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[zombieexstermi 7]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please do your best to correct spelling and grammatical errors, this is an RP server and writing is the main form of communication!

 

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: zombieexstermi

How old are you?: 14

Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13): yes

Have you applied to this server before? (Please link all past applications): no 

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: yes 

What’s the rule you agree with the most?: no griefing 

Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules): no 

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? Friends told me 

 

Definitions

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What is roleplaying?: the act of playing a role of a character that is not real 

What is metagaming?: Using out of character information in character 

What is powergaming?: Forcing RP without a response, and doing god like actions, that are obviously impossible in game.

 

In-Character Information

 

Character’s name: Shay Cormac

Character’s gender: Male

Character’s race: Human 

Character’s age: 34

Biography  (Please make it a decent two paragraphs long. Remember to add server lore, and events that happened to your character so that they don’t contradict history.): When Shay was a young kid he lived in Kingston, Kingston was a great nation until it was raided by the Orcs. Shay was only 5 year's old when the Ocs invaded they took his Brother Achilles and Liam, His mother was burned inside a bronze bull, his father was tortured in prison, never to be seen again. Shay got away because of his neighbor, Haythem his neighbor grabbed him before he could be taken. Shay and Haythem ran away into the mountains. Haythem taught Shay how to fight, climb and hunt. Shay was 18 when the Orc's came and raided their base in the mountains. Sadly, Haythem was killed, Haythem's last words to kill all of the Orc's and find your brothers. Shay accepted this quest and went on his way.

Shay was 28, young yet wise. Shay raided an Orc village and gathered intel from an Orc named Gor'um, Gor'um was at the tavern, Shay walked in looking at Gor'um, Gor'um turn's around screaming "Kill me, I dare you!"  

Shay starts running at Gor'um, tackling him. Shay try's to stab Gor'um but Gor'um block's the attack. Gor'um punches Shay in the face, but Shay some how stabbing Gor'um in the heart. Gor'um had a note on him saying that Liam and Achilles Cormac were being held at the local Prison and they were going to be executed at 3pm. It was 2 o'clock right now. Shay ran towards the Prison, Shay was being shot at by archers...He climbed the Prison wall. It was 2:45, Shay had 15 minutes to find his brothers. Once over the Prison walls Shay saw his brothers in line about to be executed, Shay jumps down there and fight's off the Orc guards and he is reunited with his brother's. Shay hug's his brother's all of the sudden both of his brother's collapse. Shay Screaming looks up and see's two Archer's with Bow's drawn. Shay run's away knowing that his brother's are dead...

Personality Traits: Tough, Stubborn, wise, ambitious 

Ambitions: Freedom, Death to all Orc's  

Strengths/Talents: Tough, wise, Parkour ability, fighting,

Weaknesses/Inabilities: When he loses someone close, long range attacks. 

Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight): 6"1 240 pounds. Has a lot of scar's, hair his rapped in a ponytail. 

Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin (If you need help, see our screenshot guide here):WIP (Work in Progress) 

[Readicti 902]

• Expand on your roleplaying and metagaming definitions.
• Usually it's cliche for parents and a village to be attacked by orcs (orcs don't actually go around killing parents) but because it's in history i'll allow it but why would orcs attack the camp in the mountains? Who is Gor'um? Why is your character looking for him? Who took his brothers, orcs? Why would the take them and keep them in prison just to kill them later? 
• Add more lore to your biography.
• Your ambitions are cliche and impossible. You cannot kill all orcs and what do you mean by "freedom"?
• What do you mean by parkour abilities in your strength? Why is this a strength and where did he learn it from? Do you mean he is athletic? Good at jumping or climbing?
• We need to see your skin before accepting you.

 

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