Gwonam_Blaze

Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

Your application has been denied as you haven't made the following changes in the 24 pending hours:

- Your biography's not bad, but doesn't make sense in some parts. What is this 'Underworld'? How old was he when he started mugging people and robbing houses? Who offered him this 'job' to kill someone, and why? Please expand on your bio and include more detail on major events such as these.

- Your biography doesn't contain enough server lore. Please mention at least 2 locations in Anthos (preferably one being your character's birthplace). If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: wiki.lordofthecraft.net

- Your personality contradicts itself; He's 'evil', yet, he cares for others who suffer worse than him? These two traits completely conflict one another.

- While not necessary, I would recommend changing your character's eye color as red definitely does not suit Humans (even with Dark Elf heritage) and can lead to ridicule.

Your application's a good start so far, but it does need work. Please spend a fair amount of time ensuring all of the points I've made above are corrected. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

Nice work! A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

This pictures speaks a thousand words, but none of them are 'Bliss'...

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Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

An amazing first application! There's very little I can say that could've been improved!  Your definitions were all spot on and your biography was very interesting while remaining casual. A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

Your application has been denied because you did not make the following changes in the 24 pending hours provided:

- Your biography is a nice start, but could use a bit more detail in certain places, such as your characters parents getting lost at sea (wondering why he wasn't with them) and the encounter with the bandits (how did he escape, and what happened in between?). Just add some detail to some of the events to make your biography more interesting.

- Your biography doesn't quite contain enough server lore. Please add mention of at least 1 more location from Anthos and at least 1 of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

- Expand on your weaknesses a little and explain how they could put your character at a possible disadvantage.

Your application is very good, just needs a bit of tweaking. It's also worth mentioning that red eyes don't really suit Humans and might lead to you being ridiculed, so I'd recommend changing them (though, not entirely necessary). You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

A very good first application. Your definitions were all spot on and your biography was pretty good, however, the constant switching between 1st and 3rd person was a bit bothersome. However, the rest of your application was excellent! A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

- You confirmed that you have roleplayed before, yet, failed to tell us how. Please explain what roleplaying experience you've had.

- 'OOC' is not a 'rule'. Please give us an actual full rule from our rules page here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/page/info/rules

- All of your definitions are incorrect. Please research their correct meanings any way you choose and give us their true definitions, however, remember not to plagiarise. I'd recommend using this page to research the definitions: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

- Your biography doesn't make any sense and progresses far too quickly without giving much detail. How did things get so bad for your characters family that they all died except for him? Who exactly is 'Zing' and how long has your character known him for? Why did they 'have' to depart the village? How did Zing finally die? Please give plenty of details on all of the events in your character's life from their childhood up to where they are today.

- Your biography doesn't contain much server lore. Please add at least 1 more location from Anthos and mention of at least 1 of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

- Please expand on your character's personality; 3 words doesn't really tell us much. Give more details on how your character acts in society.

- Your skills and weaknesses need more detail. How exactly is he good at sneaking? Why is he 'weak' to close combat?

- You need to include a 3D screenshot of your character's skin at the end. If you need help getting one, check out this guide: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/51343-how-to-obtain-your-skin-screenshot/

- Your entire application is full of spelling and other grammar errors; far too many to be considered 'acceptable'. Please check through your application several times before posting and use some sort of spell-checker to ensure you've made as few mistakes as possible.

You have quite a lot of work to do, but I'm sure that if you try hard enough you'll make a brilliant application! You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

- Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are incorrect. Please research their correct meanings and give us an appropriate answer. I'd recommend using this page to research: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

- Your biography is very short, doesn't have much depth and is very cliche. Your parents being killed by bandits then seeking out revenge is one of the most cliche biography stories we ever see; I'd highly recommend changing it to be more original and interesting. Please add a lot more events that have affected your character, going through their childhood, early life and where they are today. Also add more detail to the events already included; Your parents dying doesn't have much impact when we hardly even know the character. Especially add more details to things such as learning skills; 1-liners are not acceptable for skills.

- Your biography contains no server lore. Please include mention of at least 2 cities from Anthos, especially your birthplace, and mention of at least one of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

- You must include a 3D screenshot of your character's skin. If you need help getting a screenshot of your skin, check out this guide: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/51343-how-to-obtain-your-skin-screenshot/

Not a bad first attempt. You have a bit of work to do, especially on the bio, so make sure you spend plenty of time perfecting your application. Don't forget to check out the 'Application Guides' in the 'Tutorials and Guides' section of the forums if you need help. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

I would buy this.

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Your application has been accepted! Congratulations! (Check notes)

The majority of your changes were good, but the fact that you didn't even change your answer to powergaming, rather, added on to it while it was wrong bothered me. However, I feel you are worth accepting so long as you read my explanation of it here:

- Powergaming (or 'Power-emoting') is forcing your actions on to another player without giving them a chance to respond or considering their own reaction. Example:

*Example Assailant swings his blade toward Vithquar's head in an attempt to kill her.*

*Vithquar avoids the attack and thrusts her blade in to the Assailant's eye, killing him instantly.*

Notice here how the 'Example Assailaint' attempted to attack my character rather than assuming or insisting he succeeded? This is the correct way to roleplay. Vithquar (my character) on the other hand,  forced her action without considering her opponent might avoid her attack or respond in some other way. In this instance, Vithquar was powergaming.

If you have any further questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

- Your answer to 'Have you been on any other roleplaying servers' is confusing; Please elaborate what you mean by 'Assassins creed'.

- Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are correct, but need expansion. Please give a little more detail on their meanings or an example each.

- Your biography is quite short, very confusing and cliche. Please add more events in your character's life that have had an impact on him. Explain why his dad always fighting Orcs and why his mother kicked him out of their home just for smoking (which seems highly excessive). Additionally, your parents 'dying from Orcs' is the most cliche story ever used in biographies, and vowing to get revenge afterword is equally as cliche. Please change this story to be more original and interesting.

- Your biography contains almost no server lore. Please add mention of your character's birth place and at least one other town or city from Anthos. If you need help finding lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

- Your ambitions, like your bio, are extremely cliche. Please add something that isn't extremely predictable, overused and makes your character interesting.

- Your skills and weaknesses don't really make sense. Please explain, in plenty of detail in your bio, how your character became 'Good at fighting' (1-liners aren't acceptable, give us 'plenty' of detail about it). Also, how can 'mining' be a weakness? Your weakness has to be a fairly unique flaw your character has that could put them at a disadvantage in certain situations (so using a weakness like 'Swords' or 'Archery' are not acceptable, since those are a danger to everyone).

- We need a 3D screenshot of your character's skin, not the original .png image. If you need help getting a 3D screenshot of your skin, check out this guide: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/51343-how-to-obtain-your-skin-screenshot/ . It is also worth mentioning; Red eyes do not suit Human lore and are another 'cliche'. I'd highly advise changing them to avoid ridicule.

- Your entire application is full of spelling and grammar errors. Please take the time to ensure there are as few of these as possible, as there are far too many to be considered 'acceptable' right now.

Your application needs a lot of work, but you're certainly capable of making it acceptable. You should spend as much time as possible making sure all of the points I raised above are fixed before posting your next application. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

*Quite bizarrely, Vithquar has found herself attending Rosso's funeral despite her near-complete illiteracy. She proceeds to step forward and clear her throat before saying her part*

"This, was my fake dad... He brought me in to this crappy world and I kinda hate him for it. He was a person."

*Without knowing what more to say, she simply steps back and resumes her patient stance*

I like the concept, but unless there is some lore that backs it, and it happens RPly that somehow someone finds something that clues at a 'universe' sort of existence (And the discovery is approved), it wouldn't make sense.

I dunno about that. Even before our world was called 'The Earth', it still had the name 'Terra', (latin for land, ground) since it was still known that the world was a big place consisting of countless countries, therefor giving it a simple name made conversation and literacy about it much simpler.

Eh, leave the whole multiverse un-named. It just adds to the mystery. You COULD call it 'the void' or 'the beyond' because we're not on the same planet/universe/pane/dimension that we were in while Aegis happened I believe, but you could also just not call it anything. 

 

Also. . .is Anthos on the same planet/universe/pane/dimension as Asulon? We were able to sail here. . .so I suppose so. Meh, criticize me if im wrong.

 It's never really been 'confirmed', and it's been hinted that we may possibly have passed some sort of 'portal' to a new realm as we sailed. But even so, that still means there are other lands/realms out there that all need a single collective name. We can't just refer to 'The world' as 'Aegis' and then 'Asulon' and keep changing it every time we move realm. It would make more sense if we just had one simple name for the world, if you ask me.

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