My Application

[savlon1000 0]

Out-Of-Character: my name is James and I am 14

Minecraft Account Name: savlon1000

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?: No but i would of

How old are you?: 14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: GMT/England

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes and i am English

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I live in England and am 14 years old, I enjoy minecraf role playing and Computer programming.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 2-3 hours a day

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you.: Roleplaying is when you pretend to be someone your not, e.g you are a king and your people need you to kill the bandits.

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are: Metagaming is using character information that you know out of character or your friend telling you info about this person Powergaming, people who Powergame usually RolePlay's things which may be impossible to do, leaving the other player with no chance to fight back.

What do you expect this server will be like?:I think this server will be really good, and I think I will really enjoy playing on it and hope to make some friends.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: not many but they where all just boring and dull.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes i have.

How did you hear about us?: a friend you know him as emo6000.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? no. sorry

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: savlon1000

In-Character:

Character Name: kar_maln

What is your Race?:dark Elf

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): He is a dark elf . he was fond in a small cave about the size of a table rapt in some rags with web on it so the human who fond him pot him in a back pack the human was a magic master and tort him . He grow up in a shed so he needed to hunt. When he got older 14 he got a robe ( red robe ) he

was very macho and decided to move out he had a small home but for him it was very good. on his 34 birthday he got magic book not from any 1 he know of, it said to meet at a place called warmuch

his mum gave him a sowed for when ether he was in danger. he got that out under his bed and went to the town. that was a member of the assassin he joined and now he gets 5000,0 gold every dead man.

Now he is 562 hi dad died 477 years ago from a imperial solder now the king of the hole of viverwood he hops to seek revenge. which is why he came hire .he seeks adventure ,truth, battle and power . he will be a simple man in a group of Meany , but a hero to his dad.

Your characters ambitions: he want's to seek out his enemies and kill them. but also to join groups make friends and explore.

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do? helps any elf and sneak up on them first loot them and then kill them or kill then loot.

Your character walks up to a shop in the middle of Al'Khazar. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer? hello can i have 15 or 16 iron haw much would that be. 24 gold sir. thank you do you stay hire or go some where else. stay where i am sir. good bye.

A screenshot of your skin: http://s1144.photobu...1-24_210530.png

Other Information: I will make villain app but first i want to get in hopefully. if i do get in it would be grate. from savlon1000

[Rhisereld 317]

Denied.

Out-Of-Character is not a question, it's a title. Fix up your format and use the colour and bolding that was in the original template. It's likely you deleted the things in these brackets []. Leave them next time. Work on your spelling, puntuation and grammar, and don't leave huge spaces between each question.

You should give a more detailed definition of roleplaying.

Your definition of metagaming and powergaming is mostly incoherent. You should rewrite this and explain a lot more.

Your name should be capitalised. Small thing, but it makes a difference.

In your biography, you'll need to explain the events before he was found in that cave as an orphan. Being orphaned and found as a baby is very cliche. If you want an exception to be made for your character, you're going to have to write a convincing story.

A macho dark elf just doesn't need to fit, and you cannot learn magic that easily. Again, if an exception is to be made you're going to have to describe the events that made him like this. You cannot just join a band of assassins. Any normal person qould feel very guilty killing people, but your character jumps right into it. He would need to be either very desperate or very twisted to do this. The second paragraph of your biography is incoherent.

In your first open reponse question, you need a lot more detail, including how exactly the combat happened and dialogue. And if the first thing your character does is loot some corpses like he's in Skyrim or something, he's a very, very disturbed person.

In your second open reponse question, you shouldn't only give what your character says. Give what they do and how the shopkeeper responds as well. We don't have gold, we have minas.

The link to your skin is not working.

I do not think you will be successful in getting a villain application accepted. Take my advice, and create a much less violent character.

[Rhisereld 317]

Moved to Denied Forum