Sevir

This is some really great lore here...except for one major problem. You mention under the religion aspect of the culture that they are a monotheistic faith, yet you refer to the use of multiple deities twice throughout the lore. The first time is under the 'war' section, where you talk about the god of war. The second time is under the song/dance section, where you write that they do their rituals to get the attention of their gods. Just saying, something you may want to fix.

Oren Lance Application MC Name - DatSevir RP Name - Jonathan Sevir Age - 22 Old Jobs and Work - None, though I'm certainly capable of taking care of any menial labor set before me in service of Oren. Skills for odd jobs? - N/A Weapon of Choice and ye mastery with that? - I prefer to use a blade when in combat. I'd say my skill level is around that of an adept. I've been training for nearly four years now, with guidance from my father. Why do ye wish to Join the Lances? - The life of the military has been a long tradition within my family bloodline (The Sevirs). My father and his as well both served honorably within the Empire as lances to the Emperor. My great grandfather also served the grand kingdom of Al'Khazar during the times of Aegis and the Undead wars. Now that I am of age, it is my turn to take the mantle of becoming a soldier in protection of my kinsmen and country. Do ye take the Oath-needed? I, Jonathan Sevir, pledge my weapon, my knowledge and life to the Knightly order of the Red Dragon. And swear my allegiance to Emperor Godfrey Horen and His Line of Succession. I shall serve the King, Order and Oren with undying loyalty and will do all that I can to keep them from harm. I will always complete a quest given to me by my king, Knight and Kingdom. I swear to protect its people and to stay true to the order and obey its ways and laws.