Hacker_Ex's 2Nd Application

[ATiredVikingr 10]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: Hacker_Ex

How old are you?: 17

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Mountain Time, Arizona, USA

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:yes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I’m an average 17 year old. I like hanging out with friends, Xbox, Minecraft, and baseball.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I am normally on 2-3 times a week, but am sometimes gone for a week or two.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Roleplaying is when you become a character and act as that character in his daily life.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I do not have any experience but love acting and medieval era and learned a lot from YouTube videos on how to be a good roleplayer.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: Meta-Gaming is when you use out of character information and use it when you are in character.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power-Gaming is when you do not allow for a player, after assaulting him/her to retaliate and be given a chance.

What do you expect this server will be like?: A fun environment where people who like medieval genre and roleplaying can have a good time.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I haven’t played on any other roleplaying servers, because I never find any good ones. The ones I have found are not fully roleplaying.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Yes

How did you hear about us?: YouTube Videos

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: Yes, http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/50293-hacker-exs-application/

In-Character:

Character Name: Peter Aramis

What Race are you?: Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): Born and raised in Aegis.

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

I am the son of a Asulon Lord who was betrayed by his younger brother who took the fortress for himself. My father who was deeply scared by this took up the craft of a blacksmith and raised a family in a humble home. I am the oldest of his three sons, my brothers Gorgon, Caspian have been my companions since our childhood where we played together always remembering our motto “All for One, One for All.” These where my happy years of my childhood and teens, they were spent working on my swordsmanship and my ability to repair my armor and weapons.

I am now 28 years old I have black hair and am always wearing blue and my family crest showing who I am. I would like to become a soldier in the human army and one day a great general and even maybe a prince, but as of now I will humbly server my city and its citizens. I am single and would like to stay that way for some years anyways, but may one day settle down to raise a family. I want the people of Asulon to know me for my kindness towards them and to know that I had brought Pride and Honor to my family.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

To become a noble man who can help people in distress. And to also become well-known among the people of his village a skilled warrior and craftsman, who has a kind heart, officer in the human army, one day a high ranking governmental official.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (Sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Sword

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?:

Swordsmanship and building things of wood and iron.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character: He is highly trained blacksmith who only give fair prices and may ge something free if he so chooses.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?:

I try to aid the Halfling any way I can by trying to find a peaceful solution through first before using force(within the rules of roleplay).

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?:

I would tell him good day and ask what he is selling. If he does not have any wares that I would be in need of, I would tell him good day and be on my way.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

I would not take them because they might still belong to someone or could be a trap for those who do try and steal the items.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you in the common tongue, how do you respond?:

I would ask kindly if I can either trade or buy food from them and also ask for directions.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

I would bravely offer my support to put down the evil that should not be stood for.

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your have used incorrect formatting of the application.

You need to re-copy the application format. Make sure you have copied the text from the white box and not anywhere else. Also make sure that you do not delete anything in [these square brackets] as they are vital to keep the colour, boldness and size of the text. If you are having trouble because your entire application turns out in funny colours, make sure that you are writing your answers on a line underneath the question, as this is a common error and can mess up the formatting of your application.

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. It is either too short and needs expansion, or it contains information which goes against what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

Both of your metagaming and powergaming definitions need expansion.

Both of them are too short and require an example to display your understanding of the concepts.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You cannot be the son of a Lord/Lady/King/Queen/Prince/Princess as this will give you an inherent advantage over other players. While this may not be what you intended you must change this just in case. If you organise this with a current Lord however this is acceptable, but you must list their names and write in the “other information” that you were given permission to do so.

You have not included any (or much) lore from the world of Asulon or the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. I would also like to note that the entire server escaped from Aegis about 25 in game years ago to move to Asulon, I suggest you do some research on this point. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

Your biography is not substantial enough. You need to write more about your character, write more detail and more depth. If your biography is less than two paragraphs long or is a bit too short it will be automatically denied. You need to write a minimum of two paragraphs (which in themselves must contain at least five full sentences).

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come.

√GOOD

Currently your character is by far too powerful, or too perfect. I believe that reading this guide would benefit you greatly:

How to avoid roleplaying as a terrible character.

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet; but why?

Some or all of your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum