Lugmak 20 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Unkrak refused to get onto the boat to sail to a new land, and wanted to fight through the undead to prove his mother and father that they should of never abandoned him. He started to travel around the snow coved Aegis, killing every zombie and skeleton in his path. But finally, just outside of krugmar, a horde of zombies and pigmen came at him from both directions of the kings road. He tried to fend them off for as long as he could, but the horde overwhelmed him. Forced to the ground, Unkrak through his axe and tried to punch the undead that were forcing him to the ground. He grabbed a pigman arm which was holding a sword and flung it around, killing many zombies; he then stood up and grabbed another two zombies, cracking there heads together. Unkrak was then shot in the back by an arrow, and the horde of undead forced him to the ground once again. Unkrak cringed in pain, but never would he squeal out in pain, which would be a sign of weakness. The zombies started to claw and his thick skin, and Unkrak struggled as 5 pigmen held him down. A undead came up to Unkrak and drew a blade from his side. The Undead then raised the blade above his chest, but Unkrak then freed his legs and kicked the Undead away. Unkrak then struggled even more, freeing his arms, then grabbing the two zombies that were clawing at him, he through them away and he the mighty orc raised to his feet once again. He ran over to his axe and started to hack away at the zombies at the floor. The horde was nearly defeated by only one orc, but he then saw the Undead ascend from the snow. It grabbed its staff from his back, and in a blink of an eye 10 more pigmen appeared. He fought the pigmen, untill there were only 2 left, by that time Unkrak had several scars and cuts all over his body. He started to feel strange and even more weak, and heard a voice in his head saying "When it is time to end, do not try and resist against it". Unkrak fell to the ground, and looked to the side. There, standing at the top of the stairs leading up to Krugmar, he say Krug himself. Krug then smiled, and disappeared, leaving Unkrak feeling happy. The Undead then drew his blade once again, raised t above his head and finally swinging it down, cutting of Unkrak's head. His body was then ripped apart and eaten by the undead, but now Unkrak is with his other brethren, he is in a better place. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dretus 14 Share Posted January 14, 2012 *realizes that his friend isn't on the boat and fears for the worst* Where Unrak? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 ((btw my new character is going to be awesome)) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dretus 14 Share Posted January 14, 2012 (( I know )) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 *you see an orc on the boat that you have never seen before, he is very tall, your guess would be around 8'7 and he his very muscular. He is standing looking out at sea* Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dretus 14 Share Posted January 14, 2012 *walks over to him and gives him a good headbutt* New urak? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 *Headbuts the orc back* yub, me just get 'ere when da skahing undead attack, so me go on dis boat now, lat nub were me bruddah is? Unkrak? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 *you notice the orc has a scar going through his left eye with a glass ball that has replaced the pupil.* Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dretus 14 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Me nub know where he went but he was bubhosh Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 really? me bubosher cus me accepted by my parents, Unkrak was abandoned hur hur me parents tink he nubosh! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jutra 51 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Unkrak denied to get onto the boat to sail to a new land, and wanted to fight through the undead to prove his mother and father that they should of never abandoned him. I think you meant "Unkrak declined getting onto the boat to sail to a new land, he wanted to fight through the undead to prove his mother and father should never have abandoned him. "denied" means he asked and they told him he couldn't. "declined" means they asked him but he refused. The rest of the changes are just grammatical. Story is good, keep it up. Looking forward to RPing with you.)) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 ((EDITED-i just read through and i found that it was a bit weird, i put "refused" instead)) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jutra 51 Share Posted January 14, 2012 (( I agree refuse would be too harsh a word for the circumstances - declined is the more appropriate word choice.)) Again good story. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jutra 51 Share Posted January 14, 2012 ((ok just read your edit and it's fine with refuse - either work.)) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lugmak 20 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 ((orcs are ment to be harsh :D)) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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