Valannor

Overall a p solid submission, tho like Flem said, it does have some teething issues. I reckon you could refine it right proper though, esp given how long queue is 

My only personal suggestions would be to nix the Draan-binding aspect of the MArt, tone down the presence thing as Flem suggested to be more akin to Dratho Zha than Azdromoths own personal presence (though keep the earth rumbling and shit that's cool as hell), and tinker a bit more with the intended purpose of this bad boy so that if it's accepted, you're truly happy with it and it'll provide saucy rp for ages to come. My opinion ain't reflective of the team's, this is just my personal two cents, but I like the vibes here, and think the execution will be based if it's tweaked a bit. 

Denied. 

The Empyrean would loom over Ilaria's shoulder as they glimpsed the missive, the Barrowlord's cowl shifting curiously as it read - the single blazing eye of cobalt gloam seeming perplexed in some crude manner. 

"They seem to hear much, but listen to little. Is it then the stance of Velulei's daughters and sons, in these times, that all must be subject to the torture of a spiteful goddess?

Or is it that they only desire the Maiden's domain for their own monarch of the dead... A curiosity, but one which will pass in time. A fire may only burn for so long, 'ere the coals turn to ash." 

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Over the man's defiled carcass within the confines of ivory walls, the Keeper Alatariel laid a hand o'er the heart of the Vindicator. An amulet about her neck pulsed faintly with golden light, the angel's solar gaze falling upon the man's bruised countenance. And to her fallen grandchild, her words flowed as honey and gold, yet laden with the saddened realization of duty's toll;

“Death is not an end to our service - It is the evolution of it. Ours is a duty maintained until even the aeons falter, and death itself perishes. We are denied the pale slumber. Go gently into our Lord's Golden Host; Godspeed unto ye, Grandchild of mine."

Accepted. 

Only a FOOL fears Slaanesh!

If you don't fix this font I'm going to put chemicals in the water to turn the frogs gay

+1 for the barrow homies

This MArt requires creation roleplay to be done before it may enter the review queue. 

In waters beyond, a slumbering beast awoke - and a floating fortress would let its cannons sing in jubilant praise of He from on high. 

Accepted. 


3/3 as of February 15th, 2024

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Denied. 

Hmm... Winds Howling. 

If you're going to use AI writing then at least make it clear you used AI to begin with. Don't try and pass it off as purely your work, y'know? 

As a server we're going to have to tackle the issue of AI writing being used to make entire lore posts, applications, TAs, etc. and how we approach the issue of artistic integrity in that regard. These tools have the potential to do a lot of good, as you've said, but the potential avenues of malicious or simply lazy usage needs to be addressed, accounted for, and safeguards need to be put in place. 

1/3, we begin again. The Golden Ten Thousand shall rise. 

3 hours ago, Cosmiverse said:

This comment section is full of copium...

 

 

 

But back on topic, we might as well do it to animii as well. This is more work for ST than anything. We do not need this just because of Golem lore has it. If this passes it is a slippery slope for other constructs without ST item cores.

Animii are on a PK clause. Embrace the PK clause. Embrace the potential for your story to end. 

the true solution is to put all atronachs on a PK clause, as all other constructs are. True balance.

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Pending.

This TA is incredibly sparse and vague in terms of the details, mechanics, and capabilities of this magic. Please include more detail and clarification throughout the entirety of this TA so as to demonstrate adequate ability to teach it.

Accepted.