[Denied]Neemiescott's 2Nd

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Out-Of-CharacterNeemie

Minecraft Account Name:neemiescott

How old are you?:16

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:10 Hours+, Brisbane, Australia

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes, I have a firm grasp on the English language and it's grammar.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I am a high school student who lives in Brisbane and loves gaming, especially RPG's. I have a gaming PC that I spend my time on when not doing assignments or playing hockey. I try to spend atleast an hour a day on my computer so that i do not miss anything. I have good grades at school especially in English and Maths and always hand in assignments on time so that i can get on my PC. I am a generally modest, compassionate person who does not boast much.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:6-10 Hours weekly, depending on assignments, homework and chores.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:Role Playing to me is to leave this world (metaphorically speaking) and step into a fictional characters shoes. It is a way to have fun by leaving your OOC behind and adopting your IC as your personality. "Role-playing refers to the changing of one's behaviour to assume a role, either unconsciously to fill a social role, or consciously" (Google Dictionary I agree with google dictionary's definition.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:I have been playing RPG's for as long as I can remember, I have played a variety of MMORPG's and other minecraft RPG servers that have not given me the feel for a good RPG that i want. I have also played the latest 3 elderscrolls games, and a variety of other RPG's including Lord of the Rings online, World of Warcraft, Star Wars the Old Republic and Runescape.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:Meta-Gaming, is when someone uses OOC knowledge to give them an unfair advantage to a game. In other words, using an type of information that was not received from the game to allow you to complete a certain quest. e.g. Receiving co-ordinates from an OOC Friend, watching a youtube video or reading a walkthrough.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is:Power emoting is giving an unfair advantage towards others in typed actions. Such as "Bentarob stole Neemiescott's wallet" a more fair way is to say, "Bentarob attempted to thieve Neemiescott's wallet" give just as equal terms to both people involved.

In your own Words, define what Out of Character (OOC) is:Out of is when you are acting as a real person, not your in game character e.g. Dwarf/Elf/Orc.

In your own Words, define what In Character (IC) is:In Character is when you are acting as your online person, not your real person. e.g. Dwarf/Elf/Orc.

What do you expect this server will be like?:I expect the server to a fun server for me and my friends (some of whom are already accepted) that we can level up and play together on, with quests and allowing us to pretend to be other people, not ourselves.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:I played on the Yogscast RPG Server, which got closed down. Many of my own personally hosted servers, Imdeity (left because of reset and did not want to start again), EnderBros, (left because my friend who owns it removed world guard permanently), UberMinecraft (Did not like the community) and several others.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:Yes I have read, I understand, and agree to follow the rules of this server.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:Yes.

How did you hear about us?:Several friends of mine, who have been accepted, were having an online party, which I attended, and watching them, liked what I saw.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:

My Previous Submission

In-Character:

Character Name:Neemie

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) :Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):Wood-Elf

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

(written from IC view) When I was just a young ling, before my memories can take me, I lived peacefully in a small establishment just inside the woods in the southern most parts of Asulon, until orcs raided the village, kidnapping me in the process. From then on, I was taken back to their swamps, and pits and was raised to be animals like them. They turned me into some kind of Hitman, trained me well in Stealth, and Archery skills. I lived with them for 19 years until one day I over heard Oc'Tuum, my orc clans leader talking to the other orcs about how I was found, stolen and raised to do their bidding. I immediately ran away where I made a vow to change myself into a better person.

I started off by trying to figure out my basic features, never having even looked at my reflection before. I looked into a nearby water hole. I have dirty, scraggly blond hair, eyes as black as night and ears that come to an almost sharp point. I start to walk in the direction of smoke, which I presume to be a chimney fire. Along my journey, I establish that my age is around 20 years old because of the early age i was abducted at, and the time I spent with the orcs. I come across a small village of humans, who at first fear me due to my disgusting look. Until the shop keeper of the general store, Okie, takes me in. He offers me shelter and food, in exchange for my story. His daughter, Isabelle, boiled some water for my bath and told me to wash down. After my bath she combs my hair and puts a braid down the left side of my face. The gave me fresh clothes and map to follow, and saw me off to find my parents.

Basic Summary:

Eyes: Black Eyes

Cloathing: Wears a cloak

Age: around 20

Hair: blonde with a braid on left side of face

Gender: Male

Family: Mother and Father who he was separated from

Raised: By Orcs who kidnapped him

Friends: Isabelle and Okie

Goals: To find his parents and become a better person

What are your Character's ambitions?:His ambitions are to be reunited with his parents and right the wrongs that he committed as a slave to the Orcs.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

Bow and Arrow, but after leaving the orcs has taken an interest in Sword's aswell.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

Archery and Stealth Predominantly but is also a skilled parkour runner (free runner)

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser: ( http://tinyurl.com/Lotcscreenshot ):

Resized to 43% (was 854 x 480) - Click image to enlarge

I am still adjusting this skin a bit, not quite happy with the cloak. But here is what it looks life at the moment.

Other Information about your Character:Not much more that needs to be covered.

Open-Response-Questions

Each and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?"HEY!!! Cut that out, what did this halfling ever do to you?" asked Neemie. "Nothing, but we are guards appointed directly from his majesty, the King" replied the guards. The guards continue robbing the halfling until Neemie runs over and pulls the smaller guard away from the hobbit. The guard stabbed Neemie through the thigh, but his determination pulled him through as he knocked both of the guards out stone cold. The halfling took Neemie home and dressed his wound and thanked him for his services.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?"Just passing through thanks", Neemie says cheerfully. "Please I insist you have a look in my shop, and since you are my first customer today, I will give you a half price discount". Neemie, fell into his trap and followed him into the shop. Immediately after entering the door locked behind him. A knife is put to Neemie's throat and without thinking, he turns around and stabs the merchant through the heart, feeling unsafe, Neemie takes the key from the merchants belt and runs into the woods.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:Neemie walks into the small hut, calling for residence, he notices a chest round the back of the house. He slowly creeps up to it. Inside is a few iron bars and a golden sword. He gives the sword a swing then sheaths it, leaving behind some gold and an apology note to the owner. He continues on his journey.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?"A DWARF LEARNING AND ELVEN LANGUAGE??? The Elf council will not approve, who taught you?" Screamed Neemie. "I-I-It was a merchant who traveled through her around a year ago." Meekly said the Dwarf. "You do not bear the right to use that tongue, not in this land nor your own. Neemie scurries off Angrily.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:Neemie wanting to make the world better and clear his bad name, agrees to follow them. But after killing bandit after bandit refused payment for his help, instead asked for a meal and continued on his quest to find his family.

Anything else you would like to say? Only that from past experiences, am big on rule following and keeping in character to make the event more enjoyable for everyone. Oh, and thank you to whoever reads this. And sorry for the stuffed up colors, tried to fix it but it didnt work too well...

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Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied [Correct the X'ed Areas]:

Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge on the World [x]

Open Ended Questions Need Refining [ ]

Illegal Character Abilities [ ]

Unrealistic Events [ ]

-Fabricated Large-Scale Events [ ]

Incorrect Lore [ ]

Power/Metagaming [ ]

Contradicting Statements [ ]

Cliche [ ]

Villain Application Needed [ ]

Incorrect Definitions of Power-emoting [ ]

Incorrect Definitions of Metagaming [ ]

Form:

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Missing Areas [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Incorrect Formatting [ ]

Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unlore-ful Skin [ ]

Other Comments: You need to insert more lore into your biography. Also, your ORQ's contain a great deal of powergaming you for example stab a merchant and knock out two armed guards very rapidly. Finally, I cannot see your skin.

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