AcpSoldier7's Improved Application.

[AcpSoldier7 0]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name: AcpSoldier7

-How old are you?: 14 years old.

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Eastern time zone.

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, yes I do.

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: When I get home from school, I love to come home and play Minecraft with my friends. I also deeply enjoy the outdoors, and playing football. (American football)

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 10-17 a week. Possibly more depending on my weekends.

-How long have you played minecraft?: Almost a whole year, But I have only been playing multiplayer for about nine or ten months.

-What do you know about roleplaying?: Well I have played some other roleplaying video games with my friends. So I have a pretty good grip on Roleplaying and I stay in character.

Roleplaying is when a person or multiple people assume a role in a game. Or portraying as someone else, like being a good actor.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I've played Minecraft Square,and Legendary Craft. I currently play on my friend’s server, and I'm looking for a great RP server.

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes, and they all seem like great rules for a RP server.

-Name the 4 races on this server: Elves, Orcs, Humans, and Dwarfs. Plus Undead and Ascended.

-How did you hear about us?: The Xtreme top 100. Also I had heard about it from the Minecraft Forums.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: AcpSoldier7

In-Character:

-Character Name: Tom (Tom the chef)

-What is your Race?: Human and hobbit (Mother was a Halfling. Father was a human.)

-Biography: Tom's life has always been a hard one with many tragedies. When he was a very young boy his father’s bakery was attacked by bandits, when his father tried to fight back, He was killed. After that (at the age of 12) Tom had to be the man of the family, Tom took his father’s place as chief baker. A few years later, just when things were starting to look bright for Tom's life, His mother got a terrible sickness and soon passed away. With both of his parents gone, Tom had nowhere to go, and no family left... Afterwords, In Tom's grief and rage, He ran as far as he could into the wild…

Once Tom ran into the wild, a thunderstorm appeared. Tom quickly ran into a nearby cave for cover from the storm, and was soon lost in the near endless labyrinth. For days and days, Tom wandered in the cave system hoping to find a way out. Soon Tom found a strange wooden door in the cave; he quickly opened the door…

What Tom found inside the room was very strange. Tom found a bed, a desk with a very large stack of books on top, and some food. With all of his wanderings Tom gratefully ate up all of the food and fell on to the bed in an instant. When he awoke he found a strange old man standing above him. The man asked Tom what he was doing there. Tom told him the sad story about his life. When Tom was finished the old man said “When I was a young boy, just like yourself, My brother died. I was so filled with grief and sadness I ran away, Just like you. And I’ve been living in this cave ever sense…” Tom quickly realized what he had to do. Tom could just run away from everything. He had to face it. Then Tom went back into the world of ageis. To face the world… Without running away from danger.

-Character Age: 18 years of age.

-Character Appearance: Tom is usually seen in poor clothing. Sometimes he wears and old chef hat. But he always wears a pin his father gave him before he died.

-Character Personality:

-Your ambitions: I would like to build, survive, make friends and allies, And have a load of fun while I'm doing it. What I want to do most if make friends and build :)

-Can your character read or write?: Yes, His mother taught him everything she knew.

-Can your character mine?: A little, Tom had a dwarf friend when he was a child. Who taught him a little. But he is very inexperienced.

-Are you a capable builder?: The only thing Tom build was a shed in his backyard once. So he cannot build very well yet.

-Can you wield a sword?: After Tom's father died, Tom attempted to teach himself sword technics. But he is not a professional.

-Enjoy Farming?: Yes, He is a very good farmer. His father grew all of the food at home.

-Does your character have any special skills?: He is a great baker, And is a great farmer. Tom also always tries to make friends with whoever he can.

-A screenshot of your skin: I have my skin in the attachment.

-Other Information: I made an application a few days ago, But I decided that this one was much better :) Also I did all of this is Microsoft Word, so I hope it all copy pastes the right way.

[Jadles 85]

Your answers are too short.

Please re-write your role play answer to describe what role playing is. You have provided no evidence you understand what it is.

Look at some examples ((but don't copy from them)), re-read your application, take your time and try again.

Have a read of this also: Petyr's excellent guide - http://www.lordofthe...r-applications/

Common reasons people are denied:

-It has bad grammar or Punctuation.

-Your biography was too short.

-Your Biography didn't link to the lore of Aegis.

-You obviously didn't read the lore.

-Fix the layout: This could be from having bolds everywhere or simply being hard to read.

-It lacked effort.

-Your skin isn't RP.

-Needed an actual picture of your skin.

-You didn't include a skin link or it didn't work.

-Your application was too short.

These are just some of the reasons it could have been

I encourage you too check out the following link if you are struggling to write an application.

http://www.lordofthe...od-application/

[AcpSoldier7 0]

Thanks you. I will re-right it