Parizal's 3Rd Application

[Eddywilson2 2117]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: Eddywilson2.

How old are you?: 14 years old.

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Eastern Time Zone/United States of America.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, I do.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a devote gamer who spends my time trying to make the game even better then it already is. I love role-playing and try hard to make the experience fun for everyone.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I will probably be on the server around 16 hours a week during the summer. During school I will probably be on a little less about 10 hours a week.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Role-Playing to me is the ability to act as a character entirely made up by you, and then do adventures with the character that would be seemingly impossible to do on your own. The great thing about this is you can give your character a new persona that is similar to your own but not completely the same.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I have played many RPGs including Runescape, World of War Craft, and Death Star. The only Role-Playing I have done is other Minecraft servers.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: I am pretty sure Meta-Gaming is the act of gaining knowledge out of a game then use it in the game. For example if you wanted to know how to make a stone block, and you find out from a friend outside the game that would be Meta-Gaming. Another example is if you had and old character and started a new one, and you can make crafting table with already knowing that would also be Meta-Gaming.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is: I am pretty sure Power-Emoting is the act of giving yourself power over another character that prevents the other character from doing something. For example Player 1 takes Player 2’s wallet. This is Power-Emoting because Player 2 cannot stop Player 1 if he already took his wallet.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I have already examined the server with the wandering soul application and found out the server is well kept, giant, and full of possibilities.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I have played on many team building servers (including some I have made) and left most of them due to the lack of possibilities and the constant hacking.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I have read all the rules and agree with them entirely.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: I agree to follow all the rules and agree to enforce them also.

How did you hear about us?: I heard about this server from my cousin who is an elite gamer.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: I have made two previous applications.

In-Character:

Character Name: Parizal

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) :Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Growing up in the frigid North was hard, and the men were harder. At the age of 12, Parizal’s father died in battle from a group of bandits. He had tried to stop them from attacking a merchant and was killed in the battle. All his family got back was a medal. That was the day Parizal first wanted to stop evil.

When Parizal turned 18 he decided he wanted to travel the world to be a knight. He had already mastered sword fighting and archery and wanted to kill the people who killed his father. Taking his few possessions he set off South to Solace to get more information on the expanding group of bandits. Parizal set off on his journey not knowing this would be the last time he would see his family again.

After a year of fruitless searching, Parizal is forced to come back home with nothing. Upon arrival Parizal sees the village gates torn down. Rushing inside he sees many of the houses in ruins. At his house Parizal sees his family dead on the ground. Howling in agony Parizal searches the village for anyone left in the village. All that was left was footprints leading South. With hate in his heart Parizal heads South to get his revenge.

What are your Character's ambitions?: Parizal’s ambitions are to fight evil and to start a city.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):Parizal's favorite tool is the bow because it is used to stop harm before it can even come close.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Parizal's most skilled talent is fighting with both a bow and sword because he weakens the enemy from far away then goes in to finish the job.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser: http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/147187/underarmor-warrior-fixed/

Other Information about your Character: Parizal is intent to avenge his family and village and will stop at nothing to do it.

Open-Response-Questions

Each and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

Parizal is looking for a job whilst walking down a road. On the way he sees two warriors harassing a small halfling. He hides behind a nearby tree and listens to what's said.

"If you don't give us your wheat and money we will kill you." says one of the warriors.

"Please don't take my things this is my whole harvest." cries the halfling. Hearing enough Parizal steps out from the tree and shoots a warning shot that whizzes by their heads.

"Leave the man alone. You bandit scum." says Parizal.

"Who's going to stop us there is two of us and one of you." the other bandit says as he steps away to face Parizal. Seeing the opportunity the halfling runs away to a safe distance. "Gar, now your going to get it." Yells the bandit. The two bandits charge. Parizal seeing no other option fires and arrow into each of the warriors. He backs away and gracefully whittles the warriors hearts down till they die.

"Thank you for saving me." the halfling says.

"Just doing what anyone would have done." says Parizal.

"I would like to make a deal with you," says the halfling "I need protection from now on. Are you willing to be my bodyguard."

Delighted Parizal agrees and continues on his journey.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

While walking done a street Parizal comes across a merchant selling goods. Needing some more stone Parizal walks over. "Hello there my friend, do you by any chance have some stone with you." says Parizal.

"I do, it is 10 minas a block. Times are hard, and I need to make a living." says the merchant.

"10 minas, that's robbery!" But needing stone Parizal agrees and buys 60 pieces. "Thank you for the stone, and I hope you have more lucking selling your goods." Parizal says and leaves.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Parizal is exploring in a forest when comes across a small hut. Running low on food he decides to see who's inside. The hut has no door and torches and looks completely abandoned except for a small chest. Looking inside Parizal sees 5 pieces of iron and a golden sword. Parizal reasons that even though the hut is empty no one would have left that there on purpose so Parizal leaves the items.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

Parizal is completely lost in the wilderness. He is starving, and it is almost night. While walking up a hill he comes across a small trading camp. With his last spurt of energy he makes his way down the hill into the camp. He is greeted in the common tongue, but the people are weary. Parizal approaches the leader of the camp. "Please sir, can you give me a place to stay and some food." says Parizal. The leader considers this.

"You can stay the night and be fed, but you must carry a message to Oren the nearest city." says the leader. Agreeing Parizal is fed and sleeps.

The next day Parizal approaches the leader to get the message. “I have thought about our deal and decided to change it.” says the leader. “You are going to be our slave.”

“You can’t do this. We had a deal.” says Parizal.

“I changed it.” says the leader. Seeing no other option Parizal attacks the leader. Luckily, he was unprepared and was killed easily. Silently Parizal sneaks out of the village and runs away to Oren to report the camp.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

One day after farming a member of the town guard comes up to Parizal asking for help because a group of bandits were raiding outside the town. The guard says there is a reward for any who help. Parizal agrees to help and they set off on their journey. While walking down the road Parizal smells smoke and takes some people to check it out. They come across a camp full of bandits. Silently Parizal gets reinforcements to begin the attack.

The town guard encircles the camp and takes care of any resistance. After cleaning up Parizal is asked to see the captain of the town guard. Walking in the tent the captain greets Parizal, "ello Parizal, we appreciate you helping us fight the bandits, and I have a reward for you." Says the captain. The captain then pulls out 1000 minas. "This is part of the loot," says the captain "it is yours now." Parizal1 is surprised by the amount of money realizes what he has to do.

"Keep the money and use it to defend the village more. This town has given me much, and now I must return the favor." Stunned the captain thanks Parizal, and leave they as friends.

Anything else you would like to say?: This is an awesome server and hope to get accepted!

[Dante 206]

Denied.

Though your application was very well written in most aspects, it was also lacking in a few that drew me to your denial.

Firstly one of your ORQ's included particular bouts of powergaming, even though well written. The ability to take down two adept bandits showing a great lack of effort is extremely "powergamey." Remember, you need not win every conflict, and losing something builds more character, making Parizal more realistic. Otherwise, your ORQ's were a masterpiece for the most part.

Though this is fairly minor, it's fairly substantial you fix. A chunk of stone if need be, but a block of stone is calling in Minecraft mechanics where it shouldn't be. Not a big fix.

The last change I'd like to see is the overbearing cliche of your back story. Your parents need not have been killed as a child, and you need not have faced so many tragedies in your younger years. I cannot suggest changing this enough. Use your creativity, and formulate a unique character.

Please wait 24 hours before re applying.

[Dante 206]

Moved to Denied Forum