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    Jade's Art Corner - Taking Requests

    in Athera OOC Archive

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    MC Name: Gwonam_Blaze
    Character Name: Vithquar
    Skin or Referance Picture: Appearance ref: http://gyazo.com/42b05f0686c63ea1877752062369820d, Position ref: http://gyazo.com/172790b32a0ff1fc48737fb83db8e923
    Gender: Female
    Race: Dark Elf (Heavily corrupted)
    Shot: Chibi
    Kind: Lined-Colored
    Position: 'Butt scooting' (ref above), preferably with a silly smile or expression. Surprise me; I'm not particularly fussed with the exact appearance! Make her as cute, silly and/or stupid as you like.

     

    I'll pay you 3000 minas once completed, how does that sound? If not, I can negotiate a better price if you want.

     

    Edit: I realise you have 'a lot' of requests to get through, so please don't feel rushed! Take as long as you want.

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    [Denied]Feajacks 2Nd Application

    in Denied Applications

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    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are incorrect. Please research their definitions on their page and give us a full explanation on their meanings: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/roleplaying

     

    - Your biography is still extremely short and lacks a lot of detail. Please expand on your biography and add more events that have had an impact on your character. Please name the village your character was born in (use one from our official lore) and give a much more thorough explanation on how your character acquired his skills; 1 liners are not acceptable for learning skills.

     

    - Your biography doesn't contain enough server lore. Please add at least one more town or city from Asulon, Elysium or Anthos and mention of at least one of the other races. If you need help finding lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your weakness isn't really a weakness; Nobody is born with talent in swordsmanship. Your weakness needs to be a fairly unique attribute that could put your character at a disadvantage when compared to another character.

     

    - You haven't included a screenshot of your character's skin. If you need help getting one, check out this guide: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/51343-how-to-obtain-your-skin-screenshot/

     

    Overall, your application needs a lot of work, but I'm sure you can do it! Just make sure you spend plenty of time fixing all of the points made above. The application team appreciate hard work when they see it. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [✔] [Accepted] Incorruptable's Application

    in Implemented Applications

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    Your application has been accepted! Congratulations!

     

    Nice work! Your definitions are all correct and have a superb amount of explanation behind them. Your biography was also good. Possibly could've included a bit more lore and events that happened in your character's past, but it's good enough as is. The rest of your application is exceptional! A GM should implement you soon. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me.

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    [Denied]Lotc Application

    in Denied Applications

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    Your applications has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your powergaming definition isn't quite right. Please give the full, correct definition. I'd recommend checking out the Powergaming section of this page to give you a better idea of the definition: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

     

    - Your biography is quite incoherent, rather nonsensical and too short. Bandits attacking your character's home and then killing their parents is a very big cliche. What happened to his father? All you mentioned is that he held the bandits off long enough for Phoenix to escape, but we never heard anything more of him. Do you mean to say that your character, at the age of just six, survived alone and away from everyone else? It's very unrealistic that someone so young could be capable of surviving alone in the wilds, even if his parents taught him any survival skills; There are large and terrifying creatures in the wilds of Anthos, which no mere child could fend off. Also, simply saying that 'his parents taught him these skills' is not enough; Please give us a more in-depth explanation as to how they taught him these skills rather than giving a 1-liner. Furthermore, your biography doesn't tell us much about his life, other than his parents died in a bandit attack and that he's lived alone for the best part of 15 years. Please give us more events and details on his life to make your character more interesting.

     

    - Your biography doesn't contain much server lore. Please add at least another city from Anthos and mention of another race. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your weakness needs expansion, or rather, more depth behind it; What are his morals? Keep in mind; Your weaknesses need to give your characters actual flaws that could put them at a disadvantage in certain situations.

     

    Your application's not too bad, but it needs a bit of work. Your biography seems to need to most work, so I recommend checking out this guide to writing an acceptance-friendly bio: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/106864-the-dos-and-do-nots-of-application-biographies/ Make sure you spend a fair amount of time fixing all of the flaws in your application. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Denied]Application #3

    in Denied Applications

    Posted

    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your biography's story is quite weak; Your character hears he has a brother, who has never before been mentioned and it would seem nobody is aware of his location, so he just abandons everyone and his current life to go and find him with no trace or trail to follow? How exactly did your character learn to fight and become a 'skilled' lumberjack in this time (1-liners for explaining how you got skills are not acceptable)? Your entire biography seems to revolve around your character finding his brother... Even though this is clearly a big part of his life, it's quite a boring to stay on pretty much one topic for your entire biography. Tell us more events and interesting things that have had an impact on your character instead of dragging on about how he wishes to find his brother throughout the entire story.

     

    - Your biography does not contain much server lore. Please add at lest another city and mention of one of the other races in Anthos. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your weakness is questionable for many reasons. Firstly, how does this scar cause his sight to just fade and come back? If it's a scar, it would suggest he is permanently blind, unless it were just a minor wound, but it certainly wouldn't cause his sight to fade in and out. Also, your character must have gotten this scar from somewhere; Why didn't you mention it anywhere in your biography? It probably would've made a good story.

     

    Your applications are getting better, I'd say. Just make sure you try your hardest and spend a lot of time on your next one. Your biography seems to be your main downfall throughout your applications, so I'd recommend checking out this guide, it may help you write a more acceptable one: I'd recommend checking out this guide to help you write a better biography: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/106864-the-dos-and-do-nots-of-application-biographies/ You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    Formal Resignation

    in News & Announcements Archive

    Posted

    This was difficult to read... You've been by far one of the kindest and most respectable staff members this server's ever seen, if you ask me. I don't think there's a single part of you I won't miss, especially those useful little plugins you used to add here and there, and your humorous, upbeat attitude whenever you poked in to OOC.

     

    Goodbye Tel', I wish the best for you in life. :backtrolled:

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    [Denied]Jwalker2_4's Application

    in Denied Applications

    Posted

    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your biography is very short and only details one event from your character's past. It's a good start, but not enough alone. Please include more events and details in your character's life, including their birthplace, upbringing, etc.

     

    - Your biography contains very little server lore. Please include plenty, including mention of at least a couple of cities or villages and mention of a couple of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, take a look at our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your strengths are rather questionable. Yes, Ologs are 'very' strong, but the way you state how strong your character is would imply that he is almost titan-like. Try to keep your character within the boundaries of normal Olog strength to avoid coming off as a 'Godmoder'.

     

    - Your weaknesses mostly aren't really weaknesses; They all seem to result in him becoming 'stronger' rather than weaker in some way. Make your weaknesses in to things that could put your character at a disadvantage in particular situations (doesn't even have to be combat related) and keep in mind; Going in to a blind rage isn't a weakness for Orcs, it's practically every day behavior for them.

     

    - You seem to be missing the screenshot part of your application altogether... Please fix this and add an appropriate screenshot of your skin.

     

    Denying this application wasn't easy; I can see you're very eager and determined to roleplay, but I simply cannot accept your application with so many things to fix. The character half was really your downfall and requires work, but the rest was outstanding and really showed me how serious you are about being accepted! You seem like perfect roleplayer material, so I urge you to try your best and apply again! You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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