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By fielder35901

    • Rules: Yes
    Referral: Google
    In your own words, what is powergaming, and why should it be avoided in roleplay?: Using information that your character doesn't know
    In your own words, what is metagaming, and why should it be avoided in roleplay?: being OP like ripping off someones head without a reply
    Status: Accepted

Jacob started his life in the kingdom of Norland. He spent most of his time as a child sparring and fighting with wooden swords so he could be just like his pa. His father was a lieutenant for the king and a respected knight, that when he would go through other cities people almost every time knew his name. As Jacob turned 16 he went on his way to an academy where only the best of the best go to become knights. By the time he got done with the academy he was now 18 he had done so well in the academy when he got out of the academy they offered him a application for the Norlandic Army From that very moment Jacob would try to be as great as his father. He went off to his house and told his father all about the academy after that day he set off to Norland where his journey was just beginning

Character Name: Jacob H.
Character Race: Human
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 18
Physical Description: Jacob is 6 foot 1 inch and he has light and bark brown hair
Roleplay Scenario: The traveller has just arrived in a small town. As they look around, their gaze is met with run down houses and shops. They duck into one of the shacks, illuminated by a series of candles suspended in the air. At the back of the small room, an old hag raises her head, “What brings you to this dingy town?" She begins, then pauses to study their face—”Ah, it’s you. I’ve been expecting you. Sit,” she gestures at a chair, “Where do you come from? What do you hope to make of yourself?”

((How does your character respond? Please ensure your response is at least six sentences long, and uses at least two actions.))

Example: (delete this when you add your own)

"Oh, I just, uh…" The traveler stutters, tensing up. They eye the crone, then back outside the shack. For a moment, the air thickens with anticipation, until…
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Riftblade

Pending.

 

Your application has been placed on Pending for the following reasons:

- Please be more specific with what this kings-guard is, Norland I believe doesn't have such but an organization with another name

- It may even be best to contact Norland's current leader and ask if such is ok

- Defeating everyone in in your character's class seems somewhat overpowered, tone it down

- You cannot have a deity or a higher being as a persona's parent

- A human cannot have an Elf as a sibling unless they are adoptive siblings

- Avoid the "My parent(s) was killed by (something) and I swore to get revenge" as it is overused

 

You'll have 24 hours to make the needed changes. If you think you need extra time or have questions, just let me know and I'll be happy to help out.

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Riftblade

Alright so:

 

- Explain to me the slave part in your interesting facts, edit that and clarify it

- "when he got out of the academy they offered him a job in the Royal Guards" You haven't changed this.

- "By the time Jacob was 17 he had already been the top of his class in every class he would beat everyone in sparring even rarely his own teacher." You haven't changed this.

- "but what he discovered shocked him his father was dead and a knife on the floor with Dark Elf blood" How do you know it's blood from a Dark Elf?

- Add some personality traits, helps make a solid character.

 

You'll have additional time to make the needed changes.

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Riftblade

Mhm! Accepted!

 

Welcome to LoTC, you'll be whitelisted soon enough! Until then, check out more of the lore which can be found on the forums or the wiki and see what builds there are on the server as a Wandering Soul. If you have questions, don't hesitate to contact me and I'll be happy to answer. Here's the link to the new player discord as well: https://discord.gg/jXC5SX7. 

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