Some Poems

[Parading 302]

My cowardice reduces my philosophy to a desolate illusion.

I love you, but this anxiety is sure a pain.

The availability of living is easily reachable physically, yet the inner turmoil, it prevents and eats up my life.

When will I figure it out, my mind is a paradise yet a cage, freedom is not far but also unreachable.

This life of dismay cannot be considered true.

More to gain than to lose, but yet I seem to constantly fail.

Fear to angst, turning my hear blacker then crisp coal, mined from deapths un-traversed.

Is love the key, or will that only aspire to destroy me more so?

Overthinking would be an understatement, when the underlying point is; you cannot let love be prevented by despair.

 

This next piece was written RP'ly by my elven character, but I thought of it decent enough to share here.

 

"Immortality, a blessing but also a curse they say, I simply state that its an obscenity that never keeps my sanity at bay. Everything important slowly disintegrating away into ashes, that were once a well collected heart that could SING! Gone, ravaged into a dissapated state, only to re-occur when the feeling dawn. Need some new experiences, emotions, if only there were some differences. Stars."

 

"Stars. A bastion of hope that could free me from these bars. Brightening the night, not being able to reach so frightening. The induvidual emotion of each star is an endless fuel, keeping me going through the days like an exhausted muel."

 

"I'll never reach them. Its a hopeless endeavor, lasting forever. Whats beyond? We'll never know, because we've been simply conned. Imprisoned within our realm, left to simply envision. For this life without end, isn't a life at all." 

 

I'm very new to poetry, and would really like some constructive criticism if possible. Correcting grammar won't do much use though, I'll always be **** grammatically.

[Draeris 3124]

There is no way I would ever have the right to critic this. Even though I very much like it, art with merit is still art!

[Parading 302]

Thanks!

[Knox213 10]

Moved to the Archive. It shall be sorted into the appropriate category shortly.