Agith

Denied You need a better definition of roleplay You need a more lore proper story line ( Strictly NO magic) The skin is fine, though no interaction with undead before you start in the server. 19 is too young for a university graduate. You need a more original name as well.

Denied Please redo your biography, go more in depth. Also go more in detail on your appearance

Denied Reformat to fit the standard format ( Including bold to aid with eyesight(

Denied Please properly define roleplay It sounds like your talking about your self, not the character in your biography.

Denied Over all rushed application please consider redoing it, put more effort into the character ( 30 is too young for an elf anyway since they are immortal that is basicly like a fetus.)

Denied Properly define roleplaying Armok is a game reference, that is not allowed. Conflicting lore ( Armok ) Where are the flaws and quirks in this character.

Denied Properly format the application Please properly define roleplay Grammar grammar and more Grammar! Poorly done biography Screenshot is required No flaws Please consider a complete redo of this application from scratch, putting more thought into it.

Denied Correct grammar You have conflicting lore ( Mainly the sand lava and water thing ) Character lacks flaws

Denied You need to define roleplay and know what it is to roleplay. You need a villain application to be evil. To be able to disembowel anyone is a ludicrous statement, there are some very talented roleplayers who are soldiers.

Denied No game characters Too short of a bio, not original emotionless is not appearance No character flaws. You are required to tell all special skills, no hiding anything. Over all this is a very poorly done application.

Denied Please correct your grammar There is no flaw to your character's personality ( The lack of reading and construction are great however ), if he was bullied and threatened as a child wouldn't he be shy and slow to trust people? There are no katanas on this server. This is a medieval world, people are not fed enough to actually gain true muscle mass. I think 17 is a bit young if you plan on playing a skilled swordsman, it takes many years to actually achieve the rank of swordsman.

Denied. Please use the proper format, this is an eye sore without the proper spacing.

Denied This was a so close to being accepted too...However the statement "becoming deadly with all arms" dropped it. You're not a main protagonist, start off weak in some areas and build them. 16 is also too young for an elf... Elves are immortal, to be a 16 year old elf it basicly being a fetus if you compare it to a human. I also failed to see many flaws with your character, he has no quirks or strange things that make him stand out as a unique character.

Denied Please, adjust your biography accordingly, a dwarf cannot physically break stone with their bare hands, and you start off without any connections to the world, no starting out in a guild. Also, you need to add more flaws to your character, to just be stubborn is not a flaw it is a characteristic, please also describe his personality more. PM me when the application is updated.

Denied Your character lacks flaws Killing three people with a deer carcass? A deer can weigh upward of 200 pounds. Please adjust your biography accordingly to be more realistic, the premise is fine, however there is little other history of his character, and more detail could be added. The character appearance could be more described as well. Also, don't say your character is the best at anything, as that shows you're unwilling to be below anyone. I don't think it makes sense to have a character be so comfortable around others if he had little social interaction growing up.

Denied No demonic powers or magic. You're character has no flaws. You did not properly define roleplay. No character is main the protagonist. You also are required to have a screenshot of your skin. Please reread lore and send me a message once you have corrected your application.

Denied I believe your skin needs to be changed, it doesn't fit in well with the theme of the server. Also please work on your biography, it tells nothing of the character's past for example, try to introduce some of his history which helps to explain the characters past, his actions and why he feels they are justified relating back to his history. Also as a dwarf you are required to have a surname if you wish for it to be Tim. I do like the flaws you gave your character, such as inability to read and count as it does add character. Please message me when you make the corrections to your application.

Denied Please properly fill out the application, and read more about the lore of the story You cannot use magic in this server without permission from a game moderator. Also please work in making the biography a bit more in depth. Also, 16 for an elf is extremely young and I recommend making him older as elves are immortal, to be 16 is to be practically unborn if this were compared to a human.

Denied Do please message me when you correct your biography. The rest of the application is fairly well done, however I do believe that your definition of roleplay is a bit too specific...IT is a means of interaction through another character, impossible events can occur but a conversation for example is not impossible Currently, all characters who are applying have never had interactions with the undead, that is specific to when a person is accepted and they roleplay with the undead in the server. I recommend altering it to get a different reasons for that scar for example. The rest of the biography seems pretty well thought out ( Though did you mean baby? Babe can work, however not for some of the ways you used it.) I do however believe that it is necessary to correct some things to add more depth to your character, I think that the biography shows little personality for the character)

Denied Answer the question on roleplay more thoroughly. Please define what it means to roleplay, instead of telling us about your world of warcraft account, Blue fingers is also not a legitimate name for a character, a nickname? Sure but a true name that suits the race is required. Also, the biography does seem a bit like a generic story, alot of people on this server roleplay as orphans and I personally believe that a more original story would work, the death of a father is fine however I do think that the story itself, while sufficient could be longer and more detailed.

Denied I believe that you could have put more effort into this application, you're character for example has no flaws it seems like. You need an image of your skin as well. I think you need more story behind your character,just being a dwarf of power tells nothing about the character, how he reacts, his past, how he was raised ETC. You're missing parts of the application too... I don't see the definition of roleplay for example.

THat's cool...Gms don't do enough small events like this :)

Hero Application: Minecraft User Name: Agith Hero’s Name: Agith Amberlance - The Devout Background Of Hero (Chronologically and must be at least 1 paragraph long, but no longer than 4 paragraphs): Agith was born to a somewhat standard family; his mother was a miner, a common occupation to the dwarven race. His father on the other hand was a scholar, and as such he was raised to follow in his footsteps, he was educated in the classification of the paranormal and historical events. Agith, by young age of 20 departed from his modest upbringing to begin his life, seeking knowledge and understanding of the world around him. He began by heading to the dwarven city of Kal'urguan, in search of a large repertoire of books to study from. Agith instead found himself sitting on the step of a pillar, where he was met by General Stonebeard of the wolverines and convinced that he needed the funds. Agith was recruited into the group and quickly rose through the ranks to become a sergeant by the end of the first week.Very little happened after he was promoted to his rank, and thus Agith went on leave into the dwarven capital to meet a dwarven lore master by the name of Drazdun Silvermein. The two hit it off rather well, Drazdun eventually agreeing to take Agith to the city of Duralsavot. Finally they arrived after a long week of travel and there Agith remained for two weeks aiding in recovery of the once great city. Two weeks passed quite quickly before Agith began his journey back to the wolverine base. He made camp at the base of an elder tree. Agith writhed as he attempted to sleep...A strange voice keeping him up. He searched through bushes and behind trees...Though he found the source to be beneath the elder tree itself. He thus dug into the tree over the course of three days. There, on the 2nd day he uncovered a small one room temple, inside he found many engravings on the walls of a language lost to the sands of time, along with a blade gleaming in front of a fall of magma. He took up the blade, attempting to leave, a loud screeching sound pulsated through his mind... He fell to his knees unconscious; Agith awoke four hours later and returned to the spot where he found the sword, angrily bashing it in with his hammer. There he found a sheath, interested he was focused and simply walked out of the temple, he blinked...Without questioning it he returned home after packing his things. Nothing occurred until two weeks passed, when a grunt attacked Agith; he was forced to run the man through... The obsidian core of the blade began to glow a deep purple, the blood of the grunt running up through the blade filling in chips, and went up to the tip of the blade, absorbing into the core while the blood crystallized into a new layer of diamond. Agith, shocked attempted many methods to destroy the blade, though to no resolve. He thus began a search for answers on the blade. Agith began with the druids... They however offered little aid, proclaiming it was an undead blade. With that Agith set off for the undead keep, where he was denied access and knocked unconscious, awakening in the cloud temple...They told him he was lucky to be alive, and pushed him back out into the world after several weeks of rest. Agith was at a loss, he rested in kal'urguan for several weeks before encountering a warden able to aid him...The elf took the dwarf to Haven, proclaiming they could aid him. Much occurred in that inner city which Agith refuses to speak of by any means... He went in with a corrupt sword...Though came out a holy warrior of light... Few know just how this process occurred. Agith was assigned a task to find other warriors of light...And thus he began his perilous journey. It would be forty years of searching before he was near ready to give up. Agith was reminiscing in kal'urguan, when a member of the undead approached him with threats and offers. Agith denied the man and was then attacked... The undead had no intention of killing Agith, using only weak magic to attempt to knock him unconscious... The battle was long, and in the end the undead lay on the ground, Agith's holy blade buried deep in the undead's chest...He took up the staff of the undead... wrapping it in a blessed piece of canvas cloth. He then made his way to oren, and as a guest of king Edmund laid down to rest for the night. Agith awoke standing on the wall of the gates of the Followers of Aerial... Where he was eventually granted a meeting with the ascended on the matter... Blaedr an acolyte for the ascended aided him... Sage Arcadius however seemed less interested in matters and Agith was told by the young acolyte to present the staff to Sage Sue, he in turn was told to have a blood line connection with the ascended, and he now sits on the fountain inside the Follower's encampment, working through the very strange text and riddles unsure of how they will aid him in the so called awakening that Sue mentioned. Good Deeds (List Several of your good deeds and how they prove you are worthy of becoming ascended): * Shifts uncomfortably looking at the request though begins to write, the text being somewhat difficult to read * I aided in cleansing the evil from the sword bestowed upon me from the gods. I feel this shows the strength of resistance to fall to the evil seduction of the blade, I slowly began to die the longer that sword was connected to the obsidian obelisk deep in the nether. I donated the golden block found in the holy water in the haven chapel, claimed by Martin to be a blessing from Aerial. I feel this act shows my little care and desire that is generally associated with the greed that my race are quite infamous for. I aided in the defense of snow fields...Though failed this shows bravery, I did not retreat. I awoke in a heap of rubble, and made my way out of the city shamed that I had not died for the cause, and that I failed the citizens of the fields. I slew the mighty Balin, whom of which attempted to corrupt both myself and the blade, trying to link us back to the obelisk, and tried to turn me to the worship of the false god Iblees. I did my best in aiding the ascended whenever possible, disregarding those who felt my life with being wasted in aiding them. This shows integrity and a strong faith in both the ascended, and Aerial. I presented many cursed relics to the ascended for study as well. I disregarded many insults, refused to kill many a man and stuck to my faith with Aerial under times of low morale. This shows...What I have been told would be defined as wisdom beyond my years and a large tolerance. * A small note is in the bottom left hand corner, hardly legible* " I wish you didn't make me fill this out... My accomplishments are not something I wished to boast about. " Character Flaws: Agith is a dwarf who has in the past succumbed to extreme curiosity. He is a rather stubborn dwarf, not easily bent to a possibly logical route. Agith is at risk to be corrupted by the undead in the sense that when he slays one, they may try to imbue the connection to the obelisk back into the blade, making him rather vulnerable if he falters. Often, Agith will do what he shouldn't and peek around in libraries and other areas that may be off limits again, out of curiosity, he will read books that may not be quite permitted should they intrigue him. Agith also doesn't have what some may call a "Silver tongue" He has trouble with negotiations and would not, at the time being be a good choice for preventing wars between nations. The final flaw to the dwarf is the fact that he will attempt to solve issues alone, not willing to risk the lives of others to aid him in a cause making him very easily outnumbered. Hero’s Specialty (is your hero a warrior, builder, trader; at least 1 paragraph long): Agith is a peaceful dwarf at heart wishing misfortune on no one. He is however, proclaimed by the ascended Martin, a Holy warrior of light and as such has taken up the holy blade against the evils of undead. Thus making Agith a warrior, not a trader, or a builder... Rationale (what is your characters mindset, why does he go out of his way to help others): Agith goes out of his way to aid others as he was raised to be of aid to those in need. He feels he has obligations by the undead to aid others in any way he can, and will gladly oblige. Agith in short, aids people because he feels he must, and he cares very much for every living, intelligent being in the plane of Aegis. How do you determine right from wrong (At least 1 paragraph): Agith will determine right from wrong by placing them into two categories... There is what he calls "Leave them be's" And then there is "Evil." Agith will determine what is evil by considering if it fits one of these specification of the word... THem being 1. Is it bringing bodily harm to that person, or emotional distress. Two, is it related to the undead. Or Three, will it bring on a risk to the citizens of Aegis. Reaction to the following situations (At least 1 Paragraph): 1. Cephalus defines ‘justice’ as speaking the truth and paying one's debts. Socrates quickly refutes this account by suggesting that it would be wrong to repay certain debts—for example, to return a borrowed weapon to a friend who is not in his right mind. I believe in cause and reaction...If I were to return the weapon to a friend who may easily be brought into an act of violence, I would hold it off until I knew he was able to control his condition be it anger or insanity. However, I also believe in honesty and repaying debts should they present little risk to others. I would not for example, return a staff to a member of the undead, because then they may go and take a life with it. Though in the case of a man in his right mind and with good will, I would present to him the truth, and repay his debt should it also not bring on harm to those around him. 2. 'tis nobler in the mind to suffer The slings and arrows of outrageous misfortune, Or to take arms against a sea of troubles, And by opposing end them? I believe to claim to be noble is to fall into a category of corruption, Though I believe to take the suffering off the shoulders of others to be honorable, though to simply tolerate the suffering without at least considering a way to prevent further damaged caused by the threat. A peaceful solution is best...Though it is of the one who's suffering's choice of whether or not to tolerate the acts or to fight them... I believe that if the one inducing the suffering is a threat to not only myself, they must be taken care of in some matter...Though if it is only you that is suffering from their acts, it may be best to simply tolerate the issue. * looks unsteadily at the scroll, sighing as he rolls it up and places it into his bag, looking around for an ascended to pass it on to sue... Though he then takes it out of the pack, and ties it to his dove with a purple lace, and sends the bird off to locate Sue, it knowing his scent.*

Not bad, not bad at all :). I believe there could be a few minor improvements in your writing style while maintaining it but do continue ( I've been writing for years, take this not as an insult but as friendly advice ) I feel that you are not describing your environment well enough... While it does lead the imaginary to do the work, a pinch of detail on the inn for example would be nice. The detail on the character is good though. I do like these though, please continue. Oh on a last note...The time period has been left simply gone.... It is in the LOTC world? I think describing the culture of city to allow a good lead toward the type of architecture would do wonders in helping with the environmental detail I recommended earlier ( To do so can be very subtle..Naming a building such as a monastery for example opens up a large variety of architectural potential which has been so far left untouched.

Out-Of-Character: -Minecraft Account Name: Agith -How old are you?: 15 -Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Eastern Standard Time, United States of America -Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes I do, or at least I would hope so being a grammar nazi and all. -Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a rather outgoing person. I enjoy reading, nature,games and working out( Weird combination eh?) -How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I could spend as much time as my schedule will allow -How long have you played minecraft?: Since early Alpha -What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Been roleplaying for about 5 years now, I know that roleplay is for one, merely for fun and that to get angry over something is ridiculous. I have roleplayed in other serious roleplaying games/servers ( Things like text based to mods to games like garrysmod) -What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect a good roleplay experience. -What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I've played on a few, Mellenxia included but they just didn't appeal to me. -Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Absolutely for both questions, I wouldn't be applying if the lore wasn't decent. -Name the 4 races on this server. Dwarf, Orc ,Human and elf -How did you hear about us?: I was reading through the Photorealistic thread -Did you vote?: Well it was step one...So yes -What was your favourite Law?: I like the designated mining and -What was your least favourite Law?: I don't find any of the laws to be absolutely outrageous. -What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? In-Character: -Character Name: Agith Amberlance ( Since Agith is my minecraft name it just makes things easier) -What is your Race?: Dwarf -Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: Agith -Biography: Agith was born to an somewhat average dwarven family, his mother was a blacksmith, his father however was a scholar, who found the study of rock more beneficial than the a standard job such as being a miner or a warrior. Agith is a brunette, with blue eyes one may find similar to the color of shallow water. Agith was raised to follow in the steps of his father, he was taught to read from the early age of 4, and was continually put through what one may call the gauntlet of education. Agith was never an aggressive dwarf, being rather short coming in at 4 feet and 2 inches, he never understood the dwarven hatred of Humans, and instead he found himself with a distaste for the lives of orcs. Agith found himself working with various degrees of dwarven technology most of the day. He did not go out to play with other dwarflings. He was not interested in much of anything aside from his own interests in the qualities that pertain to various rocks. At age 12, Agith was sent out of his home on a task to gather supplies from a nearby human village with his father. There, he learned about the various overworld qualities such as farming and bread making ( His family found that they held no anger with the small village). Agith, now a young age of 24 ( Which some may consider too young.) must carve out a new life for himself from the foundation of solid rock that is destiny -Character Age: 24 -Character Appearance: Brunette, blue eyes, 4'2'', short cut hair, and a rose red nose, as well as cheeks behind a long, hearty beard. -Character Personality: Agith is a rather strange dwarf. He does not enjoy tasks most dwarves would find enjoyable and will only do such tasks when the need of materials comes. He often will spend days without eating or sleeping, reading through ancient texts and attempting to decipher long forgotten languages. -Your ambitions: Agith merely wishes to understand the world, he wishes to own a modest home, and live a comfortable life without violence or war. -Can your character read or write?: Yes he can read and write -Can your character mine?: He can, however he is not at the time being a particularly skilled miner. -Are you a capable builder? Agith has little upper body strength, and finds building a difficult task. He at the time being is not capable of building elaborate homes, merely a small home of modest standing. -Can you wield a sword?: Yes... His father raised him to defend himself. -Enjoy Farming?: Agith enjoys bread...He enjoys the rewards of farming but dislikes the act of farming. -Does your character have any special skills?:] Agith is a scholar, he has is a very educated dwarf and will work endlessly to solve a problem. He is however not the most charismatic dwarf. -A screenshot of your skin: -Other Information: Not much else to tell really.