The Tale Of A Young Alchemist

[Hydra 515]

As he awakens from his slumber his senses all tingle with the vivid colors and many fragrances.

He looks around noticing everything looks the same as it did before he went to sleep noticing his apple is missing he views the area and sees that a deer took his apple and he starts sketching the deer in his journal.

As he closes his journal he remembers when he was a young child,he can vividly remember the day when he had a calling to the forest,his parents were watching him as he went into the wild and started picking flowers and just soaking up the nature and all it holds.After that he had a natural connection to the forest his parents noticed his bond with the forest and decided to train him in the art of herberalism and alchemy,teaching him everything they new about alchemy and herberalism.His father was his main force pushing him to be a better alchemist by giving him journals,field-books and all everything else in his power to make his son better,while his mom would take him on trips to different regions showing and telling him about the flora and fauna.He was a prodigy his parents told him time again and again.He loved making potions,one evening he was trying to make a potion that you applied to the head to make your hair grow but accidentally he added lotus extract to the mixture and when he poured the tonic on his head his hair turned white and it never washed out but it suited him.Ten years later of vigorous training and learning he was working in a shop called the white phial under the apprenticeship of a master teaching him techniques but it was under lived his master was looking for eternal life as he was growing closer to his time,he tried an experiment on him self to make him immortal but it failed terribly he ended up dying in his quest as all other that have tried.So he took over the shop making decent minas but was not satisfying his needs of funding for herbs,so he gave the shop to his parents to keep for him until he was ready to take it back.

He started adventuring making friends seeing the sights of Asulon and collect herbs in his spare time.

Then he starts to doze off back to sleep.

[Ithric 70]

Honestly this is quite decent. There's a few grammatical mistakes, but I think it's quite evident that you're certainly trying. Punctuation and spelling aside, I can clearly see your idea and it's definitely interesting. Keep up the good work, because with practice, your writing will become more refined and those grammatical errors will be nothing but distant memories. :-D

[steelersfan1221 300]

Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly.