Forim's Bio

[Forim Grik'nir 4]

I was requested after submitting my application to rewrite my lacking bio. Other than that, I took it as all fields were accepted, so I'll be efficient and simply write my bio here.

IN CHARACTER:

M' father w'sa guard of Kal'Urguan. Were 't no' fer 'im, I'd ne'er 've b'come a fighter m'self. I's cuzza 'im tha' I wanted t' join the ranks 'n smite our enemies fer m'self. I've been fightin' since I were a wee li'le dwarf an' even 'elped someone bein' attacked b' bandits when I were a bi' older. Like all dwarves, I love nothin' more than minin' 'n food. Tha' includes ale uhcurse. I'll be 'appy t' serve Aegis in all tha' I can.

[Alys 2]

Denied

Partly for not waiting 48 hours.

Even though we prefer (require) applicants to copy and paste the entire application, I took a look at your old one anyway. Your definition of roleplay is indeed sufficient, but your character still falls short. I did like the dwarf accent, keep that up! Here are some pointers for next time.

- Provide more detail in your biography. Remember that it must include history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc. The more, the better.

- Ambitions also need to be expanded on. They should somehow connect to the personality and/or history of your character.

- Display your ability to roleplay in the scenario questions. That's why they are asked. Don't just tell what he does, show how.

Please wait 48 hours before reapplying. Take this time to read over your application and make necessary edits. Feel free to direct any questions you might have to me via PMs. Happy App-ing!

Some recommended reads for applicants:

Application Submissions FAQ|Proper Etiquette * Advice From the Application Team * Implemented Application Section

[Alys 2]

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