Captainredcup's Application #2

[CaptainRedCup 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: CaptainRedCup

How old are you?:I am 13 years old, and will be 14 in December

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:I live in the U.S., in the Central time zone

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes, I feel that I have a quite good grip, as it is my first and only language.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I like to think that I'm crazy and off-the-wall, but in reality, I'm calm and lazy-ish. I don't have many friends, but I am content with that. I also LOVE to eat, but I am by no means over-weight or obese.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

I have school on the weekdays, but I don't get much work, so I'd estimate about 20-30 hours a week.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Roleplaying is when you are given or create a character, and you act and think like him, even if it means going against your own beliefs in real life. Role playing is kind of acting,but you have to make up the script yourself, based on your character.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I haven't had much roleplaying experience, but I hope to gain alot here.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:Meta-Gaming is when you use outside sources like teamspeak to gain unfair advantages that realistically, your character wouldn't get. An example is knowing when you are going to raided by bandits because you look for their nameplates, and preparing for it.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power-gaming is when you use an unfair advantage on someone and do not let them react or counter it. An example would be being a guard and I see a suspicious looking man, and say "Mr. Guard immediately searches and arrests the man, and jails him." That's power-gaming because if thtt man was a criminal, he did not get a chance to bribe or run or anything.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I think this server will be a breathe of fresh air, because it has a plot, the people go along with it, and its white-listed so there are no dunder-heads running around. This will be a wonderful Minecraft experience.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I have played on Centurycraft(Now Evercraft) but left because the community was terrible. I also still play on Safe-Haven, but I tend to only play on one server at a time, and you blast Safe-Haven clear out of the sky.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes I have, and they are understandable and fair. I especially approve of the banning of Meta-/Power-gaming

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: I most definitely do.

How did you hear about us?:With the 1.2.3 update, none of my servers had updated, so I was browsing Minestatus. I saw this, and being a TREMENDOUS fan of LotR, I took a look.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: Yes I have. I'm voter #442

In-Character:

Character Name: Votar (Literally means "Hunt")

What Race are you?: Orc

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): I am a Nomadic Orc

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): Az is da tradishun uv ma tribe, wen I wuz old enuff to fight, I was left in da desert to suhvive. If yoo suhvive 1 munth, yoo were acksepted too da tribe. So az I wuz in da desert, on ma ferst week, I looked back on ma tribe, and I saw three men wawkin-no flowtin-to them. I ran back as dey attacked. When I got close, the sky got dark. I charged at da men dat were attacking. the last thing I saw was the the ground falling in to da Void. When I woke up, it was gone, but I saw too peepol walking away in da distance. At ferst, I thot dat dey were da attackers. I beleive now dat dey were ma parents, for I saw da ded bones of dem on da ejj of da desert. Fueled by a curiosity not found in many Orcs, I left off to find out hoo dees peepol were and why dey attacked. Soon I was found by some dwaffs on da road. They raised me and took care of me, which is why i got more big brain den other Orcs. But den, wen me adult, bone men come again. Kill me family agen.((OOC: Votar is an Orc with not many Orcish traits, since he was raised mainly by dwarfs. The attack on his tribe by the undead left him with a scar across his bare chest, which is one of his only memory of his parents and tribe.He has dark green skin and an under-bite, as most Orcs do. He also wears his hair in a ponytail that travels along his back to his waist.))

What is your Character's ambitions?: Me want to find parents and lernn more about the bone men

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Being an orc as well as well as living with mountain dwarfs will most probably lead to someone favoring an axe. Votak's favorite tool is his Father's axe, which he found after the attack.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Me good wit da axe and me alot peepol like me. Many allies.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):I'm sorry, I don't know how to get it to work. I've tried twice and each time it closed out my application. Please, It's a very good orc skin, trust me.

Other Information about your Character: Very protective over friends.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond? This reminds him of the second time the bone men attacked, and he goes into an uncontrollable fury, killing the men. Luckily for the halfling, Votar does not see him in his blind rage.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?"What you sell?""Why, I sell a variety of items from diamonds to assorted color wool. Do you wish to purchase anything?" "Uuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhh, I'll take the shiny ting." He purchased ALL his diamonds, and then walks away with hardly any minas. The merchant leaves to stash his fortune.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Seeing a sword in the chest, he'd assume the whole chest trash, and leave. "Swords are not da tool of our peepol. Swords are the tool of da hoomens. Family hates men."

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond? Not knowing the common speak, he would try to communicate with them in Orc tongue. They would eventually get the message to him that they cant understand him, so he has a silent barter for food and directions.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:He would take the bandits down, hoping to make a new ally in the process and he couldn't see yet another town attack. He joins with a small militia dispatched to solve the bandit problem. Being a genetically built war machine (he was the chiefs son, and chieftainship is decided upon a duel between candidate and current chief.) he would fill the others with awe, and be a hero of sorts.

Ok. Hope you enjoyed my application. I tried very hard and put alot of time and effort into making it. If I am denied, please describe in detail what I did wrong, and what I can do to fix it. Thank you.

[James Undercroft 129]

Denied.

I liked your application, but you have quite a bit of work to do before I can accept you, though I see portential. Please mark your next application as "Application #2" as I will rename this one "Application #1" as this is the will of your previous reviewer, (or at least indirectly).

I denied you for the following reasons:

Your biography needs some work.

The biography clearly states "Two Paragraphs", this does not mean just split what you have into two, but rather write a bit more as what you have now is fine for a paragraph. Also perhaps you could shift the OOC to its own paragraph making a total of three? I reccomend writing the first person part in italics and the ooc part just in normal print. If you need help with this send me a PM.

I like the story, and I like how you use the Orcish Dialect, but since you have shown such enthusiam I believe you should use some Orcish words as well :) Here is a link to the orcish dictonary: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13396-orc-dictionary/ and some other orc related threads: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/24133-orc-important-threads/

You have not included a skin.

For me to accept you I must be able to view your skin as I need to judge whether it is acceptable for this server, reason being if someone joins this server, but do not show their skin but they have a Tron skin on I would be in big trouble. This is one of many ways to upload a picture of your skin and embed it into your application:

1. Go in-game and press the “F5” button TWICE. (Not once as this will show the back of your character)

2. Take a screen shot by pressing the "PrntScr" button on a windows computer or press F2 on the keyboard, then go to start => Run and type in this: %appdata%/.minecraft/screenshots

3. Find the screenshot and open it in an image manipulation program such as Paint or Gimp.4. Crop the image so that only the area close to your skin (including the skin) remains.

5. Save the file and go to tinypic.com

6. Upload the file

7. Click ONCE on the text box underneath: "IMG Code for Forums & Message Boards"

8. Right click and copy the entire text

9. Paste in your new application

*Note* If you want a tutorial for Macs, please send me a message on the forums.

You need to write more for the open response questions.

At the moment I feel you are being a bit lazy, this being your first official application this is excusable, but do not let it happen next time.

Write in FULL RP, that means don't explain from a third person do what he would do, but rather RP IT OUT. Be your character, and write his actions as if they were happening right now. These are "open response" questions, meaning you make assumptions about what happens.

Other than these things nice app, I believe you have some potential.

I am going to check your records now to see if you have been banned before, I hope you aren't one of those people. :/

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum