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    In your own words, what is powergaming, and why should it be avoided in roleplay?: is knowing something by an outside information(example:my friend was going around with me in an adventure,then a unknown monster came in,and our village only known one thing about him,is that he can only die by a hit in one of his arms,but we dont know an
    In your own words, what is metagaming, and why should it be avoided in roleplay?: its like been op(overpowerded),example:forcing an action that the playing im RP with didnt want,or bieng like a god or so,able to one hit kill(just an example) my power level need to be limited.
    Status: Accepted

 

The Story Begin With a Little Kid Called Wari,He was Bron In The City Of Reza,His fammily chosed the relegion of Diocese of Jorenus as thier way,he was born in a fammily were more into The Art Of Music(mostly HighLanders music,that use drums,and often a singular toned speaking voice;h, Wari,he was a bit bad at talking with the Peoples in the city,And His Sister Saya Minatsuki,Over The Years Wari And Saya Were Getting Into Troubles,From Destroying plants to robbing the bread of their mom,After a Long Period Of Time,Wari And Saya Were Going Around Leaving the city,Saya told Wari,Everything About The Story Of thier Fammily,And she showed him The Story of The City Of Reza,After They wanted to come Back,A Man With a Black Rope ,Approched to them,Wari Wasnt Able To Move At That Moment,Saya Tryed,As Saya Told Her Dad Before that She will defend Wari Until He Grows Up,That What she did,The Unknown Man Used The Robes,And Took Saya To A Cave,Wari After He Saw The Accident,He Did not want for his sister Any Harm,He Followed them,He Found that Saya And The Unknown Man Are Going To a Abonded Prison,Where He Put Her,Then Wari Tryed to Find a way to sneak to them,but he cant,mostly because,he saw an Orc,So he wanted to come back to,but How lucky Is He,He Forget the Way to The city,And The Prison,Alright,After a Long time trying To Find His city,Or a place Full Of Humans,Or Any Race,Trying to catch Food,And Water,He Found a Big City,he knew it isnt his city,But still,he asked a Man,He Told him that This City Is Called Aeriel,Wari Was Happy And Not at the same time,A Woman,Asked Wari Where Is His Parents/owners,He Told her That He Forget the Way to his city,so he came from this way and Found this City,She Told him that she can let him live with her,After a few days,Wari Wanted To Look More like Saya,And Not Wari,mostly Because he want To Let His Real Self A Secret For The Time He Come back to his Village,The Woman Gived Him The Right to,Over The Years Saya Became 19,The Woman Told Wari,Its The Time to Find a Place To Live And to Start Your Own Life,If you need Any Help You know Where i Live,As Wari(Saya) Is now able to Start His Own Life,He Chosed to Train Until his Ready to Fight,So He Can Find His Sister,Here Were We Can Say The Real Story Of Wari(Saya Will Begin).

(2 Things To Note:1. as Wari Wanted To Look Like Saya,His name Will Become Saya,And He Will Try To Look Like a Girl 
2.My Big Sister Will Join After A Few Days She is 23
3.This Account is Made For My Little Brother And The Other SisTER,But She Gived it to me,mostly because i wanted the ranks that she have on Popular Minigames Server,i exchanged it to her,And my other Brother Just made an Account Now,So I Think that Enough to Know.).


Character Name: Saya Minatsuki
Character Race: Human
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 19
Physical Description: A Man that Look Like A Girl With a Long Hair,and a Mask on His Head so No One Know that He is a Man Because of his face,Meduim Bodly Shape
Roleplay Scenario: The traveller has just arrived in a small town. As they look around, their gaze is met with run down houses and shops. They duck into one of the shacks, illuminated by a series of candles suspended in the air. At the back of the small room, an old hag raises her head, “What brings you to this dingy town?" She begins, then pauses to study their face—”Ah, it’s you. I’ve been expecting you. Sit,” she gestures at a chair, “Where do you come from? What do you hope to make of yourself?”

((How does your character respond? Please ensure your response is at least six sentences long, and uses at least two actions.))

Example: (delete this when you add your own)

"Oh, I just, uh…" The traveler stutters, tensing up. They eye the crone, then back outside the shack. For a moment, the air thickens with anticipation, until…
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As you can can see, you are almost done! I just need you to change a few things

 

1 your story does not have any referrals to lore. Nation names, events or cities count as lore. The village names in your application are no real places that exist within the game and so they do not count.


 

If you need any more assistance you can contact me on the forums, through discord or in-game! My discord is (chaos#7283) and if you find me on the server, you can simply do /msg chaosgamer_. I strongly suggest joining the new player discord as well in case you need assistance or advice from other players or staff members → https://discord.gg/eySYjqw

I also recommend you looking over the wiki so you can find good lore to include in your application ?

 

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to note Terriko Village is in the game,and i readed evrything about it,

to know i dont really know why did you tell me that,plus all of that as the wiki dont say what time did terriko accident happend,i cant say that the character is born in new terriko,another thing aeriel is the biggest city in Aegis,and i already noted,that terriko village is on Aegis realm,i tryed to put it there

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Just now, SayaMinatsuki said:

to note Terriko Village is in the game,and i readed evrything about it,

to know i dont really know why did you tell me that,plus all of that as the wiki dont say what time did terriko accident happend,i cant say that the character is born in new terriko,another thing aeriel is the biggest city in Aegis,and i already noted,that terriko village is on Aegis realm,i tryed to put it there

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26 minutes ago, chaosgamer said:

Changed Status to Pending

 

26 minutes ago, chaosgamer said:

Changed Status to Pending

 

again if you readed the story before,you may understand that what happend wasnt on the village,out of it that mean its could be in the forest example,the victim were only me and my sister,as you may know,im not trying to say you didnt read it,or didnt look up the cities and villages i write in the story,but to know,i got decnied last 2 days,so i came back after reading the wiki

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☾ ⇒ Your bio requires lore from the server. I suggest looking over the forums and wiki for places, events, noteable figures.
☾ ⇒ Your story is very difficult to follow. I am unsure if english is a second language, but the story makes very little sense. Perhaps take some time proof reading and rewriting the story

☾ ⇒ Your interesting facts do not really hold any weakness. I suggest finding something that your character needs to overcome, such as a handicap such as a fear, disability, or injury

 

You will find our New Player Discord will have valuable resources and members to help you. You are welcome to PM me with any questions comments or concerns you may have. Please notify me when you are finished with your changes

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