Wondrkid's Application submission(Second attempt)

[wondrkid 0]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name:

wondrkid

-How old are you?:

14

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

EST

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes, indeed. Human as I am, I do tend to make mistakes.

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I like the wild, the wilderness. I like reading. I enjoy having fun with my friends, and playing minecraft.

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

20 hours.

-How long have you played Minecraft?:

A little over a year now.

-What do you know about Roleplaying? What is it?:

I know RP fairly well. RP is when someone takes on a character or acts as a character that he/she isn't. It is when someone plays the role of a person in a different world or scenario then our own.

-What do you expect this server will be like?:

Awesome, i have walked around it for a while. I have been a wandering soul for about a month or two.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

I have played on exiledgaming.net server and a couple others. I left them because this server is awesome and surpasses the others in many different categories.

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes I am fully aware of all the rules.

-Name the 4 races on this server:

Elven, Orc, Human, Dwarf, and the Ascended and the Undead.

-How did you hear about us?:

Youtube and minestatus.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:

wondrkid

In-Character:

-Character Name:

A'ratuk

-What is your Race?:

Elf

-Biography:

A'ratuk grew up in a Elven camp outside of Laurelin. It was a tribe of about 20 or so. His father was the rightful heir to the throne of Malinor, but was casted out by his brother. One day an army of Orcs came stomping through the camp on the way to Malinor. They completely destroyed the camp robbing it of all life. His mother managed to hide A'ratuk in a tree. She told him about how they should be living luxuriously, safe in a kingdom. Ruling over the lands of Malinor. She told him to be what his father should've been. "Claim the throne as your own." These were the last words spoken to him by his mother. She was killed quickly after. After it was safe to come down A'ratuk made his way to Laurelin. A'ratuk now struggles in city life. He still tries to hold conference with his Uncle the Prince. One day he will.

-Character Age:

40

-Character Appearance:

His clothes are old and torn. His cracked hands and scars show that he has been through much. His long hair falls freely over his back. His eyes are a glowing white.

-Character Personality:

He is ambitious, determined and brave. He is wary of strangers, but quick to make to friends, yet he does not trust a lot of people. Especially Orcs.

-Your ambitions:

To become Prince of Malinor.

-Can your character read or write?:

No, he knows little of the written word.

-Can your character mine?:

He is not fond of it, it gives him the creeps. He can mine, but only if he needs to.

-Are you a capable builder?:

He is a very capable builder, when given the chance.

-Can you wield a sword?:

He trained himself for years and is most likely among the best.

-Enjoy Farming?:

No.

-Does your character have any special skills?:

Other than archery and swords no.

-A screenshot of your skin:

http://minecraftskinspro.com/default.asp?action=readreviews&link=19105

-Other Information: This will be my second attempt at a sumbission, and I hope that I will be accepted. This server looks awesome!!!

[Taiga 764]

Your Application has been...

DENIED

Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied:

Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge upon World [X]

Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [ ]

Powergaming [X]

Metagaming [ ]

Conflicting Status [ ]

Cliche [X]

Needs Villain Application [ ]

Form:

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Missing Areas [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Cliche [ ]

Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

So, in the world of Aegis, there are no thrones to Malinor. There is simply a Princedom. I doubt your character would be related to one, unless one of them agrees to.

And killed by orcs? Really? That is much too common here. Please revise this.

If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account!

<3

You come to Aegis to Develop a Character, not have one Developed already

Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before