Race: Dwarf

Skill Levels: ( Swords, Archery, Axe Mastery, Wrestling ):

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• Swords: 69, will increase to 100.
  

Do you have Teamspeak: Yes

I am selling 14 for 30 each.

Good luck catching me in-game ;)

Please be patient while a GM promotes you in-game.

Please be patient while a GM promotes you in-game.

Please expand on the Role-playing answer

Please improve your answers on the Role-playing scenarios.

Please format this better such as;

Taking all the off

Setting questions as bold and answers normal

Leaving a gap between questions and answers.

Comment when you have done and I will re-check.

Your using the old template please use the new,

Please format this better such as;

Leaving a gap between questions.

Setting questions as bold and answers normal

Leaving a gap between questions and answers.

Comment when you have done and I will re-check.