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Out-Of-Character:

Minecraft Account Name:the_shadow1998

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?:

i did not attend minecon.

How old are you?:

13 years old.

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

central/united states of america.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

sometimes i might forget a word or mispell one or forget to put a period or capitol in sentences, but im ok

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

im usually the guy that will be quiet until he has to speak,and wont speak till he has something good to say.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

2-4 hours on the week days and 6-8 hours on the weekend, because of school

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you.:acting as someone else and pretending to be that person and having fun

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are.metagaming is when your out of charecter,and powergaming is were you have no weaknesses and is good at everything.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

a great expierences and plenty of fun

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: ive played on a couple but left becuase they pretty much just destroyed them selves.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

yes i have

How did you hear about us?:

seen i guy doing a commentary on this server and it look great

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?

i have voted my number was 16

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:

kingterenas

In-Character:

Character Name:

uther ravendire

What is your Race?:

human

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

age 34

a handsome man with paladin armor on

a very kind personality he will usually say hi to a person that passes by andmakes sure evryone is having a great day but he has a horrible dark side easily angered and always has a sword with him ready to kill at the slitist glimst of evil

a very happy boy his father a noble but was the kindest man taking care of the people.his father was making a army of religous soldiers called paladins. a very greedy neiboring noble always tryed to get his devilish son to join his army he would pleed with him even said he would give his land to him which all of his advisors told him he should take but told them that they were unholy lands. so the greedy noble finaly gave up but one day while uthers father was traing with him they were attack by maruading orcs.they fought valently but didnt win uther the only surviver easily knew who it was. the greedy noble he followed the orcs to see if he was right. he was he saqw the orcs come to a halt at the beginning of a tree line and the noble slithered out paying the orcs. by then uther was so feriated that he attacked killing the orcs and the noble. he then returned to the castle to give his father a proper barial then left he was sent to an orphanage he stayed there till he was 18 he sent out to inprove his skill with the sword he joined the closet guard recruiter and joined he was trained and spent years as a guard then left to start his army of paladins his father was trying to do but he has rules no orcs aloud, and you must have the belief of the light. hopefully he will become one of the most famous generals ever and he'll live up to what hes father was hoping to accomplish.

Your characters ambitions:

the create the order of the paladins, and have one of the greatest kingdoms ever

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do?he takes out hes blade and walks tords the bandits and tells them to leave the elf alone. the bandits thinking that he just a common guard on a patrol the attack him foolishly and he cuts the first bandit up easy and dodges the second one. the second one seeing he friend cut up so easily realizes that hes no macth for him and runs.uther then makes sure that the elfs ok and gives him some money and food then goes on his way.

Your character walks up to a shop in a quiet market. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer?he would answer "just hear to see how things are", then hed give the man some money and leave.

A screenshot of your skin:[/color

http://www.planetminecraft.com/skin/tier-2-paladin---by-m1n3cr4ft_fr34k/

Other Information:

[James Undercroft 129]

This application is under review.

[James Undercroft 129]

Your application has been:

Do not worry though; this does not mean you cannot apply again, quite the contrary! After two hours you may apply again which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application, plan it out as well as use all of this advice which I have given you in this post to make your application one of the best. Please check the links at the bottom of this post, they will help you quite a bit.

This is Lord of the Craft, not World of Warcraft. Please keep WoW stuff out of this. Although it would be acceptable to create a group of fanatic warriors who are obsessed with the "Light", this is currently not the case in Lord of the Craft.

This is why you were denied:

Both your definitions for metagaming and powergaming are either incorrect or are in need of a lot of improvement.

To be able to play on this server you need to understand what Powergaming and Metagaming are. Luckily for you there are plenty of options to be able to achieve this goal; first of all you can look on the lord of the craft wiki and then search for either "Powergaming" or "Metagaming" (and I say either, because both are on the same page), you can join our Team Speak channel (You can get Team Speak from http://teamspeak.com/?page=downloads ), or you can do a google search.

The grammar of your application makes it really hard to read.

I reccomend this website: www.spellcheckplus.com It will help you with your grammar and hopefully teach you how to structure sentences correctly.

Your biography needs a lot of work.

Your biography is too short and needs some expansion. Please include the entire question when writing your biography such as your characters history, personality, description and age. With the description don’t just write He is tall and old and carries around a bow. There are a lot of tall, old people who carry around bows. Get descriptive; what is your hair colour? How long? Eye colour? Big eyes? Small eyes? Do you have wrinkles? How tall are you? Are you muscled or slim but agile?

You also need to add your characters strengths and weaknesses as well as reasons for such. For example, if your character is good at swordsmanship, bows or even farming you need to explain in your biography why your character is so good in what it does and how it developed these skills.

We would like you to include some lore from the world of Aegis and/or Asulon such as names of towns and people, or even events which have happened before and your characters connection to the event. You can find all about the lore of Lord of the Craft here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Main_Page,'>http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Main_Page, or in the lore/history sections of the forum and website. The types of lore you can include can people places such as towns and kingdoms, or even people or events (such as the exodus from Aegis to Asulon which affected almost everyone).

Your answers to the RP questions need to be improved.

You cannot just write that “I kill the bandits” or “I help the elf”. There must first be some role-play such as talking and some warning before the combat takes place. Be as descriptive as possible when writing about the situation. Include all of the bandits and your actions, as well as all of the speaking that takes place. Instead of writing it like “I would do this, and then this and then the elf would thank me.” Write it like a story so: Zolgash would bellow in an attempt to scare the bandits. “Get away from that elf or you will taste my steel!” The bandits laugh at the orc and turn towards him, but still keeping an eye on the elf. “Ya don’t scare us, green flith.” The bandits charge at Zolgash, meeting steel on steel. See the difference?

You need to write a lot more for the second one. Everyone (and I mean everyone) just writes that they buy something, and leave. What is that? It shows a lack of effort in my opinion. All you have to do is use your imagination, create something innovative, exciting and fun for the reader. There are endless possibilities, for example you could write that the shop keeper is actually a bandit who is luring victims into his shop and then he gets his thug friends to come in from the rear to block your escape, or perhaps the shop keeper tries to cheat you of an item and you respond by calling the guards and something exciting happens. The possibilities are endless; all you have to do is be creative.

Your skin is not embedded into your application.

Please embed your screenshot into your application. While this may take an extra few minutes, what is a few minutes to the countless hours you could potentially spend on this server! It is so easy too. Here is how it is done...

1.Go to the link you have provided (you have given an ample screenshot, so we shall skip the "Getting the image" and "Uploading it" phases) and right click on the image, select "Copy Image Location"

2.Go to your new application and select "Insert Image". It should have the icon of a little tree in a photoframe, and will be next to the "Inset Link" button, and underneath the "Text Color" button.

3.Paste into the textbox (as you have copied the image's location).

4.Select "Insert Image" and voilà! You are done.

Please wait 2 hours or your application will be instantly denied.

This gives you a chance to have a cup of tea and read all of which I have provided.

Please do send a PM my way if you are having any trouble understanding the application process or my feedback, I would be glad to help you. :)

Good luck for your next application!

Here is some further reading material that can help you get accepted:

To understand the questions being asked better look here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/34777-in-depth-analysis-of-the-application-form/

The guide of a Game Master to accepted server applications:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13144-petyrs-guide-to-accepted-server-applications/

Tips to definitely include on your application:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/19145-tips-to-include-on-your-application/

A must-read guide to the world of aegis:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/9868-an-extensive-guide-to-the-world-of-aegis

How to avoid role-playing as a terrible character:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/27643-how-to-avoid-making-a-mary-suegary-stu/

All the lore of the world of Aegis:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Main_Page

Information about the skills system:

http://lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Skill_Information

F.A.Q of Application submissions:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/30081-application-submissions-faq-proper-etiquette/

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum