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[Dontbepissed 18]

Minecraft Account Name: Dontbepissed

How old are you?: 15

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Eastern Standard Time/ Virginia

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, it is my native language

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am fourteen and love to role play on servers. I play other games and listen to Dubstep, and Metal.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 3 hours a day, about

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: I have been Role-playing for awhile now and play on other Minecraft role play servers. Role playing is talking through a different person

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I have role played in World of Warcraft, World of Synthesia, and Overture 4.5.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: Meta-gaming is knowing something that your in game character does not know. EX: Lets say someone tells his friend over Skype the location of a city. The person who heard this over Skype can't just walk over to the city (he doesn't know the location to) and say "Hi, I somehow new exactly where this was.. I just did, honestly."

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power-gaming is doing something that would not be possible in an roleplay situation. EX: A guy wants to kill someone so he walks up and busts open the door instantly without any chance to respond.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect it to friendly, creative, and active.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I play on World of Synthesia, and Overture I did not leave them for they are good.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes I have

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Yes I do

How did you hear about us?: Quixoticelixerr, and TMGMaXdAmAgE told me

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: No but I will after this is posted.

Have you posted this application on our minecraft forum thread yet? If not, just finish it up on here and then copy + paste is over there. (http://www.minecraft...-p-s-e-r-v-e-r/): No

In-Character:

Character Name: Krogar

What Race are you?: Orc

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): None

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Krogar was born on the scorching desert sand, his mother was a tough women and being orcish she did not mind. Krogar's father was a great hunter his family never went hungry. Krogar grew up watching his father hunt wild boar. He soon learned to wield and axe and take the meat off an animal. By his seventh spring Krogar went hunting with his father. Krogar's father was kind and often told him stories of Krug and how he defended the orcs. Krogar had dreams of fighting along side of Krug and gain land and glory for the orc.

When Krogar was coming upon his seventeenth spring his father was called to battle. The local chieftain assembled fifty orcs from the surrounding camps and called them together, they were to march on a small human settlement and were to burn and loot. The warriors never returned, when Krogar was of age to live by himself he journeyed to try to find his father. He found a giant pit full of forgotten bones. The skulls that were intact had fangs protruding from there jaws. After awhile of inspection he realized they were orcs and upon finding a sign he noticed it was the warriors sent to kill the settlement...

Krogar was furious he returned home and started to gather his things, he was blind to his thoughts. His mother soon saw and asked what he was doing after he explained poorly she realized what he saw and meant to do. She tried to stop him but to no avail, he left and started towards the last known location of the humans. After weeks Krogar found ruins of a small farming village, he thought this might of been where the attack happened but he was hit by confusion. If the orcs were killed how did they attack, he thought to himself. Krogar found no evidence of an orcish attack, usually orcs plant banners on the dead but there wasn't any.

Krogar spent two months there searching and looking but he found nothing, he was furious. After returning to his orcish camp his mother looked sick. She had to hunt by herself when her son left and had been hit by a boar. "Momo why lat hurt?" said Krogar. "I gut klomp by a boar Krogar, ima be flat soon." said Krogar's mother. "Nub, lat wunt momo, I su sorry!" said Krogar tiers filling in his eyes. Five days later he buried his mother and left the village. Krogar needs somewhere else to live, somewhere to forget his mother, Krogar needs humans to klomp.

What is your Character's ambitions?: To join the Krughai and by Krug's grace become a Warboss.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): My favorite tool is the axe.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Krogar is great at hunting and enjoys killing humans.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

Noticing that they are orcs he walks over to watch. Both orcs look up and see Krogar, be hungry they tell him to go away for they are hungry. Krogar doesn't listen and walks over pulling out his dual axes. The orcs respond by brandishing there weapons and run towards Krogar. When the fight starts the halfling attempts to run away, noticing this Krogar throws one of his axes; it slams into the halflings back shattering his spine. Krogar kills the weakest orc and lets the other one run. Krogar does not eat the halfling for its to small for him.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent "Ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Krogar uses his hands to ask what he does, when the man does not make an attempt to answer he gets angry. He tries again, but the man notices his anger and gets angry himself. It is getting bad quick Krogar starts and walk away but the man grabs his shoulder, this is a very bad idea. Krogar slams his shoulder in the mans nose and brandishes his axes. The man cries for help but is cut short by Krogars axes. Krogar hides in body as best as he can and leaves.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Krogar immediately tried to hack open the chest notices it was banded with iron. He couldn't hack it apart, so he searched for a key. After a long search he gave up and walked on.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

Krogar approaches wearily noticing they aren't armed. He walks up to a well dressed man and asks for some food, since the language barrier he had to use his hands. When he was brought some mushroom stew he eats and requests a place to stay after it is denied he slays the man and challenges the other men. When they denie he leaves feeling angry he couldn't spill more blood.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

Krogar does not pay attention, he has no love for humans and wishes this town burned any way. Krogar leaves and town and hears screams and sees the town burning, he smiles to himself and walks on.

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your have used incorrect formatting of the application.

You need to re-copy the application format. Make sure you have copied the text from the white box and not anywhere else. Also make sure that you do not delete anything in [these square brackets] as they are vital to keep the colour, boldness and size of the text. If you are having trouble because your entire application turns out in funny colours, make sure that you are writing your answers on a line underneath the question, as this is a common error and can mess up the formatting of your application.

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

You did not give valid examples of RP, or you did not describe how your examples are RP.

You need to describe to us how the games or locations you have talked about pertain to an RP environment.

Your definition of powergaming is half complete.

Write a bit more about it and give a better example to display your knowledge.

You need to have a character last name.

Unless you have a specific reason for why you do not have a last name of your character, you need to write a last name to show that you have put some in-depth thought processes into developing and creating your character.

Your biography needs a lot of improvement.

Orcs do not just run around klomping humans, they have more honor than any of the other races and they have purpose. They are not a wild ravaging pillaging race of moronic raiders. I reccomend you do some more research on Orcish culture.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You have not included any (or much) lore from the world of Asulon or the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. I would also like to note that the entire server escaped from Aegis about 25 in game years ago to move to Asulon, I suggest you do some research on this point. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come. √GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet; but why?

Some or all of your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Just because you are an orc does not make you evil. You would not kill a bruddah just "because" and you would not be able to kill a halfling without a villain application lest you get banned.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :) You are not allowed to apply again for a full 24 hours.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum