Brokencrowe

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Denied. You cannot simple cut out the open response questions, they are one of more important parts of the application. Please demonstrate a bit of maturity and effort. Do not post incomplete applications; from what you do have posted you have shown minimal effort. Which is just plain disrespectful to me, to the server and to the application team. You've only served to waste time. Please put in actual work if you expect to get accepted to this server. If you think this is the quality that is acceptable here on Lord of the Craft, you are sorely mistaken. You will be allowed to apply again in twenty four hours, if you have any questions concerning your application feel free to drop a message in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. The over all application was nice, really nice. You obviously know how to play this character. However, your open response questions albeit, give a very clear depiction of your character lack something. They need a bit more expansion and details and depth. Other than that you did a very good job. You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours. If you have any questions regarding your application, feel free to drop a message in my inbox. Good luck! - Brokencrowe

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Denied. Please research the term power-gaming more in depth and provide a definition that demonstrates clear understanding of the term. Your biography lacks lore related material and could use with some expansion around who your character is. Expand upon your ambition. it's somewhat cliche'. Why is his sword and bow his favorite tools? Elaborate, where did he pick up the talent to use them? And for what purpose? Your open response questions are far too short, please expand upon these. They are there to give you the opportunity to show off your mettle as a roleplayer and give us, the application team, the first taste of your character and how you are going to play him. Please don't get lazy! Allow for realistic outcomes, and don't be afraid to get more creative! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Expand upon your definition of meta-gaming. Your definition of power-gaming isn't very clear at all, and I am inclined to say it is incorrect. Please research it a bit more. Your biography only includes two lore related places, please add in a bit more lore related tid bits. I also am left feeling slightly confused about who your character is, and what sets him apart from other characters. Expand upon your ambition. it's somewhat cliche'. Why is his sword his favorite tool? Elaborate, where did he pick up the talent to use it? And for what purpose? Where did he learn stealth? Your open response questions are far too short, please expand upon these. They are there to give you the opportunity to show off your mettle as a roleplayer and give us, the application team, the first taste of your character and how you are going to play him. Please don't get lazy! Allow for realistic outcomes, and don't be afraid to get more creative! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Your definition of power-gaming is somewhat unclear, please expand upon it. Show adaquate understanding of the term. Your biography is lore breaking, you cannot just create kingdoms. It is also very rushed and does nothing to define your character, you go from being tossed into the wilds to a rough ranger. How and why? Where did he acquire the skills? Who taught him? Your ambition lacks depth, and needs expansion. It is also slightly cliche'. How did he master the bow and arrow? Who taught him? Where did he learn? Please give us more details! Your open response questions are far too short, please expand upon these. They are there to give you the opportunity to show off your mettle as a roleplayer and give us, the application team, the first taste of your character and how you are going to play him. Please don't get lazy! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Please expand upon your definition of roleplaying. Please expand upon your definition of power-gaming. Your biography is rather brief, could use some expansion. Why is he going to Hanseti? Did you read the lore? Your skin link doesn't seem to lead anywhere. Your open response questions are far too short, please expand upon these. They are there to give you the opportunity to show off your mettle as a roleplayer and give us, the application team, the first taste of your character and how you are going to play him. Please don't get lazy! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

What will your Wiki name be?: Brokencrowe Why are you trustworthy?: I'd like to think being a member of Lord of Craft for nearly a year amounts to something. I am also a member of the application team, and have done nothing but follow the rules to the best of my ability.

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Denied. Your definition of power-gaming could use with some expansion and clarification. You need to demonstrate clear understanding of the term, and you seem slightly mixed. You should expand upon the ending of your biography some, why must they always forget their parents? Regardless, good job incorporating the fall of Aegis into your application. The ending just fills a bit rushed. Expand upon your ambition, as of now it is rather simple and cliche'. Why are picks and axes his most favored tools if he is an advanced warrior? Elaborate on this. Why does he Love mining so much, and don't say simply because he is a Dwarf. Your open response questions seem to lack effort, please expand upon these deeply. These questions are done to show us, the application team, a first taste of your character and how you are to roleplay him. Please don't be lazy! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. The application feels rushed, appears as a wall of text and isn't all together easy to read. Your definition of roleplaying and powergaming is underdeveloped and does not, at all, demonstrate clear understanding of the terms. Your biography is simply far too short, you do not show that you've read the rules and lore of the realm, and I do not get a feel for who your character is, and how he got to the way he is. "Nobody knows what happened to him," okay nobody knows, but tell us Anyways. Why is his ambition to become a captain again? One handed swords and what? Why swords? Who taught him? How did he get so skilled with a blade? Your open response questions are far, far too short. More effort, please! Open response questions are your chance to show off your mettle as a roleplayer, and give us, the application team, a first taste of your character. Write the response in full roleplay, as you would a short story, and expand upon them as much as possible. There are several well-written guides by the dedicated members of our server you can look into here on the forums. Do some research, and expand upon all aspects of you application. Aim for something great and spectacular. Go above and beyond, and you will surely be accepted. As it is now, your application feels like it was just thrown together as quickly as possibly. It should be an almost soul searching experience where you learn all you can about your character and then show the world. It should also be a fun experience. Thank you for applying to the server! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Your definition of roleplaying is somewhat awkward and unclear, please demonstrate clear understanding of the term. Your powergaming definition seems to show poor understanding of the term perhaps research the term more carefully, and expand upon it. Half of your biography is about your parents, please expand upon the half that actually contains your character. Please add in lore-related material, and break the biography up into paragraphs and make it visually pleasing to read. Your ambition lacks substance, please expand upon it. Why is the hoe his favored tool? You didn't elaborate much on his farming before he ran away in the biography, please make it more clear. Your open response questions all are rather short and could do with some expansion. Open response questions are your opportunity to show us the application team your mettle as a roleplayer and give us, the application team, the first taste of your character. Please do not get lazy on this! You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Expand upon your definitions of roleplaying and meta and powergaming, please demonstrate complete understanding of the terms. Please incorporate more lore based materials into your biography, prove you've read the lore and rules of the realm. Bits of your biography need to be prettied up, you need to fix up the grammar, word choice, and some spelling. Expand upon your ambition. It seems somewhat cliche' right now. Expand on your cartography (Map-making) I think it's an interesting part of your character. Some of your open response questions need more fleshing out, and more realism. You're on the right track though. You are nearly there, you're just lacking in a few very small areas. Reach for greatness, and you will surely find it. Thank you for applying. You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. Your application lacks overall effort. Please expand upon your definitions of roleplay, meta and power-gaming, as of now your definitions are unclear and you do not demonstrate clear understanding of the terms. Your biography is very brief and lacks any lore related material at all. Please expand upon it and demonstrate to us, the application team, that you've actually taken the time to read the lore and rules of the realm. Please expand upon your ambition, as it is now it is rather cliche' and simple. Why is your favorite tool the pickaxe, what does it bring to your character. Why is mining your most powerful skill, where did he learn it? Why is it valuable to him? You cannot shove all these things under the fact that he is a Dwarf, please elaborate. Your open response questions show no effort at all. Please, don't waste our time by submitting an application you've thrown together in five minutes. Open repose questions show your mettle as a roleplayer and give us the first taste of how you will play your character. If you think this is the quality of character we accept, you are sorely mistaken. You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe

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Denied. It isn't acceptable by any means to post incomplete applications, it not only takes away from my time, but from the time I could be spending on other applications. Why not just save it to a word file until you are ready to post it? Secondly, I am going to judge this application as if it were complete, because you posted it. Your definition of roleplaying is unclear, and needs expansion, perhaps a forum search would aid you. Your definition of meta-gaming is utterly incorrect, please, please, please do not simply guess when you don't know the answer. It looks so much better to us if you tell us you spent the time to look up the answer and then provide a thorough answer that shows that you clearly understand the term that you are defining Your definition of power-gaming is inncorrect as well, it could use with more expansion and more clarity. Perhaps a forum search will aid you. Your biography could use more expansion, as it in no way shows a clear depiction of your character, nor does it prove that you've read our server's lore in any way. Please include some lore related material. All of your open resposnse questions require expansion, as you do not clearly provide any examples of your ability to fully roleplay, and please flesh out the one open response question you have done in depth and add a layer of realism to it. As it is now it seems as if you killed the guards effortlessly. You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox. Good luck! -Brokencrowe