[✔] [Accepted] [Pending] Revised application

[CaptainSwift11 0]

 

 

MC name: CaptainSwift11

irl age: 12 (i am aware it is pg-13)

i have read the rules and agreed

rule i agree with the most : no use of memes ,why: its REALLY ANNOYING

what is knowledge of the monks?

i found lotc on google

 

definitions

 

Role play: acting as fictitious character

Meta Gaming:  using knowledge your character  would not know

Power Gaming: forcing other RPers into a action

 

Character info

Name: James Swift

Gender:M

Race: Human/High elf

Age:25

 

Bio

   James Swift was found with a mark around his finger like a ring that faded over the years, (but is still partly visible) in a Forest outside of Courland By Dad:Jonathan Swift and Mom:Maria Eldei Swift and raised in the city Felsen . And later moved to Istria after years of boring. His parents died in a house fire and he lived with family Friends for a few years until he moved out and quite recently (age 20) was hired for a assassination and was successful for a first attempt,(got caught but escaped, its been years since)

   At age 10 James . At age 14 he got a pet Flying Squirrel named Alice. Over the years James acquired bits of skills here and there. Young, James had a particular interest in books an interest he keeps to this day, he was often found holed up in his room reading.at age 16 he had gotten a scarf from his father .He had been and still is a “sneaky little bugger” - James neighbor from Felsen ,after many attempts of thievery . when he was little he was put under a confusing spell (no magical side effects just a bit of craziness). James had wanted to study magic but never did. James decided over the years to “form” his own set of beliefs, but he has left the forming for a later day in his life.

 

Personality traits:Bookworm,Smart,"a bit crazy", sneaky,

 

Ambitions: Magic , Squirrel training,

 

Strengths :thievery, assassinations,

Weaknesses: physical labor,Boredom,Heavy weapons(clubs and other things),long amounts of running , mining,

 

Appearance: Dirty blond hair, Purple eyes, scarf,

weight:140 lb height: 6ft,8

http://imgur.com/gallery/T6b7VBl/new

Side note:Hobbits?

[Corvoo 562]

Your application has been put on [PENDING]
 
What this simply means is; your application is good! Do not fret, however, in order for this application to be accepted there are some minor details in your application that will need to be edited. Do not make a new app, simply use the 'Edit' button at the bottom of your application.

 

-From what I can tell in your bio. You're stating that your character was a successful assassin at the age of ten. This is simply unrealistic, and not at all feasible. Please edit your bio to make a bit more sense, in that regard. 

 

-Your strengths and weaknesses do not balance out. Your weaknesses compared to your strenghts make your character seem rather overpowered, and not very balanced. Please edit those to make some more sense.
 
If you want help of need me to review your app again once you have made the necessary changes. Please visit my profile and send me a Private Message simply asking me too.
 
 
You have 24 Hours to make the changes, failure to do so without providing good reason will result in a denial.

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