Application.

[Yoff 328]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

My account name is Icelifreakx

How old are you?:

I am 15 years old

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

(GMT-05:00) Eastern Time (Canada)

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes i am pretty sure i do.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I am a pretty normal 15 year old guy in highschool grade 9.Maybe pursuing a career in photography or game design. I eat healthy, this goes to waste since i spend a lot of my time on the computer (as of late playing minecraft).

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

I don't have a exact number since my schedule changes all the time but if i have to give a number i will have to say 20-40 hours.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

Scape realism into a character you made for yourself.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

I have played a lot of MMO's never roleplayed too much in them but as of late i have been joining RP minecraft servers where i have tried my best to RP.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

Taking something from out of character and use it to your benefit such as Co-ordinates given away in Teamspeak or Forums.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

Power gaming is when you all you want is to win and not giving the opponent or other character a chance to react i.e "I swung my sword at your neck making you die in a instant" the person who died did not have a chance to react to this.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

I expect it to be a large RP community since i have not found one yet other than Forum RP.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

I have been in several minecraft servers. First the Wasteland BOTP (Blood of the Planet) It was a futuristic survival in a wasteland no RP at all. Dynasty World it was really fun but there was no pvp at all because if you pvp you will get banned rather quick.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes i have and agreed to all the rules.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

Of course.

How did you hear about us?:

Minecraft forums once i never payed too much attention but i read on about the server and i liked it so here i am applying for it.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: No i have not voted, but I will make sure i do if the server is what i am expecting (hopefully it isn't a requirement to vote even if i haven't seen the server)

In-Character:

Character Name:

Lan Snow. People call me Ice.

What Race are you?:

Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

N/A

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

*You look into a corner of a pub and you see a hooded man dressed in black with an eye being covered by some old dusty bandages the man looks at you and says with a faint smile* "So you want to hear a story...well have i got a story for you...I was born and raised in a farm house close to a massive forest where trees looked so colossal i felt like a dwarf or an imp. I was raied with both my parents, we farmed, fished and even hunted for our food but we did not live an ordinary farmlife oh no...we were a very special family...you see my dad had this cellar which contained secrets. Potions and writings that could challenge the gods themselves...Ah yes i remember...I was only 10 years old when my dad accidentally tested what was supposed to be a healing potion on me and turned out to be corrosive...it burnt half of my face off...which is why i wear these bandages" *The hooded man points at his bandages* "The pain of that potion was almost unbearable...I learnt from my parents I had to since i was living with such Maniacs.

I was only 14 when our house was assaulted by some men and murdered my mom and dad where they slept i was only coming back home from the hunt when i heard a dagger piercing what happened to be my dad's heart, I loved the man...he may have been crazy bastard but he was my father not to mention my mother oh how much i loved my mother she had such a kind sweet heart even to my dad who was just a psycho wanting to duel the gods...I took out my iron blade out of its sheath and struck the man on the back of his neck while he was not looking the man immediately died and fell to the ground. I cried for a bit but i knew that wasn't what i needed to do, i had to stop crying, i needed to avenge them i needed to find out why they assassinated my parents. I also wish to do what my dad was not able to do make potions that even the gods would shiver at the thought of...it would take a lot of work but i would have the will to do it for my crazy dad. I am pretty skilled at alchemy, i can make a cure to almost any disease you wanna try some? I will do you a discount, 2 gold bars eh? how about it? Well apart from being good at alchemy i am also very skilled with my sword my attacks are precise but fierce. I will spar you if you brought a wooden sword? Oh whats that? You know my life story yet you don't know my name or age *The hooded man laughs* I am 18 years old a man grown.My name is Lan but many call me Ice, for my love of winter.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

To seek why his parents were killed. To become a master of alchemy and swords.

What is your character’s favorite tool?(sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

"My favorite tool you ask? Well that would have to be my potions of course but swords and bows do come in quite handy when i run out of potions."

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

" I am very good at alchemy and using swords, I practice almost everyday when am not working on my potions."

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):http://imgur.com/SmOBq

Other Information about your Character:

"I really like money i have not much money go trough my hands but i still do like it"

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

"Stop, leave the halfling alone" I go over to the halfling and ask him some questions such as "Hey, what were these warriors doing to you?" The halfling responds "They were stealing my money as i was on my way out of the temple" or "I found a coin purse and it seems it belongs to these men" In both cases I would give back the money to the warriors and scort the halfling to safety.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

My character would try to make the prices cheaper in any way possible.

"Hello what kind of wares do you have for a travelling alchemist?"

"Everything an alchemist would need"

"Splendid, do you have some ghast tears?"

"Oh yes only 2 though"

"How about i trade you 6 spider eyes for those ghast tears"

"I'm sorry my good sir but that is not enough"

"Oh why i think its completly fair 6 spider eyes is equivalent to 18 poison potions which could easily kill almost any foe"

"Ah thats a good point but i still think you might need to make it a higher price"

"Fine 7 spider eyes that would make 21 poison potions"

"Deal"

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

"Ah a good find this could sell for quite quite a bit. Meanwhile the iron bars could come in handy if i need to repair me swords"

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond? "Please could i have some food? I will do anything" If they give me food i would be grateful and try my best to perform any tasks the man needs if they don't give me food i would steal it and run away as fast as possible

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

"Here have some of me potions they can easily help you and your men in the battle if you really need more swordsman i am also able to my sire"

[James Undercroft 129]

Your application has been:

Denied

Do not worry though; this does not mean you cannot apply again, quite the contrary! After 24 hours you may apply again which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application, plan it out as well as use all of this advice which I have given you in this post to make your application one of the best.

You have been denied because:

Your biography is unrealistic and needs a lot of improvement.

I have listed quite a few points:

-How can you hear a heart being pierced?

-Your biography is very cliche, almost everyone has their parents die, why not be different?

-Your biograhpy does not make sense in certain places. For example "took out my iron blade out of its sheath and struck the man on the back of his neck while he was not looking the man immediately died and fell to the ground." this would not just kill a man instantly.

-You did not include your characters personality or much of your description.

For the favourite tool and best skill questions you need to improve them.

You need to write 2 sentences for each explaining WHY your character is so good at what he does. For example he may train every day, but what reason does he have for doing so?

Your skin is not embedded.

Please embed your screenshot into your application. While this may take an extra few minutes, what is a few minutes to the countless hours you could potentially spend on this server! It is so easy too. Here is how it is done...

1.Go to the link you have provided (you have given an ample screenshot, so we shall skip the "Getting the image" and "Uploading it" phases) and right click on the image, select "Copy Image Location"

2.Go to your new application and select "Insert Image". It should have the icon of a little tree in a photoframe, and will be next to the "Inset Link" button, and underneath the "Text Color" button.

3.Paste into the textbox (as you have copied the image's location).

4.Select "Insert Image" and voilà! You are done.

Your open response answers need a lot of improvement.

As these are "open response" questions you need to write your answers accordinlyly. Instead of "If this, then that." Write "John dives forward, narrowliny missing the blade which was swung at his head".

In some of your answers you have far too much dialogue with little to no description or actual RP, this needs to change.

If you need any help please send me a message.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum