[Denied] [Human] [Halfling] Turian_ (Second Edition)

[Turian5 0]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: turian_
How old are you?:20
Time-Zone: 2 + GMT
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I was a blacksmith on this one server. Only thing why i'm not there anymore is because it was shutdown.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I searched the internet for the #1 rpg server. And a planet minecraft server page popped up with this thing.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85377-human-turian/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):
Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:Yes

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Assuming a character in a game like it was you i mean assuming a role in a world of fantasy.(short answer:acting in a game)
Meta-gaming:Getting information from outside of the game.
Power-emoting: Emoting things that may end another's role play like *John blows up Biker's house while biker was inside* this would end another's roleplay experience.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Aku Enkka Patukka
Current Age: 19
Sub-race (if any): Halfling
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Aku was born in Branborough. He lived a good life. He learned to walk at the age of 1. He was a very good farmer but odd thing he did not like mushrooms. His parent's were very proud of him because he made his own food and he mined his own ore in the family mine. He was a little odd. He loved to bake and he always wanted to be a self farming baker. At  age of  20 he wanted to mine outside of family mine his parent's didn't want him to. But one day he branched out of the family mine and he was soon surrounded by skeletons. His parent's followed him in they killed almost all of them. His mother made it out but his dad didn't. After they closed their mine he wanted to go to go for an little trip....

 

After he had visited human capital. He wanted some time alone so he had gone for a little job at an inn. He always wanted to see some elves. But shame he didn't see them on that trip so he traveled to the cloud temple to see if he could see some elves....

 

Ambitions for the Future: Return to Branborough
Personality: A little sad and sarcastic but very funny.
Skills: A very talented miner and farmer.
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): He is wearing a very good shirt  

that he got for a present from his mother.
Any other details you wish to share about your character: 

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

Answer: I walk to the nearest guard and i say: i saw a shady figure there i think hes not here for the view. The guard: you sure hes up to no good. Me: *sigh* yes i'm sure. The guard: okay ill go talk to him.
I see the guard walk to him a horse walks in front of my field of vision. After the horse walks away. 
I see the guard's body there. And the figure is nowhere  to be seen i walk away(pretty fast).
2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

Answer: I go to the bandit's and ask what are they doing. Me: I'm sorry but what are you doing. Bandit #1:Were helping our grandfather (while taking the old man's sword out of his hand). Bandit #2: Hes a little paranoid (while putting his sword out). The old man: go away you dead beasts! Me: Ah i see okay just asking sorry for  wasting your time. Bandit #1 no worry. So i walk away (whilst whistling)   


3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

Answer: I walk to him we haggle for some arrows and some gold. But finally get into some hoe's. Me:so a diamond hoe i would really like to get one. The man: well if you want really good crops this is for you (whilst showing a magnificent hoe). Me: ill buy it how much! The man: err well some 20 diamonds. Me: 20 diamonds!?!

The man: okay okay 10 diamonds. Me: okay ill bend. The old man: Good thank you  here it is thank you(whilst taking 10 diamonds from me). Me: aren't you forgetting something. The man: oh yes(having an embarrassed face) here you go (same time giving me the hoe) Me thank you. I walk away. 

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

 

 

 

Sadly I have to deny your application. The reasons are as follows:

 

• Your definitions are slightly off and I think you need to expand the explanation of them and perhaps give a better example too.
• Your biography is still too short. Go into detail about your characters past and how he acts and was raised, things like that. So that your character is more fleshed out.
• You also didn't have any lore in your biography again. Thus I think you need to go and read it once again. 
•  All three of your ORQs are too short and need to be expanded on greatly with dialogue.
• You did not post on the minecraft forums.
• You spelling and grammar needs to be improved.

 

 

Please wait 24 hours before re-applying or face instant Denial. Feel free to PM me with any questions you might have.

 

[IrishPerson 693]

Moved to Denied Forum.