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    [Denied]Blackfoot Longbeard Application

    in Denied Applications

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    Your application has been denied and I am giving you an official warning for plagiarism:

     

    - Your roleplaying definition has been plagiarised from one of many possible sources. One possible source: http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/role-play

     

    Your other reasons for denial include:

     

    - Your Metagaming definition isn't really correct. Please give us the full correct definition and an example. I'd suggest using this page to research its meaning: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

     

    - Your biography is incoherant; It doesn't make much sense and hops between 1st and 3rd person. What is this seemingly random city where your character was born? Who is this 'King' he wants to work for? Also... Who are 'Ron' and 'Roland'? You haven't mentioned them anywhere else in your biography except for one time each... Finally, you need to stick to 1 perspective in your bio. To give you an example, here's a couple of sentences that hop from 1st to 3rd person: "I wanted to see the cities  of the world , see the above, and work as a warrior, as a khorok for the king. Ron has an extremely  restless spirit, and shares his villages view on how the dwarves should conduct foreign policy.". At first, you referred to your character as yourself, then in the next sentence, referred to him as a completely different person.

     

    - Your biography doesn't include enough server lore. Please add mention of at least 2 towns or cities from Anthos and mention of at least one of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your weaknesses aren't really weaknesses. 'Weapons' can't be weaknesses, since they're a weakness everyone has. A 'weakness' must be something unique to your character that could put them at a disadvantage in certain situations. Also, please explain why 'Hurtful words' are a weakness to him.

     

    - Your skin isn't very 'Dwarf Like'. This isn't really a reason for denial, but I'd highly recommend you find a more Dwarf looking skin to avoid any possible ridicule.

     

    Plagiarism is a very serious offense on Lord of the Craft and any further incidents will result in a temporary ban. Always use your own words throughout all of your application. You mostly need to work on your biography. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Denied]Applying

    in Denied Applications

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    Your application has been denied and you are being given an official warning for plagiarism:

     

    - Your definitions for metagaming and powergaming are both plagiarised from wikipedia:

     

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metagaming

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Powergaming

     

    You reasons for denial are:

     

    - Your metagaming and powergaming definitions are plagiarised. Please give us their correct meanings in YOUR OWN WORDS. If you need help researching their meanings, I'd recommend looking at this page: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

     

    - Your biography is very short, incoherent and cliche. Please include more events and give a lot of details on them to make them more interesting. In the very first few lines, your character's parents die, giving it little-to-no impact since we hadn't even been told anything about them. Then, you talk about a random 'secret society' of knights that nobody has ever heard of. Events like this are very cliche and uncreative; Don't have your character be part of any 'secret societies' that somehow see them valuable without any prior meeting. I'd recommend checking out this guide if you need help making a better biography: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/106864-the-dos-and-do-nots-of-application-biographies/

     

    - Your biography doesn't contain any server lore. Please include at least 2 towns or cities from Anthos and mention of at least one of the other races. The Undead haven't exited in over 100 in-game years, meaning your character couldn't possibly have ever encountered them. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Your ambitions are really confusing: Your character wants to keep the Humans safe, so to do that he wants to destroy them?

     

    - You haven't given an answer for your character's weaknesses. Even if they don't have any, you must at least state this.

     

    - Your weaknesses aren't really weaknesses; None of these would put your character at a disadvantage, in fact, they would all make him 'more' violent and battle hungry. A weakness must be a unique feature to your character that could put them at a serious disadvantage in particular situations (doesn't necessarily have to be related to combat).

     

    The plagiarism was by far the biggest part of this denial. It's honestly a very serious offense, so please refrain from doing it in future. There's also a lot more you need to improve on your app (especially the bio), but as long as you don't plagiarise again you'll have plenty of attempts to get it right, and I'm fairly certain you have what it takes to make an acceptable app. You may re-apply in 24 hours (after this denial). If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Idea] A Name For The World?

    in Denied Lore

    Posted

    A multiverse or something of collective worlds is good. For many reasons actually. 

    1. People are fickle and get tired of things easily. The ability to keep moving so no one gets disinterested is a good thing.

    2. If people don't like a name, they have hope for a better one the next time around.

    3. I normally have BS reasons so here's one for you. (Though those other two might be as well, who knows.)

     

    I'm personally just happy with new and fresh names.

     

    Well of course, we'll still have Aegis and Asulon and Anthos; Those are all different realms, almost like different continents. The idea of giving the entire world a name is so people can discuss the entire world rather than having to talk about just one or having to make up a weird name if they're intending to talk about all of existence in the known world of LotC.

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    [Idea] A Name For The World?

    in Denied Lore

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    It recently came to my attention that we don't really have a 'name' for the world of Lord of the Craft. It's okay saying 'We live in Aegis' or 'Anthos' or whatever new realm we happen to live in, but what happens when someone wants to talk about 'all' of those realms, like they're all part of one larger world or existence (probably someone like an astronomer or philosopher)?

     

    Think of it like continents on Earth; They're all far away from one another, practically all new worlds in comparison, and while you can say you come from one and people will be sure enough to know what you're talking about most of the time, what happens when we want to talk about the entirety of the world? For instance, say someone were discussing the creation of the world (let's not make this in to a religious debate, it's just an example). They wouldn't say: "I believe <God of religion> made Africa, North America, South America, Europe, Asia, Australia and Antarctica", would they?  They'd probably say "I believe <God of religion> made Earth, (or maybe 'The World', in this particular instance).

     

    Basically, all I'm wondering is what people would think of a single, collective name for the entire world or universe Lord of the Craft is set in to make life a little easier for those who wish to write literature on it or talk about it, whether that be in-game or not. It doesn't really have to be a specific name, like one we give to the realms; It really could be as simple as 'The World' or 'The Canvas'; Just an official, recognised name (In and out of game) that lets us know when someone's talking about all of the realms and Lord of the Craft in general. Go ahead and pitch your thoughts on this idea.

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    [Denied]Djonna12's Application

    in Denied Applications

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    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your answer for gender confuses me a little. Your character is 'clearly' male in their bio, but you claim they're 'both', but wishing to be male...? While wishing to be another gender is perfectly acceptable, in character and out of character, and does not infringe any of our rules, it would be preferable if you stated your character's birth gender here to reduce confusion.

     

    - Your answer for your character's age is unacceptable; your character 'must' have an age, everybody has one. Please give your character a suitable age. Also, Elves age at the same rate as Humans up until 20, at which point their body stops aging (they themselves, however, do not) until they reach around 1000. They hit puberty at the same time, but are infertile until they reach 100.

     

    - Your biography is rather nonsensical, too fas and too shortt; You keep moving on to new events without giving much detail on the previous one. Please give more details on all the events in your story to make them more interesting, such as training with his father, his mother's death and his father's death. I'm also a bit confused as to why your character suddenly decides to forgive his father's murderer in the same exact sentence he plans to seek revenge. Try to put a bit more detail in to the process of wanting revenge to later forgiving the murderer and wishing for a peaceful life instead. Furthermore, give plenty of details on how your character acquires skills/is taught things; Simply saying his father 'taught him how to make a bow' is extremely dull, has no detail and seems quite lazy. The same goes for training with a bow; 1-liners are not acceptable. Finally, expand on your bio by adding events that have had an impact on your character and made them in to who they are today.

     

    - You haven't included much server lore in your bio. Please include mention of at least 2 cities or villages from Aegis, Asulon, Elysium or Anthos, depending on your character's age, and mention of at least one of the other races. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - You seem to have 'metagamed' in your bio; How did your character know their father fell in to a trap, 'then' was discovered dead by Wood Elves later? If this were from a third person perspective, it would have made sense, but your entire biography seems to be written from a first person stand point and therefor knowing this seems illogical. Please either change it so it makes sense or completely rewrite the biography from a third-person perspective so it makes sense (for future reference, writing in third person for things such as roleplay and stories will help avoid problems like this)

     

    - Your weakness isn't really a weakness; I can't see this putting your character at a  serious disadvantage in any situation. Please give your character a weakness that could actually cause problems for them (doesn't necessarily have to be related to combat). Also, you should probably expand on your skills to include the hunting and fishing he has learned throughout his life.

     

    The out-of-character section of your application was very good, however, the in-character section needs a lot of work and some of your answers are very confusing. I think you've mistaken the gender question as asking for your own gender and the age question as asking how old your character's race is. These are both questions about 'your character', and they must have definite answers. Your biography also needs a fair amount of work. I'd recommend checking through this guide if you need help writing a better bio: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/106864-the-dos-and-do-nots-of-application-biographies/ . I'm positive you are capable of fixing all of the problems, just so long as you spend a lot of time carefully adjusting each. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Denied]Noahstephenson's Whitelist App

    in Denied Applications

    Posted

    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your powergaming definition is incorrect. Please research the correct definition and provide us with the answer in your own words. I'd recommend using this page to research definitions: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying

     

    - Your biography was a bit incoherant. In the very first sentance, your character's parents are already being attacked by the Scourge. Being attacked by the Scourge is fine, but not in the very first sentance; Before we've even gotten to know your character or his parents. It's also worth mentioning; Anthos is a realm, not a city. The whole part about the people thinking the basket was a cursed child was a little funny, but not exactly plausible; All these adults didn't think to just look in the basket that whole time? Also, Elves and Humans are quite easy to distinguish; Elves are usually fairly taller than Humans and have much longer, as well as pointed, ears.  The last part of your bio is extremely confusing... Who exactly was this note from; His 'real' mother or adopted mother? If his real mother, how did his foster parents get the note if they never found his real parents? If his adoptive mother, how could she have written the note if she was being attacked...? Your biography really needs a lot of work to make more sense and explain itself rather than randomly throwing in nonsensical events. I will say, however, you did include sufficient lore.

     

    - Some of your skills need a bit more explanation. You can't just have skill in magic without having any explanation of it in your bio. Please add a few in-depth sentences explaining how he acquired his magic skills.

     

    Most of your application wasn't bad, but your biography was extremely confusing. Try to work on it so all of the events are well explained and make sense to the reader rather than throwing together a series of seemingly random events. For the most part though, not bad. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Denied]Thezygen's Application

    in Denied Applications

    Posted

    Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

     

    - Your metagaming definition isn't exactly right. Please give a more fitting answer. Also, if you could, please give a short example of both metagaming and powergaming at the end of your definitions for each. If you need help researching their meanings, I'd recommend using this page: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying (Remember to always use your own words!).

     

    - Your bio is extremely confusing, and contains a lot of 'filling' (useless information). You didn't explain what happened with the guard very well. Why did your character's father give him a knife, why did the guard then kill his mother and why did his father restrain him to try and stop him from escaping? This just seems like a completely random event that makes absolutely no sense because you haven't explained anything about why it was happening. As for 'filling', the first third of your biography is nothing more than explaining everything your character's family did in a city one day. None of it was exactly important, nor interesting I'm afraid to say. Instead, tell us about some other interesting events that happened in your character's life that have had an impact on them.

     

    - Your biography didn't contain any server lore. You even had 2 chances to name some villages and cities in the first 2 sentences. Please add mention of at least 2 cities or villages from Anthos (especially your character's birthplace) and reference of at least one of the other races in Anthos. If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

     

    - Expand on your character's personality. As it stands, it doesn't tell us an awful lot about him and how he acts in society.

     

    - Your weakness isn't truly a weakness; Nobody is born with skill in archery. Your weakness(s) must be fairly unique (such as a major fear or moral) and something that could put your character at a disadvantage in certain situations.

     

    Your application wasn't exactly bad, for the most part. Spend a good amount of time fixing all of the points made above, but I'd recommend focusing particularly on your bio as that seems to need the most work. You should check out this guide if you'd like help with your bio: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/106864-the-dos-and-do-nots-of-application-biographies/ You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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    [Denied]Jistuma's Gm App

    in Denied

    Posted

    I have no idea why so many people's jimmies are rustled. Jistuma is literally the most passive, and one of the most helpful, person I've ever met on this server, if you ask me. I don't think I've ever seen him anywhere close to 'mad', no matter how much stress me and other people have thrown at him in the past, and he works insanely hard in every project he takes part in. I think he's like me; He wants what's best for the server, and sometimes, that means you have to be strict, whether that be because someone's lore isn't going to work or someone's idea is going to make other players upset or even because someone's idea is genuinely terrible and is going to create a collection of problems. As to the person who said he can act like he owns the 'Help' channel; So he damn well should if people are miss-using it. He's done a lot more to help the server and those that play it than anyone criticizing him, I'm sure of it. To sum up my feedback, I say Jistuma would certainly do far more good than he could ever do harm. I say he's definitely worthy of trial-GM.

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