fielder35901

Under review.

Pending.

Your application has been placed on Pending for the following reasons:

- Please be more specific with what this kings-guard is, Norland I believe doesn't have such but an organization with another name

- It may even be best to contact Norland's current leader and ask if such is ok

- Defeating everyone in in your character's class seems somewhat overpowered, tone it down

- You cannot have a deity or a higher being as a persona's parent

- A human cannot have an Elf as a sibling unless they are adoptive siblings

- Avoid the "My parent(s) was killed by (something) and I swore to get revenge" as it is overused

You'll have 24 hours to make the needed changes. If you think you need extra time or have questions, just let me know and I'll be happy to help out.

Done I think

Alright so:

- Explain to me the slave part in your interesting facts, edit that and clarify it

- "when he got out of the academy they offered him a job in the Royal Guards" You haven't changed this.

- "By the time Jacob was 17 he had already been the top of his class in every class he would beat everyone in sparring even rarely his own teacher." You haven't changed this.

- "but what he discovered shocked him his father was dead and a knife on the floor with Dark Elf blood" How do you know it's blood from a Dark Elf?

- Add some personality traits, helps make a solid character.

You'll have additional time to make the needed changes.

Done hope that's good if it needs anything else please tell me I love improving things

Ok so, Dark Elven blood looks just like normal human blood.

is there anything else to change or just that

That and the Knight's order thing, I'd just recommend changing it to the Norlandic military.

ok

Just one more thing, you need to apply for the Norlandic Army ingame. So remove the part about accepting the position.

ok thank you for all this help

Of course!

did I fix it correctly

Mhm! Accepted!

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