[Denied]Sean_Desed's Lotc Application

[sean_desed 15]

 

Out-Of-Character Information

 

Please fill out the following
questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are
accurate.

 

 

 

Minecraft Account Name: sean_desed

 

How old are you?: 17

 

Time-Zone: Est

 

Have you read, understood and agreed to
the rules?: Yes

 

What previous experience have you had
in role-playing?: Yes

 

How did you hear about the the Lord of
the Craft?: A friend

 

Link any applications that you have
previously made for the server: Na

 

Have you posted this application on the
Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Na

 

Have you read the Elven lore, and shall
you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

 

 

 

Definitions

 

In your own words define the
following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

 

 

Role-playing: Playing a character that
you have created and acting as that person and living your life as that
character.

 

Meta-gaming: Using out-of-character
info to help you in the game. Ex Hey dude your city is going be attacked in a
couple hours. I’ll text you later for more info.

 

Power-emoting: Using emotes and unfair
advantages to help you in the game. Ex. John lunges to Finrod and slices his
head off in one hit.

 

 

 

In-Character Information:

 

Complete the following biography on
your character:

 

 

 

Full Name: Finrod Lockwood

 

Current Age: 76

 

Sub-race (if any): Wood Elf

 

Past / History (include childhood,
major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

 

Ambitions for the Future: I plan to
join the great Highguard and protect the city and keep everybody safe along
with my fellow guards. Then later I can hopefully get married and live
peacefully in a house not too far outside of Malinor.

 

        Finrod
was born a poor child. His family was made up of Mali’ame farmers living
outside of the borders of Malinor. He was an only child and didn’t have any
friends. He made himself a tree house and that is where he spent most of his
time besides the farm and the house. His mother gave him a longbow for his
birthday. His father had taught him to make arrows out of sticks and bird
feathers. After making himself some arrows he shot at targets in the yard, but
when his family was in dire need for food, he would hunt for large game such as
deer and lost cattle.

 

        When
he grew up to be a teenager he got a job as a baker. He learned to make bread
and cake and he had fun with it too. He was then fired 2 weeks later due to low
income for the business. His family was threatened to lose their house because
they couldn’t pay their monthly taxes. Young Finrod wished to join the Malinor
Highguard. However his family could not afford to lose him.

 

        When
he turned 26 he got an offer for an unknown job. He accepted immediately. His
manager gave him small quests to gather supplies from abandoned houses. Then he
was told to go out and rob a man’s house then burn it down. Finrod did as told.
He gathered all he could carry. Then left a burning torch on his carpet in his
family room. He received news the next morning that a Sariant had died due to
the fire.

 

        He
quit his job after a bounty had been made for his head. Although, the money he
made in his job was enough to help is parents. No longer needed by his parents
he set off to join the Malinor Highguard and protect the nation.

 

Personality: Courageous, comical,
creative, and enjoys farming in his freetime.

 

Skills: Good with a bow, can handle a
sword, green thumb, can run long distances.

 

Appearance (this must include an
in-game screenshot of your skin): http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/1376811/male-wood-elf/

 

Any other details you wish to share
about your character:

 

 

 

Open-Response-Questions

 

Each question in this section must
be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in
full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore
at any point.

 

____

 

 

 

1. As you walk through the deep
forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you
realize that a group of older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you
react?

 

 

 

Answer: I walk up to them, politely
greet them and ask them to stop. I tell them a joke or two to and try to take
their mind off of what is going on around them. I grab the child’s hand and
send him away from the group. I turn to the elves mocking him and then say
“look at you all, making fun of a child, you should all be ashamed of
yourselves.” I then go off to find the child and question him about what
happened and ask if I can help him find his parents.

 

 

 

2. Whilst wandering through the
Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He
collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his
pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open
spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do
you do?

 

 

 

Answer: I run towards him and ask him
if he is okay. I bring him to his feet and brush the dirt off of him then help
him pick up all of his coins. Then grab a spare sack from my pocket and put the
coins in it. I hand it to him and walk him to shelter. Once I get him to the
nearest town I offer him some of my spare food and water then talk to him for a
bit. After that I will politely let him know that I must get back to my duties.

 

 

 

3. Whilst traversing the Elven
Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A
trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He
points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing
for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:-
item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

 

 

 

Answer: As the man calls me over, I
look to the cart’s various wares. A quiver of sharpened arrows catches my eye.
As I look to them, the man smiles and offers me a price of thirty minas. I
check my pockets, and notice a plethora of spare minas. I look up to the man
and begin to speak, “Thirty minas will suit me just fine.” He offers to haggle,
but I decline. I reminisce back to my childhood, and relish the fact that I can
now buy expensive goods without worry. “No haggling needed. Just the arrows.” I
hand him the coin, and head off to fire a few practice shots at the range.

 

 

 

[ski_king3 0]

Under Review
 

 

Well, I guess I need to say I'm sorry. I looked through your app and saw that there was nothing in the section where your bio was, as well as where you said "Na" in the question asking if you'd posted your app to the Minecraft forums, and after that I pretty much stopped reading your app. I did not realize you had a bio, just in the wrong section. I'm sorry, that was my mistake. Below is a complete reviewal of your application.

First of all, you do need to post your application on the Minecraft forum post, found in the application format thread.

Also, if you have had roleplay experience in the past, please elaborate on what it was.

As far as definitions go, both your roleplaying and power-emoting definitions could use a bit of work. The roleplaying one is less important, but the power-emoting could be made more clear, although the example was good, I would say.

Your bio is pretty good, and uses some lore, which is nice. However, there's a few things I'd like to point out. For one, you cannot have your character performing villainous actions in your bio. So robbing a house and burning it down is not allowed, as you would need a villain application in order to perform those evil deeds. Also, a Sariant most likely would not be in Malinor, so it would be a little odd for one to die in the fire. And then my last thing is what happened with the bounty? It would be difficult to join the Highguard of Malinor if he was a wanted man.

As far as your skin goes, wood elves traditionally have skin that is tan, darker than that in your skin. I'm sure someone in our skin sub-forum would be more than willing to make some minor edits to make it tanner for you.

I also feel like your ORQ's could be expanded a bit, at least your first and second. Add a bit more dialogue, perhaps? Make it seem less like a summary of a series of events, and more like the events are happening as I read, if that makes any sense.

I'm sorry again for my mistake, I should have read your application more carefully.

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me. You may reapply in 24 hours following the post below.

Edited May 11, 2013 by everblue2er101
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