Auliverius Xemenez

If this gets denied,I was planning on making a remake of this,I'm just gonna wait till it gets denied or not.

No problem.

Way too short,trying putting more effort into it,I would look at accepted applications for examples.

Try going more into depth with your bio

First off,Remove the ,it's a nuisance to look at and it makes your application look really sloppy.Second,don't leave simple answers like "Yes" trying giving an explanation as to why your character can do what he or she can do.Third is your grammar,You don't need the usage of ! a lot in your sentences Try making your sentences more declarative so that it actually sounds like your being serious about it.Fourth,TAKE YOUR TIME,No offense but my lord this just is rushed and sloppy.The biography is just messy,don't say something like "Oh yeah my characters parents died and I was kidnapped" That's way to short. Try taking these tips when making a biography of your character: -At least try to stay away from cliches,it just makes the bio bland and unoriginal. -Have a good history of your character. -Write something about your character unique,what people will know your character for. -Personality:Does anyone have a love or hate relationship with that character? A great tip is taking someone's personality you know in real life that you know well,but not to well,and try to act out how to they would feel about something and the good thing is that you don't know the person too well so that leaves room for imagination. -Another useful tip for biography's is that there's something were you can write a story of a story that's at least over 100 years old,but try to alternate it so that it's different but still has the basic concept,it's not illegal either because for example people have wrote about Cinderella a lot because that story is over 100 years old and people pass it on and have there own story to write.

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name:ApocalypticRice1 -How old are you?:13 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Central -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:I would like to say that I do,but considering that we are not all perfect I tend to mess up English.Sometimes I think I use the right grammar in an sentence but really I don't.And alot of the times I either forget a word in an sentence or use the wrong word in a sentence. -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I'm a student.I'm usually easy to get along with.I'm a tech nerd. -How much time could you be on the server weekly?:5-10 hours weekly most likely. -How long have you played Minecraft?:Probably about a year in a half -What do you know about role-playing?:Acting out a character through the eyes and thoughts of your character,not your eyes or thoughts.Being a part of a new world and facing your characters trials and errors in that world. -What do you expect this server will be like?:A large community with alot of people RP'ing and being a part of the community. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:I forgot the name of the server,but it got greifed and the person had to remake the server,he never remade it though. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:Yes,without the rules I wouldn't being posting or joining. -Name the 4 races on this server:Humans,Elves,Dwarves,and Orcs. -How did you hear about us?:I saw someone showcasing the server. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:Auliverius_Xemenez In-Character: -Character Name:Auliverius Xemenez -What is your Race?:Elf -Biography:Being born in a small village,Auliverius spent his time growing crops and food for the village.Unfortunately the village was being controlled by an empire and the village was very poor as long as a lot of other people in the village.His parents were greatly effected from being poor and they were slaves because of them being in low classes,because of starvation and being beaten up to death they died.When they died Auliverius had to raise his little sister,Auliverius spent time working in a mine to keep the family alive,it didn't help though because later his sister would become very ill.In order to take care of his sister he went to school to train to be a scribe,Auliverius not being very good a writing he got beaten a lot.But Auliverius had a lot a friends to support him so he never worried about being beaten,but when thing Auliverius did worry about was a student named Apollo Trismosin who was a resident of Aegis,Apollo had a strong hatred twords Auliverius and treated him like dirt.After returning home from school one day Auliverius saw his home town being burnt down to ashes by Apollo,Auliverius rushed in to try to kill him,but then Apollo escaped,not to be seen.Auliverius finds his sister dead,with a diamond sword stuck in her back,with a note next to the body stating that Apollo killed his sister.Seeking revenge Auliverius gets told from his soon to be trainer,Xerxes,to come to Aegis to be trained to fight.Xerxes trained Auliverius to fight,after Auliverius was ready to go off into the world of Aegis he receives an obsidian sword for defense Auliverius usually keeps it inside a sheath inside of his trench coat. Auliverius now journeys off into the world of Aegis to get revenge on Apollo. -Character Age:20 -Character Appearance:Wears a blue and dark grey trench coat with a white and black undershirt,Blonde hair. -Character Personality:Calm and gentle,only to the people he trusts that is.The people he hates he is very aggressive to. -Your ambitions:To get revenge on Apollo for killing his sister and burning down his village. -Can your character read or write?:Being trained to be a scribe,yes. -Can your character mine?:He used to know it when he was younger because he worked in a mine,but now no because he forgot how to. -Are you a capable builder?:No,never practiced architecture because was to busy trying to write or mining. -Can you wield a sword?:Yes,was trained by Xerxes to wield a sword. -Enjoy Farming?:Yes,always grew crops as a child and still enjoys it today. -Does your character have any special skills?:Knows many fighting techniques learned from Xerxes -A screenshot of your skin: http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/217/20111022173034.png/ -Other Information:This took a LONG time to make @-@ but if I'm accepted or not,keep up the good work!

I'm not an admin,but I would suggest making your biography longer,and alot of other things in the application.Just saying because it might get denied that way.

Be patient,It takes awhile.Alot of people post applications here so it will take awhile for the admins to get through all of them.

DENIED GO TO SECOND POST IF YOU SEE IT